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Oceans of Rain Drops

The rain cycles from ocean to stream over and over

29 total reviews 
Comment from Gloria ....
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This is a most interesting thought, J. I suppose the water's surface could easily just appear as sky until those wonderful rain drops fall down. Also I didn't know trouts don't swim to the ocean until it rains. Neat.

I really like this and good luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019

reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
    Thank you!
Comment from Dancemom
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This is a good entry for the lune contest. I didn't realize this about trout. You used the proper syllable count and this is well written. Great job and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019

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    Thank you!
Comment from Ogden
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Although obviously true, I never thought of that. (And neither do the confused trout, blindly spawning in brackish waters.)
I think your poem makes for
an excellent proverb. (Substitute your name in "Confucius says...")

Ogden (Don)

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019

reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
    Thank you!
reply by Ogden on 06-Dec-2019
    You're welcome, J. (I suggest you d
    on't let this be another one that got away.)
    ;)
    Don
Comment from Alchera
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Well written within its given Lune Poem 5/3/5 scheme structure and its fishing true narrative storylined content. A great job. Luck for the contest.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2019

reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
    Thank you!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry, JLR. Great job with the syllable count per line. Your art choice is a nice pairing. I have one question--don't rivers and streams flow into the ocean? Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2019

reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
    Thank you! A trout never swims down to the oceans, they always return to the spawning ground, upstream.
Comment from Mastery
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Excellent Lune poetry here, Jim. I learned something with this also. Thank you for your notes of explanation, my friend. I like the way you presented these facts in the poem also. Bless you and Happy Holidays. Bob

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2019

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
    Bob, my good friend, thank you and may you have a Joyful Christmas!
reply by Mastery on 08-Dec-2019
    Thank you, my friend. You too! Bob
Comment from patcelaw
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This is a quite well written lune poem for the contest, I wish you the very best in the voting Merry Christmas.
Patricia

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2019

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
    Patricia, than you so much!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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Hello JLR, a well written Lune with a clear message, supported by your interesting author notes. This poetry form is not easy and you have given us a clear message with only thirteen syllables. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2019

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
    Dorothy, thank you so much!
Comment from Hitcher
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You obviously like trout fishing friend : )) You know I live by one of the greatest trout fishing lakes on the planet... Lake Taupo NZ, it is the biggest fresh water lake in the Southern hemisphere... 160km all the way round, it looks like an ocean : ))

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2019

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
    Hitcher, yes I am an avid fly fisherman, my granddad taught me when I was a little guy and I?ve been fishing waters all over North America, among my favorite are in Edmonton, Canada where we fly in on float plane for a week. Lake Taupo is huge and I imagine can get pretty nasty in inclement weather, but I can sit here and imagine the awe striking beauty. Thanks for the snapshot.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the LUne Poetry contest.
The idea that the rains turn ponds into oceans is fun.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2019

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
    Thank you!