Lurking in the Shadows
A Rondeau for the Potlatch Challenge13 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You've described the cat's personality very well in this one, and your repeated phrase is perfect. They do tend to lurk around wherever and whenever they want. Great photo to go with an enjoyable Rondeau read.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2019
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You've described the cat's personality very well in this one, and your repeated phrase is perfect. They do tend to lurk around wherever and whenever they want. Great photo to go with an enjoyable Rondeau read.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 04-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this piece on the lurking cat!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very good Rondeau for the potlatch challenge, may your week and month be blessed as we head for the Christmas holidays.
Patricia
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2019
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This is a very good Rondeau for the potlatch challenge, may your week and month be blessed as we head for the Christmas holidays.
Patricia
Comment Written 03-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Joan E.
The statuesque photograph certainly is eyecatching and your description clearly conveys the cat's personality. I enjoyed your repeats to intensify the mood. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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The statuesque photograph certainly is eyecatching and your description clearly conveys the cat's personality. I enjoyed your repeats to intensify the mood. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you for sharing your insights!
Comment from Bill Schott
This rondeau, Lurking in the Shadows, has the proper formatting and describes well the mousing cat which slips from darkened spot to shadowy place in search of prey.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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This rondeau, Lurking in the Shadows, has the proper formatting and describes well the mousing cat which slips from darkened spot to shadowy place in search of prey.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You created an apt picture of a cat who 'lurks around,' and of course this is exactly what they do and they prowl in places dogs don't go and take chances with their nine lives. I enjoyed your well metered and rhymes tribute to the cat, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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You created an apt picture of a cat who 'lurks around,' and of course this is exactly what they do and they prowl in places dogs don't go and take chances with their nine lives. I enjoyed your well metered and rhymes tribute to the cat, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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So glad you liked this piece about cats lurking in the shadows!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL!! Yes, I am thoroughly convinced that, even within the walls of my own home, my girls (two large, nutty felines!!) have already forgotten what they did on one side of a room once they are exiting that same room... just snap your fingers and they'll go from slinking to frozen and then to acting like, 'yeah, I meant to do that'...! ;) :) LOL!! :) ;) Just love this one, June, as not only is your Rondeau well-done, but it's topic can't help but put a grin on your reader's face with your phrases and imagery!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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LOL!! Yes, I am thoroughly convinced that, even within the walls of my own home, my girls (two large, nutty felines!!) have already forgotten what they did on one side of a room once they are exiting that same room... just snap your fingers and they'll go from slinking to frozen and then to acting like, 'yeah, I meant to do that'...! ;) :) LOL!! :) ;) Just love this one, June, as not only is your Rondeau well-done, but it's topic can't help but put a grin on your reader's face with your phrases and imagery!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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You obviously know your cats! Glad you enjoyed this piece.
Comment from Barbaraj1
I am not a cat lover and this one turns me off. But your poem was excellent. I never tried a rondeau, but yours is really good. Your imagery
is vivid.
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I am not a cat lover and this one turns me off. But your poem was excellent. I never tried a rondeau, but yours is really good. Your imagery
is vivid.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Rondeau about the cat lurking in the shadows waiting for the perfect moment to attack the prey that she thinks will be the most fun.
NS. Your first stanza should have five full lines of eighth syllables rhyming b,b,c,c,b. The refrain of the first four syllables should only be used in stanza two and three.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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A very well-written Rondeau about the cat lurking in the shadows waiting for the perfect moment to attack the prey that she thinks will be the most fun.
NS. Your first stanza should have five full lines of eighth syllables rhyming b,b,c,c,b. The refrain of the first four syllables should only be used in stanza two and three.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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Thanks for the heads up on the first stanza. I have revised it.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your rondeau is skillfully-composed, vividly descriptive of the nature of the lurking cat, and truly delightful. Yes, the cat does as he/she pleases.
I'd hate for my life to depend upon my ability to train one. LOL!
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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Your rondeau is skillfully-composed, vividly descriptive of the nature of the lurking cat, and truly delightful. Yes, the cat does as he/she pleases.
I'd hate for my life to depend upon my ability to train one. LOL!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this little romp with our neighborhood cat!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your rondeau, June. Good job on its style. I was right there with the dog on her adventure. Your lines flow well, the rhymes are good, and the imagery is great, too. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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I enjoyed your rondeau, June. Good job on its style. I was right there with the dog on her adventure. Your lines flow well, the rhymes are good, and the imagery is great, too. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging feedback. It was a fun challenge.
