My Treacherous Journey
100 Word Story contest entry5 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Congratulations for your win on this short story which is amusing and just wonderful. I got such a kick out of the theme and I think most of us can relate to it. Marilyn
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Congratulations for your win on this short story which is amusing and just wonderful. I got such a kick out of the theme and I think most of us can relate to it. Marilyn
Comment Written 26-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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That's why I'm glad I live down in Florida, so I don't have to deal with that anymore. Haha. Thank you for the great review and congratulations, Marilyn.
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Ron
Comment from Wils
It's in times like this that junk mail just ain't worth the effort. A nicely constructed story. Here's hoping the journey is worth it. Good luck in the contest.
Geoff
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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It's in times like this that junk mail just ain't worth the effort. A nicely constructed story. Here's hoping the journey is worth it. Good luck in the contest.
Geoff
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the great review and generous stars, Geoff. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
Ron
Comment from JudyE
This is very cleverly written and you certainly led me up the garden path. I had no idea where your story was leading.
If you don't mind me saying, every sentence bar one starts with 'I'. You might have done this deliberately and, to a point, it works. But I might have looked at varying the sentence beginnings. For instance, 'I attached my snow shoes to my boots and took my last breath of warm air' might be better as 'Attaching my snow shoes to my boots, I took my last breath
of warm air.'
I think 'snow shoes' should be one word. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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This is very cleverly written and you certainly led me up the garden path. I had no idea where your story was leading.
If you don't mind me saying, every sentence bar one starts with 'I'. You might have done this deliberately and, to a point, it works. But I might have looked at varying the sentence beginnings. For instance, 'I attached my snow shoes to my boots and took my last breath of warm air' might be better as 'Attaching my snow shoes to my boots, I took my last breath
of warm air.'
I think 'snow shoes' should be one word. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the great review and help, Judy. Yeah, after rereading it, I realized I had way too much of it starting with I. At the time, I was pressed for time to get it in by the deadline. I only changed one of them but there's still too many but it's not really that big of a deal. I was just goofing around anyhow. Lol. Have a wonderful holiday and thank you again.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello, I hope this review finds you well. Thank you for sharing your 100 word story with us. To tell a story in so few words is a challenge that I think you executed well. Good job!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Hello, I hope this review finds you well. Thank you for sharing your 100 word story with us. To tell a story in so few words is a challenge that I think you executed well. Good job!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the great review, 13. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this little piece. Have a great day.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is an interesting entry for the 100 Word Story contest.
I didn't see the end coming, junk mail. Funny.
Well told and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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This is an interesting entry for the 100 Word Story contest.
I didn't see the end coming, junk mail. Funny.
Well told and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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It's not a true story, of course. Thank you for the great review and good luck wishes, Sharon.
