Make Lemonade
When events sour your days make lemonade37 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
Or, I might just decide to keep it all for myself! I like lemonade! Great sentiments summed up in a few short lines. We can't always control what others do, but we can decide how to react to them. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Or, I might just decide to keep it all for myself! I like lemonade! Great sentiments summed up in a few short lines. We can't always control what others do, but we can decide how to react to them. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Smiling back!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great contest entry AND motto to live by, Mystery Author. Good job with the prompt. Your few syllables, as required, speak volumes about how to handle those 'things' in life--not let them get you don. Thanks for haring and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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This is a great contest entry AND motto to live by, Mystery Author. Good job with the prompt. Your few syllables, as required, speak volumes about how to handle those 'things' in life--not let them get you don. Thanks for haring and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Jan, thank you!
Comment from jenintorre
This is a great naani poem.Your advice is priceless. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. I think this poem should win. I hope so.
. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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This is a great naani poem.Your advice is priceless. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. I think this poem should win. I hope so.
. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from rama devi
At first, when I saw your title, I actually rolled my eyes because it's already a famous saying an metaphor. But I'm glad I went ahead and clicked on it, as you've given it a fresh and whimsical spin by adding in catching, squeezing and serving them back! It extends the metaphor well! I also applaud the subtle assonance between world and hurls, the consonance of L in line one and the voicing overall. The punctuation choices serve the poem well, though I would have liked to have seen a stronger pause before the closing line--for dramatic effect. Here are a few ideas for your consideration:
When the world hurls lemons at you
catch them, squeeze them dry,
make lemonade...
serve it back!
OR
When the world hurls lemons at you
catch them, squeeze them dry,
make lemonade.
Serve it back!
OR
When the world hurls lemons at you
catch them, squeeze them dry,
make lemonade,
serve it back!
Etc.
Just a thought!
Good luck in the contest. This is a fine naani style poem.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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At first, when I saw your title, I actually rolled my eyes because it's already a famous saying an metaphor. But I'm glad I went ahead and clicked on it, as you've given it a fresh and whimsical spin by adding in catching, squeezing and serving them back! It extends the metaphor well! I also applaud the subtle assonance between world and hurls, the consonance of L in line one and the voicing overall. The punctuation choices serve the poem well, though I would have liked to have seen a stronger pause before the closing line--for dramatic effect. Here are a few ideas for your consideration:
When the world hurls lemons at you
catch them, squeeze them dry,
make lemonade...
serve it back!
OR
When the world hurls lemons at you
catch them, squeeze them dry,
make lemonade.
Serve it back!
OR
When the world hurls lemons at you
catch them, squeeze them dry,
make lemonade,
serve it back!
Etc.
Just a thought!
Good luck in the contest. This is a fine naani style poem.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Rd, a good review and suggestions action has been taken.
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Glad to be of help! :)
Comment from Sanku
True ,when the world hurls lemons at you ,make lemonade .You have added extra instruction to the usual saying .Give the lemonade back to those who have thrown it at them.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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True ,when the world hurls lemons at you ,make lemonade .You have added extra instruction to the usual saying .Give the lemonade back to those who have thrown it at them.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork.
-The syllable count
and topic are good.
-I like some of your
descriptions, like "hurls"
and "squeeze them dry."
-I also like the attitude
expressed in the last line-
don't take it, "serve it back!"
-Well done; good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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-Good artwork.
-The syllable count
and topic are good.
-I like some of your
descriptions, like "hurls"
and "squeeze them dry."
-I also like the attitude
expressed in the last line-
don't take it, "serve it back!"
-Well done; good luck!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I've not heard it put this way before, but sounds interesting. I'm not a huge fan of lemonade. But a lot of people like it, so it would be very easy to serve it back to them. =] Well done. Rox
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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I've not heard it put this way before, but sounds interesting. I'm not a huge fan of lemonade. But a lot of people like it, so it would be very easy to serve it back to them. =] Well done. Rox
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Joan E.
"Make lemons out of lemonade" is one of my favorite expressions. I thoroughly enjoyed your creating a Naani from it. Many thanks for your good advice. Smiles and best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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"Make lemons out of lemonade" is one of my favorite expressions. I thoroughly enjoyed your creating a Naani from it. Many thanks for your good advice. Smiles and best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Hitcher
Nice! I agree one hundred percent friend : )) We only have one life so there is no point in dwelling on the negative and a lot more to be gained enjoying life. Good luck !
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Nice! I agree one hundred percent friend : )) We only have one life so there is no point in dwelling on the negative and a lot more to be gained enjoying life. Good luck !
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Mark D. R.
Yep, that is the way to do it: serve it back. The tarter the lemons makes it even better
I do like your idea and your selected photograph reinforces your limited words.
Best wishes in this Naani contest.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Yep, that is the way to do it: serve it back. The tarter the lemons makes it even better
I do like your idea and your selected photograph reinforces your limited words.
Best wishes in this Naani contest.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you!
