Busy Being Busy
a poem28 total reviews
Comment from thepoetess59
I really loved this poem that you wrote. It was beautifully done. It was well written. There was nothing that I did not like. I hope to read more of your work.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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I really loved this poem that you wrote. It was beautifully done. It was well written. There was nothing that I did not like. I hope to read more of your work.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Wow. Thank you so much for this radiant exceptional rating and review. I appreciate your kind words. I am happy you loved it and found it to be well written. I look forward to you reading my future posts, as well. Have a great weekend.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's so true. No matter how busy you are, you need to make time for the simple things. Time spent in nature is not wasted. We all need time to breathe. Not taking time to de-stress tales its toll.
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That's so true. No matter how busy you are, you need to make time for the simple things. Time spent in nature is not wasted. We all need time to breathe. Not taking time to de-stress tales its toll.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Cindy. I like your 'take' on the consequences of not making time to relax and unwind. It will take its toll if you don't. Thank you for your thoughtful review and excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Jesse, this is very good. The content is well written with strong meaning and emotion. Good rhyme and rhythm maintained throughout the poem. It is very poetic and your final line, especially, hammers home a true statement - very true, whether we want it or not, we cannot avoid it. Well done - regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Hello Jesse, this is very good. The content is well written with strong meaning and emotion. Good rhyme and rhythm maintained throughout the poem. It is very poetic and your final line, especially, hammers home a true statement - very true, whether we want it or not, we cannot avoid it. Well done - regards Dorothy
Comment Written 29-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Hello Dorothy. I am glad you thought it was poetic, with good rhyme and rhythm throughout. Thank you for choosing the line which spoke to you the most. If we lose precious time, it is gone forever. Thank you for your kind comments. I appreciate your insightful review and excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Therese Caron
This poem is right on the spot. We all race around,trying to achieve things and stay on top of everything. We cannot ever get that time back, especially when it involves children. There is nothing in the world like walking along the ocean with a small child.Even that small child realize how small he really is when near the ocean. This is also true of every day things. You hit the nail right on the head and you also write beautifully. Great job.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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This poem is right on the spot. We all race around,trying to achieve things and stay on top of everything. We cannot ever get that time back, especially when it involves children. There is nothing in the world like walking along the ocean with a small child.Even that small child realize how small he really is when near the ocean. This is also true of every day things. You hit the nail right on the head and you also write beautifully. Great job.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Therese, for your insightful perspective on the meaning of this. I especially like that you include time spent with children, which if lost, can never return. It will be lost forever. Children grow so quickly and we can miss it, if we're too involved with everyday chores, etc. I am glad we are in agreement, and I thank you for the kind words of encouragement.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Diana L Crawford
This is beautiful. Such truth in that we often spend far too much time being busy. But as you excellently describe the peacefulness of the lapping waves, we need to stop and feel that peace to strengthen and refresh ourselves! Love the colors and picture presentation also. xoxo
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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This is beautiful. Such truth in that we often spend far too much time being busy. But as you excellently describe the peacefulness of the lapping waves, we need to stop and feel that peace to strengthen and refresh ourselves! Love the colors and picture presentation also. xoxo
Comment Written 29-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Diana. You've got it spot on. I can tell you see what I see, when people are too busy for busy's sake. Thank you for choosing the lines which speak to you the most, and for loving and noticing the colors and picture. Your kind words are appreciated. Thank you for this excellent review and rating.
Take care, Jesse
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I enjoyed it very much! xoxo
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a gentle and yes soothing offering, Jesse -- your use of that repeated rhyme almost gives the overall 'feel' of the repeated waves on the ocean and tie into the whole 'relaxation' notion of your write here -- love it! Thanx much, sir, for sharing such a gift of 'solace' in the written word!! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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What a gentle and yes soothing offering, Jesse -- your use of that repeated rhyme almost gives the overall 'feel' of the repeated waves on the ocean and tie into the whole 'relaxation' notion of your write here -- love it! Thanx much, sir, for sharing such a gift of 'solace' in the written word!! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 29-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Hi Yvette. I love your unique perspective of the soothing nature of the repeated rhyme, giving a "feel" of repeating waves. You always seem to see another dimension not seen by others, when it comes to my poetry. I love your phrase, "a gift of 'solace' in the written word!" Thanks for the kind comments. Have a relaxing weekend, my friend.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
to keep the meter I would say
'the salve of love's devotion
reaches depths you can't believe'
Just an idea, the whole piece is very well thought out and the reasoning compliments the content through the whole piece. No forced rhyming. You could even divide it into 4442.
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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to keep the meter I would say
'the salve of love's devotion
reaches depths you can't believe'
Just an idea, the whole piece is very well thought out and the reasoning compliments the content through the whole piece. No forced rhyming. You could even divide it into 4442.
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Comment Written 29-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Barb, for the nice suggestions. I will consider what you offer, 'to keep the meter'. I appreciate your 'take' on this, and that you see "no forced rhyming". Thank you for your kind comments and suggestions. And, thank you for the excellent rating and review.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This has a lovely lyrical quality to it as the rhyme and meter move fluidly end to end just like the river's rhythmic movement toward the sea. You deliver an important message as s many today not only don't stop to smell the roses - they do not even see them. Quiet communion with God's creation is vital to inner peace for it is in those moments we hear Him clearest. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This has a lovely lyrical quality to it as the rhyme and meter move fluidly end to end just like the river's rhythmic movement toward the sea. You deliver an important message as s many today not only don't stop to smell the roses - they do not even see them. Quiet communion with God's creation is vital to inner peace for it is in those moments we hear Him clearest. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
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Comment Written 29-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much for the high regard you express for the rhyme and meter moving fluidly end to end in this poem. I agree that many people don't even see the roses anymore. Thank you for sharing, and for the wonderful review and excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
