Of You I Feel This Way
When someone grabs your heart and never lets go32 total reviews
Comment from Gail Denham
Nicely done - and a poem of love without using the word. Floating you to cloud nine (I wonder where that phrase came from) - a good expression of love for sure.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Nicely done - and a poem of love without using the word. Floating you to cloud nine (I wonder where that phrase came from) - a good expression of love for sure.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Gail, thank you!
Comment from A. Willow Bends
This is such a beautiful, flowing, gentle piece of work. I have no sixes left to award, but it should be showered in stars. It is lovely. The vocab all fits poetically and it is as if the poem dances itself. Creatively wonderful.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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This is such a beautiful, flowing, gentle piece of work. I have no sixes left to award, but it should be showered in stars. It is lovely. The vocab all fits poetically and it is as if the poem dances itself. Creatively wonderful.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Wendy, thank you!
Comment from Sanku
I think it is a very good entry for the contest .you have written a poem that resonates with feelings and you have stuck to the rules. her dress ,her movements and her hair -all these echo with your deep feelings.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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I think it is a very good entry for the contest .you have written a poem that resonates with feelings and you have stuck to the rules. her dress ,her movements and her hair -all these echo with your deep feelings.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Snnku, thank you!
Comment from estory
This poem had an interesting flow to it, a great natural rhythm that bounced along with a kalaidascope of imagery. Very sweet and sublime, very abstract, and a bit surreal. It was like watching Japanese No dancing, around a theme, using symbolism. All the monotone rhymes at the beginning jarred me a bit. Maybe it would be better to vary those somewhat? But the poem gathered momentum and ended strong. estory
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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This poem had an interesting flow to it, a great natural rhythm that bounced along with a kalaidascope of imagery. Very sweet and sublime, very abstract, and a bit surreal. It was like watching Japanese No dancing, around a theme, using symbolism. All the monotone rhymes at the beginning jarred me a bit. Maybe it would be better to vary those somewhat? But the poem gathered momentum and ended strong. estory
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Thanks
Comment from royowen
I particularly like this work, deftly and sensitively written to accommodate those fine points of romance. The wording is strong without that overly sentimental touch, which I love in a poem on romance. Beautifully written in no fixed meter, and and articulation. And great rhyme, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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I particularly like this work, deftly and sensitively written to accommodate those fine points of romance. The wording is strong without that overly sentimental touch, which I love in a poem on romance. Beautifully written in no fixed meter, and and articulation. And great rhyme, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Roy, thank you.
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My pleasure
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows how much this man love his woman. His desciption is full of metaphors and imagery.
I don't think you wanted to advance to the next line after dance. The line should end in sphere to keep the rhyme.
Good luck an keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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This shows how much this man love his woman. His desciption is full of metaphors and imagery.
I don't think you wanted to advance to the next line after dance. The line should end in sphere to keep the rhyme.
Good luck an keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2019
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Thanks
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You're welcome.
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Comment from Daniel Dalke
Good entry, you conveyed your feeling well without using the taboo words. It felt like your jump between rhyming schemes caused your flow to be a little less fluid. Good use of several images toward the same goal.
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Good entry, you conveyed your feeling well without using the taboo words. It felt like your jump between rhyming schemes caused your flow to be a little less fluid. Good use of several images toward the same goal.
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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I have removed the failed poem to rework thank you!
Comment from rjuselius
this is a beautifully crafted piece of romance poetry dear anonymous! the rhyme and rhythm are very well done and the content is exquisite.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
rebekka xxx
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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this is a beautifully crafted piece of romance poetry dear anonymous! the rhyme and rhythm are very well done and the content is exquisite.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
rebekka xxx
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Raul1
This entry meets the right contest requirements. It is excellent for the love poem contest. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest! Nice job.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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This entry meets the right contest requirements. It is excellent for the love poem contest. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest! Nice job.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Raul, thank you!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Therese Caron
Lovely poem, the words flow beautifully, and you managed to not use any of those words which I know was not an easy feat. I like the line about wanting to bottle it. Very nice poem for the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Lovely poem, the words flow beautifully, and you managed to not use any of those words which I know was not an easy feat. I like the line about wanting to bottle it. Very nice poem for the contest.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Therese, thank you>
