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Get thee to a nunnery, go.

Chased, yet chaste

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Comment from Thomas Bowling
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This a funny play on words. Your poem is an excellent contest entry and the picture perfectly illustrates it. You should do very well in the voting booth.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
    Thanks, Thomas. I appreciate your review and supportive comments. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from dragonpoet
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This 5-7-5 tells of men chasing the wrong pretty woman. She chooses to be a nun. A wife to the Church and not to a man.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
    Thanks, Joan. I appreciate your review and comments. All good wishes, Tony
reply by dragonpoet on 29-Nov-2019
    You're welcome on both accounts, Tony
    Joan
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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I think you had fun using chase/unchastened and chaste in this 5-7-5 poem Tony. Very cleverly done, leaves me with a smile,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
    Thanks, Valda. Yes, just a bit of fun playing with words. All the best, Tony
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hello Tony. You certainly met the standard of a 5-7-5 poem but your words are golden. This is an excellent use of the language to make both an obvious and subtle point at the same time. I like it a lot. Good luck in the contest. I'll be looking for you there. Robert


 Comment Written 27-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
    Thanks, Robert. I appreciate your positive comments and the sixth star. All good wishes, Tony
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 28-Nov-2019
    You're welcome.
Comment from Willosa
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Great play on words in this short piece. Clever and creative. Like the presentation with the artwork too. Good luck with the contest.
I too live on the Fleurieu Peninsula, how lucky are we?

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
    Thanks, Willosa. I appreciate your review and comments. Good to see another South Australian here on FS. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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A very clever play on words that give one insight into the meaning. The nunnery is a safe haven, yet that is not the intention of those who enter.
A lovely picture cinches the presentation.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019
    Thank you, Raffaelina. I appreciate your review and wise words. I have the utmost respect for those who give their lives to the service of God. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
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Clever little piece. It is funny the way you told it. I liked the image and presentation. It certainly met the requirements of the contest. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Blessings. ~Brenda

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019
    Thank you very much, Brenda. I appreciate your review and your good wishes. All the best, Tony
Comment from Bill Pinder
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Good job with this humorous short poem about the nunnery. That's a word not used very often. Don't bump into many nuns either. Good variation from your usual spy story.
Bill

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019
    Thank you very much, Bill. I appreciate your supportive comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from AvL
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We must assume that tfawcus intends "nunnery," in this context, not to be a synonym for "convent:" right, Mr. t? I sense that this word is used in its Shakespearean sense, as Hamlet employs it, in his eponymous tragedy. "Nunnery," BTW, is a pretty good euphemism for a house of ill- repute; however, my all-time favorite is "riding-academy." Tally ho!

But back to the poem! How has our heroine, having chosen to be unchastened/deflowered, become chaste once again, as a bride of Christ? Is this a case of divine intervention, or is our man Tony playing word-games with us? Could "unchastened" mean both "made unchaste" and "uncriticized," or "not taken to task?" Hey, this guy is good!

In any case, this reviewer was educated by very strict, no-nonsense Dominican nuns who would not brook this kind of bawdy language. If she were still living, Sister Thomas Aquinas -- a real nun -- would give Master fawcus a sharp rap on the knuckles with her much-feared ruler. This critic, on the other hand, chooses to give our man six stars, despite his un-convent-ial "habits, and his penetrating humor. Kudos!


AvL

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
    Six stars are much to be preferred over a rap on the knuckles by Sister Thomas! Thank you very much. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Cindy Warren
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Poor girl, I wonder what happened to her that she would want to become a nun. Perhaps the men chasing her were scary. Or maybe she's gay. I suspect in the past many people, both male and female chose the chaste life for that reason, before it was okay to be who they were. Cute pun.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
    Thanks for your review and comments, Cindy. Who knows why anyone would want to become a nun? All good wishes, Tony.