The Blessing of the Snow
wonderment22 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
The colour white brings to mind something pure ..and something that is pure has a positive, relaxing effect on our being.
Being emerged in a world of snow is definitely a very magical, even heavenly experience that calms.
I don't usually look at the format required ..for once I did and I think you did a great job in writing something meaningful but at the same time with the two rhymes needed in each 6 syllable sentences.
It's quite a demanding format..well done.
PS. I was wondering if you were not well but then I read your Holiday entry below.
I hope you had a lovely Thanks Giving Day even though my heart goes out to the turkey.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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The colour white brings to mind something pure ..and something that is pure has a positive, relaxing effect on our being.
Being emerged in a world of snow is definitely a very magical, even heavenly experience that calms.
I don't usually look at the format required ..for once I did and I think you did a great job in writing something meaningful but at the same time with the two rhymes needed in each 6 syllable sentences.
It's quite a demanding format..well done.
PS. I was wondering if you were not well but then I read your Holiday entry below.
I hope you had a lovely Thanks Giving Day even though my heart goes out to the turkey.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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Hello Franca. I am doing fine and we have just finished seeing all of the guests off... several spent the week here. I really appreciate your comments and we had a wonderful Thanksgiving holiday. Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Awe, Melissa, this is lovely and you show so many emotions in just two lines. Not an easy thing to achieve. I loved your poem and I wish you all the best in the contest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Awe, Melissa, this is lovely and you show so many emotions in just two lines. Not an easy thing to achieve. I loved your poem and I wish you all the best in the contest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 27-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much, Ulla.
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
Sometimes I feel this in light rain after a long dry spell. I like the snow more after it falls than while it is falling. An unmarred snowy yard is so
serene and evergreen trees covered in snow are beautiful.
Good luck and keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Sometimes I feel this in light rain after a long dry spell. I like the snow more after it falls than while it is falling. An unmarred snowy yard is so
serene and evergreen trees covered in snow are beautiful.
Good luck and keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 27-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Hello Joan. Thank you very much!!
Melissa
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Hi Melissa.
You are most kindly welcome.
Joan
Comment from kahpot
I would love to see snow ( for real) this wonderful two line poem really makes me think I am missing out on something, I love the artwork and the thought of snow falling on and around me, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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I would love to see snow ( for real) this wonderful two line poem really makes me think I am missing out on something, I love the artwork and the thought of snow falling on and around me, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Thank you kah... I wish you buckets of snow... and soon!! :)
Melissa
Comment from Therese Caron
What a lovely two line poem. It is sometimes so hard to express what you want to say when you have the limited words or the limited syllables. You've done a beautiful job of this and I absolutely love the picture you chose. So many people complain about winter and although it can be daunting at times, I love it. Beautiful work.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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What a lovely two line poem. It is sometimes so hard to express what you want to say when you have the limited words or the limited syllables. You've done a beautiful job of this and I absolutely love the picture you chose. So many people complain about winter and although it can be daunting at times, I love it. Beautiful work.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much, Therese!!
Melissa
Comment from royowen
Well done, we don't have the benefit of ever knowing what a snowflake quite feels like, (although we've been to NY at Christmas time) I think you're missing the internal rhyme, suggestion. "As snowflakes kiss my skin,
I feel joy's bliss within." Good luck Melissa, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Well done, we don't have the benefit of ever knowing what a snowflake quite feels like, (although we've been to NY at Christmas time) I think you're missing the internal rhyme, suggestion. "As snowflakes kiss my skin,
I feel joy's bliss within." Good luck Melissa, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Hi Roy... thanks so much. I thought that snowflakes and breaks provide that internal rhyme... don?t they?
Melissa
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Of course they do, silly me Melissa, Early mornings, sheesh.
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your rhyme and even a bit of alliteration in your Two-Line Poem. Your picture selection is just right! Thank you for sharing the snow, since we don't get any in Southern California. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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I enjoyed your rhyme and even a bit of alliteration in your Two-Line Poem. Your picture selection is just right! Thank you for sharing the snow, since we don't get any in Southern California. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Hi Joan.. I hope you are able to get a glimpse of snow at some point this winter... its magical!! :)
Melissa
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I spoke too soon?we are actually getting snow right now in the mountains and desert! I?ve seen it on television. Enjoy the magic- Joan
Comment from Mistydawn
You're right, a snowflake touching your cheek does have an odd, yet calming effect. Maybe it's the way it flutters against your skin? Like a kiss of an angel? Your poem is well-written, your great word choice description takes the reader back to when they felt snowflakes on their skin. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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You're right, a snowflake touching your cheek does have an odd, yet calming effect. Maybe it's the way it flutters against your skin? Like a kiss of an angel? Your poem is well-written, your great word choice description takes the reader back to when they felt snowflakes on their skin. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much, Misty!!
Melissa
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Snowfalls are beautiful and under certain conditions (a good temperature) walking during the downfall is a very calming and exhilarating experience. So your succinct message and beautiful art have the same calming effect. Thank you for the display it is beautiful.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Snowfalls are beautiful and under certain conditions (a good temperature) walking during the downfall is a very calming and exhilarating experience. So your succinct message and beautiful art have the same calming effect. Thank you for the display it is beautiful.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much, Raffaelina!!
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your two-line poem is really lovely, conveying a message about the power of nature to affect our moods. I gave a 4 because your poem lacks the internal rhyme required for the essence poem.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Your two-line poem is really lovely, conveying a message about the power of nature to affect our moods. I gave a 4 because your poem lacks the internal rhyme required for the essence poem.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
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Hi Janice... I thank you for the lovely review.... but breaks and snowflakes provide that internal rhyme ... don?t they?
Melissa
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Yes, you do have internal rhyme! I apologize for my mistake. I've already changed the rating to a 5! Janice
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Thanks... smiles
