Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This is a nicely done metaphoric poem using the moon and its pull to explain love. If both man and woman are each other's light in thee darkness that is true and lasting love.
Keep writing
Happy Holidays.
Joan

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2019

Thanks very much, Joan. Happy holidays to you as well. Cheers, Craig

reply by dragonpoet on 04-Dec-2019

You aer most kindly welcome, Craig
Joan

Comment from juliaSjames

Excellent

Kudos on your second place win in the contest. This was a strong contender, even to the clever title with its multilayered meanings.

I enjoyed the way you worked out and extended the analogy in a way that made poetic, logical, emotional and yes ... spiritual sense.

I imagine you worked hard on its composition. And yet the sonnet is not forced. It flows with smooth power.

A beautiful write, Craig.

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019

Thanks for the most lovely comments, Julia. They are really appreciated. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Dawn Munro

Exceptional

I seldom read something that makes me gush, unless it's about babies, puppies, kitties or ... well, you know. (lol) But your sonnet, Craig, is one that has me gushing -- that third stanza especially (your volta) not only taught me something, it made your closing couplet all the more dramatic and sweet... Just lovely. I'm all warm inside. :) Seriously beautiful.
*sigh*

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019

Thanks so much for the wonderful comments, Dawn. And thanks, too, for the lovely glowing stars. Most grateful for both. Cheers, Craig

reply by Dawn Munro on 02-Dec-2019

You are very welcome. An exceptional poem, Craig. Congratulations, too. Well-deserved win!

Comment from MissMerri

Exceptional

This is an exceptional poem, thoughtful and deep and quite beautiful in my opinion. I liked how you drew the parallel between the moon and its borrowed light and the light and warmth cherished from your lover. The tug of the moon also mirrors the tug of her love upon your heart. That you would be invisible without her light, seems clear. I am greatly impressed that you could pour so much into a 14 line sonnet. The form is perfect and the message is beautiful. Congratulations. It definitely deserves a ribbon in this contest.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019

Thanks so much for the very kind and thoughtful comments, MM, and for the delightful shiny stars. Congratulations on your well-deserved success with your own wonderful sonnet. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Debbie Pope

Exceptional

I've read this love poem on three different days now. Every time I postponed my review, because I wanted to think about it some more. I was reading your second stanza wrong, and I knew that I was doing so. But I liked my version, so I wouldn't give it up. In my version, the man and woman are a satellite together, guiding others on their way.
That is definitely where I am in my life. When I first read your poem, I was in New York City visiting my son and his new wife. To go to New York, I left behind a grandson in Birmingham who doesn't like me to leave for a day. While in New York, I was called daily by my baby daughter who lives in Texas. These people, who we have guided since their birth, feel our loss when we are away. That thought gives me great comfort.
So, I apologize for making your lovely sonnet my own. I enjoyed it so much.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019

It's a huge compliment to say that you feel my little sonnet is so relatable to your own life, Debbie. Thank you. Clearly your interaction with, and influence over, your adult children and grandchildren is represented. However, maybe it's not such a stretch to believe the analogy also fits the relationship between you and your husband. I suspect that in most successful relationships there is an element of drawing upon each other for strength and energy. I don't feel it has to be all one benefiting from the other.

I'm glad you enjoyed, and wherever you are for Thanksgiving, I hope you have a happy one with those you love.

Cheers,
Craig

reply by Debbie Pope on 27-Nov-2019

What wonderful sentiments, Craig. I think that my family would agree with you.
I hope that you have a wonderful Thanksgiving Day as well. What will be your main course?

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019

We don't celebrate Thanksgiving in Australia, Debbie (a lack of pilgrims or something, I guess). But if we did, I guess it would have to be Tofurkey :)

reply by Debbie Pope on 27-Nov-2019

Of course they don't, but your well wishes set me wondering. This is the title that popped up when I googled the question-"Do Australians celebrate Thanksgiving."
Turkey demand up as Australians celebrate Thanksgiving.
I swear that's what popped up. I thought "I'm surprised. Wow my research is done. That was easy." I looked no further.

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019

Hmmmm, well, maybe it's started being picked up of late, Debbie. Wouldn't surprise me. But historically, it's not something we do :)

reply by Debbie Pope on 27-Nov-2019

Of course it's not. I am embarrassed. I think the article is about some random island that was settled by some Americans.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Craig, it's a lovely love poem you've penned here. The sonnet is by far my favourite poet form and you've composed a lovely one. I hope you'll do well with judges. All best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019

Thanks so much for the kind words and good wishes, Ulla. Both are greatly appreciated :) Craig

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Well done, Craig. This is a lovely sonnet about our beautiful old moon. I was impressed by the third stanza...

And yet, the moon's no light to call its own;
it borrows all its power from the sun.
Without a greater source, it's all alone--
a sad and lifeless body on the run.

I suggest it would be better to say (it has) in place of (the Moon's). We know you are talking about the moon. Just a suggestion.Again, well done. Nancy:)

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019

You know, Nancy, I had exactly that thought myself, thinking 'moon's' was a bit clunky. I actually changed it to 'it has'. Then, I thought it was too much to have the word 'it' or 'its' five times in four lines. I will definitely see if I can come up with a better solution. Thanks for bringing it forward, and for the kind comments.

Craig

reply by nancy_e_davis on 27-Nov-2019

How about....
and yet, the moon's soft light is not it's own.
I can't see how you can leave it's out of the sentence. Lovely poem Craig. Nancy

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

OH a very well done sonnet for the contest. YOu took the power of the moon, adding in the second, the force on man. Then in the third, gave the power to the sun where it belonged, but then in the couplets, put the two together to make it complete for love

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019

Thanks so much for the kind comments, much appreciated :) Craig

Comment from catch22

Exceptional

Hi Craig, what a lovely sonnet about how the connections we make with our loved ones are what sustain and motivate us to endure life's ups and downs. I loved the argument put forth, that connections act like grounding tethers to the outside world and infuse our lives with meaning. Lovely write and best in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019

Thanks so much, Pam. I'm grateful for the kind wishes, the delightful comments and the lovely gift of stars. Much appreciated, Craig

Comment from zanya

Excellent

It's a haunting metaphorical reflection on love, light and guidance in our lives -the couplet sums up the sentiments beautifully - such a superb visual to accompany

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019

Thanks so much for the lovely comments. They're much appreciated. Craig