Reading In The Park
A lune poem (5-3-5 syllables)19 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
You describe a very tranquil scene in your 5-7-5 poem. Great imagery and very. Well chosen artwork. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2019
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You describe a very tranquil scene in your 5-7-5 poem. Great imagery and very. Well chosen artwork. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Other reviewers noted the play on words with leaves referring both to tree leaves and book leaves. Neat sound sensory references. Nice photo. Super lune! Might also note long 'e' assonance in 'reading' and 'leaves' as emphasized words.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2019
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Other reviewers noted the play on words with leaves referring both to tree leaves and book leaves. Neat sound sensory references. Nice photo. Super lune! Might also note long 'e' assonance in 'reading' and 'leaves' as emphasized words.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2019
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Thanks for your review and positive comments!
Comment from Alex Rosel
I liked this entry. Your use of "leaves rustle" is closely linked to the delight of turning a page {thumbs up}.
It's a nice poem, and it's nicely presented!
Here's wishing you the best of luck when the contest is judged {smiles}.
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I liked this entry. Your use of "leaves rustle" is closely linked to the delight of turning a page {thumbs up}.
It's a nice poem, and it's nicely presented!
Here's wishing you the best of luck when the contest is judged {smiles}.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a technically sound Lune Poem with correct line and syllable count throughout. The content is clever in its play off the connection between "leaves" and "pages". Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2019
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a technically sound Lune Poem with correct line and syllable count throughout. The content is clever in its play off the connection between "leaves" and "pages". Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2019
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Thanks for your review and positive comments!
Comment from RodG
Your picture perfectly compliments your lune. Easy to visualize the scene where the Speaker sits among the rustling leaves to read. The R-alliteration and S's mimic the rustling leaves. Rod
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Your picture perfectly compliments your lune. Easy to visualize the scene where the Speaker sits among the rustling leaves to read. The R-alliteration and S's mimic the rustling leaves. Rod
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
Comment from Bill Schott
This lune, Reading in the Park, has the correct format and finds the atmosphere of nature lends realism to the depth one dives in reading. When reading is as natural as summer breeze, life is a walk in the park.
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This lune, Reading in the Park, has the correct format and finds the atmosphere of nature lends realism to the depth one dives in reading. When reading is as natural as summer breeze, life is a walk in the park.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A peaceful moment to read almond the leaves and I enjoyed your lune Lisa, having a quiet moment in the park even though the leaves are noisy! The pages will rustle up a story. Love Dolly x
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A peaceful moment to read almond the leaves and I enjoyed your lune Lisa, having a quiet moment in the park even though the leaves are noisy! The pages will rustle up a story. Love Dolly x
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Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
Comment from Ogden
A typical, everyday Autumn scene became estimable poetry, with some input from an astute observer - the individual responsible for this work I'm reviewing.
:o)
Don
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A typical, everyday Autumn scene became estimable poetry, with some input from an astute observer - the individual responsible for this work I'm reviewing.
:o)
Don
Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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Why thank you, kind sir. I see you have impeccable discernment in bestowing 6 stars.
In other words, thanks for the terrific review.
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Another Whoda thunk it was you?!
You're totally welcome, formerly anonymous poet.
xoxo
Don
Comment from Patty Palmer
Sitting in the park, leaning against a tree, and reading a good book! The breeze is soft against the face, hair whipping in the wind. A heavenly moment for sure!
patty
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Sitting in the park, leaning against a tree, and reading a good book! The breeze is soft against the face, hair whipping in the wind. A heavenly moment for sure!
patty
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Comment Written 02-Dec-2019
