Of You I Feel This Way
When someone grabs your heart and never lets go32 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a very lovely, romantic poem. You have made excellent use of vivid, specific details to describe physical traits and their allure for the speaker,
who is mesmerized.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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This is a very lovely, romantic poem. You have made excellent use of vivid, specific details to describe physical traits and their allure for the speaker,
who is mesmerized.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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Janice, thank you!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your lines flow smoothly with great imagery of the one you love. I like the scattered rhymes. Is this format a certain style? Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your lines flow smoothly with great imagery of the one you love. I like the scattered rhymes. Is this format a certain style? Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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Jan, thank you..
Comment from nomi338
Any writer unable to meet this challenge should go back to the table and practice his/her craft a little bit more. I am not saying it's easy, but it obviously is doable as you've just proven. Good work
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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Any writer unable to meet this challenge should go back to the table and practice his/her craft a little bit more. I am not saying it's easy, but it obviously is doable as you've just proven. Good work
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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Nomi, my friend, I certainly agree, I hope the winds have settled and the fires diminished out your way.
Comment from Sherry Asbury2
What a lovely poem that presents love in all its glory. This is the way we should feel about someone who means so much to us in that special way. All lovers are perfect, tall and strong, or delidcate and sweet. Just a delightful write.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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What a lovely poem that presents love in all its glory. This is the way we should feel about someone who means so much to us in that special way. All lovers are perfect, tall and strong, or delidcate and sweet. Just a delightful write.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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Thank you, I am pleased you enjoyed this.
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi There,
your poem is perfect for the specifications on this contest. You have avoided those specific words that you would normally find in a romance poem, and yet it doesn't feel like it is missing anything. The strong sense of feeling and romance in this tells the reader exactly how the author is feeling.
A lovely piece to read.
Brenda.x
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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Hi There,
your poem is perfect for the specifications on this contest. You have avoided those specific words that you would normally find in a romance poem, and yet it doesn't feel like it is missing anything. The strong sense of feeling and romance in this tells the reader exactly how the author is feeling.
A lovely piece to read.
Brenda.x
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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Brenda thank you for your kind narrative.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
You did a splendid job without all the accouterments that are prohibited in this writing. So, it really can be done as you articulately proved. The picture is an added enhancement.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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You did a splendid job without all the accouterments that are prohibited in this writing. So, it really can be done as you articulately proved. The picture is an added enhancement.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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Thank you, I found the challenge a bit handcuffing but enjoy the test.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a wonderful poem of adoration while omitting all of those required words -- great job! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
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gentle wisp of hair that --> gentle, wispy lock that [repetition of 'hair' too close in lines]
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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What a wonderful poem of adoration while omitting all of those required words -- great job! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
the secrets that --> the secret that [subject/verb agreement]
gentle wisp of hair that --> gentle, wispy lock that [repetition of 'hair' too close in lines]
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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Yvette thank you your input is so very well received. Corrections have been completed.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written love poem you have penned without using the words: love, kiss, romance, heart, boy/girl husband or wife, or sexual terms. I think you did a really nice job on writing this. Very interesting imagery you have used. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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This is a very well written love poem you have penned without using the words: love, kiss, romance, heart, boy/girl husband or wife, or sexual terms. I think you did a really nice job on writing this. Very interesting imagery you have used. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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Teri thank you.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
The contest certainly conveys the essence of love and is really well executed. Unfortunately, there is a list of words that cannot be used and the fact that you used one is a flaw.
I stopped with this line since the use of the word "heart" disqualifies it:
"carries my heart bounding". Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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The contest certainly conveys the essence of love and is really well executed. Unfortunately, there is a list of words that cannot be used and the fact that you used one is a flaw.
I stopped with this line since the use of the word "heart" disqualifies it:
"carries my heart bounding". Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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So correct and amended thank you for pointing this error out I missed on that one
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We all do it. I'm just glad it was caught and fixed for you early as many would have read it and just let it slide by knowing it was flawed. I don't roll that way LOL.
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That is why in my book you are a professional?s ?professional? in every sense of the word!
Comment from Susan X Smith
This poem certainly meets the specifications outlined in the writing prompt. It is clear that you hold your loved one in the highest esteem and are still enchanted by her.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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This poem certainly meets the specifications outlined in the writing prompt. It is clear that you hold your loved one in the highest esteem and are still enchanted by her.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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Thank you.
