Queen of His Heart
A Ballad for Potlatch Poetry27 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You've told a great tale of overcoming that gambling addiction. I loved the way you wrote,
One day, he drew the winning card
and turned it up to see
his dear one's face. Nice Ballad Yvonne, enjoyed it,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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You've told a great tale of overcoming that gambling addiction. I loved the way you wrote,
One day, he drew the winning card
and turned it up to see
his dear one's face. Nice Ballad Yvonne, enjoyed it,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 28-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Valda.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Yvonne. Nice job on this ballad style poem. Thank you for including information on it. I DO like the straightforward manner of this form. Well described. Marilyn
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Hi Yvonne. Nice job on this ballad style poem. Thank you for including information on it. I DO like the straightforward manner of this form. Well described. Marilyn
Comment Written 27-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Marilyn. I do, too.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Queen of His Heart, has a straight-forward meter that tells the story of the widower who caved to the worldly vices he had vowed to avoid. Redemption and change can find even the most lost.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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This poem, Queen of His Heart, has a straight-forward meter that tells the story of the widower who caved to the worldly vices he had vowed to avoid. Redemption and change can find even the most lost.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thank you for reviewing, Bill.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is really a gripping poem, Yvonne. Drinking and gambling well any addiction that furnishes immediate highs and lows, no pun intended, are very hard to beat.
Excellent ballad and the warning is one for all to heed.
Thank you for sharing and Happy Thanksgiving to you. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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This is really a gripping poem, Yvonne. Drinking and gambling well any addiction that furnishes immediate highs and lows, no pun intended, are very hard to beat.
Excellent ballad and the warning is one for all to heed.
Thank you for sharing and Happy Thanksgiving to you. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Gloria. Happy Thanksgiving to you. You don't celebrate the day in Canada, do you?
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We celebrated Thanksgiving Day on October 13th this year. Have a slice of pumpkin pie for me. It's my favourite. Yum.
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Will do!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OH wow and excellent ballad and one that turned out good instead of sad or tragic. Great rhyme and meter and flowed in an excellent story line and content
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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OH wow and excellent ballad and one that turned out good instead of sad or tragic. Great rhyme and meter and flowed in an excellent story line and content
Comment Written 24-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much for this lovely review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvonne, Your poem is such a pleasure to read. I wish I could write you a proper review, but, alas, I don't anything about meters. Pour excuse you may think, but that's how it is. I love reading poetry, though. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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Hi Yvonne, Your poem is such a pleasure to read. I wish I could write you a proper review, but, alas, I don't anything about meters. Pour excuse you may think, but that's how it is. I love reading poetry, though. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 24-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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Knowing you liked it is enough for me. Thanks, Ulla.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Hi Yvonne this is just great. Your lines read smoothly with excellent rhymes. I love your story, all of it, the beginning,the middle, and the end. Great presentation with the picture of the cards. He forgot but love wins out in the end. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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Hi Yvonne this is just great. Your lines read smoothly with excellent rhymes. I love your story, all of it, the beginning,the middle, and the end. Great presentation with the picture of the cards. He forgot but love wins out in the end. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 24-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Nancy, for such a lovely review!
Comment from Pantygynt
Yesterday I read one of Dolly's poems about Jacob Marley's face appearing on Scrooge's door knocker, and today this woman's face appears on the winning card. It's enough to make anyone sign the pledge.
This is a very good example of the ballad form and put to good use to.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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Yesterday I read one of Dolly's poems about Jacob Marley's face appearing on Scrooge's door knocker, and today this woman's face appears on the winning card. It's enough to make anyone sign the pledge.
This is a very good example of the ballad form and put to good use to.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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Thank you. I took this from an old Jimmy Rodgers song back in the 1930s about his mother.
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Damommy,
Nice story, well scripted in sound rhyme and metre. Only thing that jarred (and only a little) was the repeat of "head" in line 1, stanza 2, so soon after its use in the previous line.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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Dear Damommy,
Nice story, well scripted in sound rhyme and metre. Only thing that jarred (and only a little) was the repeat of "head" in line 1, stanza 2, so soon after its use in the previous line.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 24-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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Ooops. I'll take a look. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your moving poem is excellently-written in ballad stanza. Your story is well-told and conveys a powerful message about promises not kept--then eventually kept.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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Your moving poem is excellently-written in ballad stanza. Your story is well-told and conveys a powerful message about promises not kept--then eventually kept.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much for reviewing.
