Love Defined
What moves me34 total reviews
Comment from Mark D. R.
Sally
lovely photograph accompanied by 'a-one'derful few words
cheek is likely the best word choice but head would continue your rhyme for this posting (-;
as likely mentioned to you before, italic font is not my favorite - methinks it detracts a bit from other FS reviewers of the same
I recognize that it feels right for such a lovely poem, but readability is my issue
Mark
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Sally
lovely photograph accompanied by 'a-one'derful few words
cheek is likely the best word choice but head would continue your rhyme for this posting (-;
as likely mentioned to you before, italic font is not my favorite - methinks it detracts a bit from other FS reviewers of the same
I recognize that it feels right for such a lovely poem, but readability is my issue
Mark
Comment Written 04-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review and kind comments. I use blind helps (as I am near blind) to see this in edit format, so my finished work usually looks good to me. I will keep your comments in mind as I hate it when I have to switch to a magnifier to do my FanStory reviews. I appreciate your critique so much. Thanks, again.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally :)
Comment from royowen
There's nothing like a well cemented relationship such as the one you have with hubby Jackson Sally. The years only add to the divine connection and oneness that comes with the years and that special bond. Well done, your love will inspire the generations my friend, well done Sally, congratulations, great entry, good luck, blessings, Roy
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There's nothing like a well cemented relationship such as the one you have with hubby Jackson Sally. The years only add to the divine connection and oneness that comes with the years and that special bond. Well done, your love will inspire the generations my friend, well done Sally, congratulations, great entry, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Roy. It's always good to hear from you on this subject. I know we have had similar lives.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally :)
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Well done Sally,
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written four line poem about love that gets us out of bed in the morning. The songs and Melodies in your heart play without end. A picture tells a story of thousand words that all say a good connection between two lovers.
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A very well-written four line poem about love that gets us out of bed in the morning. The songs and Melodies in your heart play without end. A picture tells a story of thousand words that all say a good connection between two lovers.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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I can hardly remember my life without my sweet husband. Our 44th wedding anniversary is next week. I appreciate your kind review and sweet compliments, dear Sandra.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment from country ranch writer
Nice work up for this poem shows loving and caring just by looking at the photo. Love comes in many ways, like a smile, hug, or other offerings.
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Nice work up for this poem shows loving and caring just by looking at the photo. Love comes in many ways, like a smile, hug, or other offerings.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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You're exactly right. Love does come in millions of ways. Thank you so much for the sweet review, Barbara. Sending you my best today as always and thinking of you at Christmas,
Sally xo
Comment from Sugarray77
What a beautiful four line poem, Sally. Your smile that reflects the love you have for your honey makes my day. This is a nice entry and a winner for sure. Well done and good luck.
Melissa
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What a beautiful four line poem, Sally. Your smile that reflects the love you have for your honey makes my day. This is a nice entry and a winner for sure. Well done and good luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 04-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you, dear Mellisa. I do love that man. I appreciate your kind words and well wishes. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment from Barbaraj1
This is a good definition of love. A very nice four line poem. You make
a very nice looking couple. I like the rhyming. Good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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This is a good definition of love. A very nice four line poem. You make
a very nice looking couple. I like the rhyming. Good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much, dear Barbara. I appreciate your kind review and well wishes for the contest,
Sally xo
Comment from Bill Pinder
I enjoyed reading this four- line love poem that presents a clear message that is well said with a few well chosen words. God bless you and your husband and keep on writing and enjoy the Christmas season!
Bill
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I enjoyed reading this four- line love poem that presents a clear message that is well said with a few well chosen words. God bless you and your husband and keep on writing and enjoy the Christmas season!
Bill
Comment Written 04-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Merry Christmas to you and yours, Bill. I appreciate the wonderful review and kind comments. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Wonderful photo and
nice presentation, Sally.
-I like the fact it is in black
and white; it is stunning that way.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-The syllable count and
topic are good, as well
as the description.
-You show how important
love is in your life.
-The concluding line is very good, too.
-One small suggestion-
maybe play instead of played?
-A very good entry; good luck.
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-Wonderful photo and
nice presentation, Sally.
-I like the fact it is in black
and white; it is stunning that way.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-The syllable count and
topic are good, as well
as the description.
-You show how important
love is in your life.
-The concluding line is very good, too.
-One small suggestion-
maybe play instead of played?
-A very good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review and specifics. I just LOVE that about you and my dear Walkerman. He is much like you in his detailed reviews and feedback. I find this incredibly helpful as a writer. I changed played to play. I changed that line ten times, at least. LOL!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
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You are very welcome, Sally, and I am glad you appreciate the comments. I enjoy your story and sharing ideas. I can relate to changing lines so much; sometimes it is just one that doesn't seem to work!
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I just knew I wasn't alone. That's the wonderful benefit of having stellar reviewers like you. xo
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No, I don't think you are alone on FS. Everybody has issues in their writing at some point or another:)
Comment from Alex Rosel
This is a delightfully gentle poem, and the gentleness is befitting {thumbs up}.
I've read quite a few entries for this competition, and many have various aspects of love or romance as their theme. That doesn't detract from you poem, though. It's just an observation.
Best of luck with the competition {smiles}.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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This is a delightfully gentle poem, and the gentleness is befitting {thumbs up}.
I've read quite a few entries for this competition, and many have various aspects of love or romance as their theme. That doesn't detract from you poem, though. It's just an observation.
Best of luck with the competition {smiles}.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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I'm in a romantic mood as my 44th wedding anniversary is next week. I'm sure my writing will get even more syrupy. Be forewarned, dear Alex. I have hope for you, and for everyone on FanStory.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Look at the two of you!! :) I'm hear to tell you, my lady, that you could just post that picture and the title and everyone out here would just sigh and smile.... because it would be PERFECT!! ;) :) But then you had to go and add such a unique and wonderfully written contest offering to go with it.... just an all round winner, Lady Sal, no doubt! ;) Thanx for that warm smile this morning and thanx for sharing your heart (and Jackson!) with us! ;) Yvette
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Look at the two of you!! :) I'm hear to tell you, my lady, that you could just post that picture and the title and everyone out here would just sigh and smile.... because it would be PERFECT!! ;) :) But then you had to go and add such a unique and wonderfully written contest offering to go with it.... just an all round winner, Lady Sal, no doubt! ;) Thanx for that warm smile this morning and thanx for sharing your heart (and Jackson!) with us! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 04-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you, sweet friend. Your kind compliments made my day. Our 44th wedding anniversary is next week and I'm feeling quite romantic. Even me upcoming Nonet is syrupy. Oh dear!!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
