Contradiction
Winter is both harrowing and breathtaking.32 total reviews
Comment from Phoenix Rising
A perfect picture to compliment your poetic imagery. Both chilly and picturesque. My pleasure to read and review.
soft white paths
stopping carefully
as we go
Phoenix Rising
Phoenix Rising
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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A perfect picture to compliment your poetic imagery. Both chilly and picturesque. My pleasure to read and review.
soft white paths
stopping carefully
as we go
Phoenix Rising
Phoenix Rising
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Very good! Thanks for nice review!
Comment from papa55mike
I love the winter up north, I'm from Dayton Ohio, but settled in Tennessee. We never see any snow. This poem is wonderfully written and I love the picture.
Good luck in the contest!
Merry Christmas and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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I love the winter up north, I'm from Dayton Ohio, but settled in Tennessee. We never see any snow. This poem is wonderfully written and I love the picture.
Good luck in the contest!
Merry Christmas and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Thank you!
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Thank you!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
You've described all of the elements of winter superbly with such a limited syllable count. I love the beautiful and descriptive wording and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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You've described all of the elements of winter superbly with such a limited syllable count. I love the beautiful and descriptive wording and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the great review!!
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Thank you for the great review!!
Comment from wanderlost
It's an interesting point of view that things of beauty are also often unwelcome to us, or at least very uncomfortable! Dry or wet, hot or cold, extremes of nature fascinate us. Thanks for sharing!
~W
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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It's an interesting point of view that things of beauty are also often unwelcome to us, or at least very uncomfortable! Dry or wet, hot or cold, extremes of nature fascinate us. Thanks for sharing!
~W
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Good points, thanks for the reviews.
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Good points, thanks for the reviews.
Comment from rama devi
I love the stark simplicity of this and the swift crescendo in pacing leading to the wonderfully witty and ironic (thus effective) closing line. Bravo. Superb word economy. Superb presentation.
I do think you might reconsider punctuation choices for stronger flow and dramatic effect. Here are some ideas:
Winter:
cold, icy, bitter--
lovely
or
Winter.
Cold, icy, bitter...
Lovely
or
Winter:
cold, icy, bitter...
Lovely
Almost a six...bravo!
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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I love the stark simplicity of this and the swift crescendo in pacing leading to the wonderfully witty and ironic (thus effective) closing line. Bravo. Superb word economy. Superb presentation.
I do think you might reconsider punctuation choices for stronger flow and dramatic effect. Here are some ideas:
Winter:
cold, icy, bitter--
lovely
or
Winter.
Cold, icy, bitter...
Lovely
or
Winter:
cold, icy, bitter...
Lovely
Almost a six...bravo!
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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Thank you. All great ideas. The contest already ended but I may change it to just make it a better poem!
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Happy to help! :)
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I came in 3rd in the contest. Maybe your punctuation would have helped!
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Congrats on placing! :)
Comment from Joan E.
I was born in Brooklyn, and although I miss seeing new, fallen snow, I do not relish the cold. Thank you for capturing the contradiction in this succinct poem with the matching artwork. Best wishes in the 2-5-2 contest- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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I was born in Brooklyn, and although I miss seeing new, fallen snow, I do not relish the cold. Thank you for capturing the contradiction in this succinct poem with the matching artwork. Best wishes in the 2-5-2 contest- Joan
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from June Sargent
Hard to believe something can be bitter and beautiful at the same time! But winter does fit that profile. As long as I can warm up inside, it's not too bad. A good fire and a cup of hot cider can go a long way! Lovely entry.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
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Hard to believe something can be bitter and beautiful at the same time! But winter does fit that profile. As long as I can warm up inside, it's not too bad. A good fire and a cup of hot cider can go a long way! Lovely entry.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
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Thank you!!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello anon, a well written 2/5/2, accurate in presentation and as you say both lovely (in appearance) and brutally cold and miserable. A good piece on a form that is not easy. Good Luck - regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
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Hello anon, a well written 2/5/2, accurate in presentation and as you say both lovely (in appearance) and brutally cold and miserable. A good piece on a form that is not easy. Good Luck - regards Dorothy
Comment Written 05-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much!
Comment from angel123
You pulled me in with the emotions of your message of winter loneliness, and your artwork choice enhanced your message. I enjoyed reading your poem and thank you for adding your author notes. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
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You pulled me in with the emotions of your message of winter loneliness, and your artwork choice enhanced your message. I enjoyed reading your poem and thank you for adding your author notes. Best wishes!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Bill Pinder
Great job with this contest entry about the contrast between the beauty of winter and the extreme harshness in some areas. you can enjoy the view in some cases, it can also kill you in another situation.
Bill
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
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Great job with this contest entry about the contrast between the beauty of winter and the extreme harshness in some areas. you can enjoy the view in some cases, it can also kill you in another situation.
Bill
Comment Written 05-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019
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How true! Thank you for the nice review.
