A Lakeside Meditation
Sepia-tinged reverie.10 total reviews
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I love this beautiful scene you've painted for us to partake of. It's like a serene meditation and a time of reflecting about what once was. This is really beautiful and descriptive writing that is refreshing and enjoyable to read. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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I love this beautiful scene you've painted for us to partake of. It's like a serene meditation and a time of reflecting about what once was. This is really beautiful and descriptive writing that is refreshing and enjoyable to read. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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I enjoyed reading your review, Jeffrey. I think I've written an intelligently creative poem in this one, and for you to write what you have made me feel good about it!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
There are some awe-inspiring poetic techniques used in almost every line of this poem. I think these lines are my favorite: Amidst the tawny glints of autumn, I lingered
to ponder all that passes is left as flickering motes
of dust upon a tawdry past.
Very nice photo, too. I like how the last line brings in the element of time passing again, and a reflection being broken, as if the spell of the moment were broken as well. Very, very nice entry!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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There are some awe-inspiring poetic techniques used in almost every line of this poem. I think these lines are my favorite: Amidst the tawny glints of autumn, I lingered
to ponder all that passes is left as flickering motes
of dust upon a tawdry past.
Very nice photo, too. I like how the last line brings in the element of time passing again, and a reflection being broken, as if the spell of the moment were broken as well. Very, very nice entry!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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I love your review! I think I've penned a good one here, so your comments made me feel terrific!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the beautiful scenes we experience in autumn while walking and enjoy a little time at the lack when the green leaves turned to gold and we feel rich.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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A very well-written poem about the beautiful scenes we experience in autumn while walking and enjoy a little time at the lack when the green leaves turned to gold and we feel rich.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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Thanks for your review, Sandra.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is an excellent poem which well meets the contest specifications. The free verse style works well to create a vivid picture of the Fall season. The picture is a nice addition.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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This is an excellent poem which well meets the contest specifications. The free verse style works well to create a vivid picture of the Fall season. The picture is a nice addition.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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Thanks for your comment. Much appreciated.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
This is a very unique poetic offering....taking the reader through your thoughts and your sightings with such fantastic descriptors as 'tawny glints', 'luminous display', and 'vertical murmurings' and blending them with alliterations throughout! ;) :) Your parting stanza is just the perfect vision to impart... :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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This is a very unique poetic offering....taking the reader through your thoughts and your sightings with such fantastic descriptors as 'tawny glints', 'luminous display', and 'vertical murmurings' and blending them with alliterations throughout! ;) :) Your parting stanza is just the perfect vision to impart... :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 19-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2019
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Thanks for this wonderful review, Yvette.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Autumn Rarities and Reflections contest.
Your colorful verse tells of musings, memories, and the splendor of Autumn.
Nicley done.
Sharon
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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I think this is a good entry for the Autumn Rarities and Reflections contest.
Your colorful verse tells of musings, memories, and the splendor of Autumn.
Nicley done.
Sharon
Comment Written 19-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Pantygynt
I think this is what some folk call free style. It can't really be classed as free verse because, despite lacking rhyme and metre, it is clearly tied into its tercetted form.
There is no doubt as to its qualification as poetry though. The lasnguage, imagery and use of alliteration and onomatopoeia all ensure that it s hugely poetic.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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I think this is what some folk call free style. It can't really be classed as free verse because, despite lacking rhyme and metre, it is clearly tied into its tercetted form.
There is no doubt as to its qualification as poetry though. The lasnguage, imagery and use of alliteration and onomatopoeia all ensure that it s hugely poetic.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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Thanks for your review - I appreciated your differentiation of free style and free verse, and also your comments about my poetic devices.
Comment from kiwisteveh
There's your rarity - a six-star review!
I enjoyed this - it is a confident write, not hung up on prerequisites of rhyme or meter or even a contrived tale. The autumn theme is well-conveyed throughout and the slightly downbeat ending is splendid.
Some lovely imagery, enhanced by frequent alliteration and nice personification in stanza 4, the breeze plucking harp-springs.
I was a little confused by the syntax in stanza 2, although the reference to the flickering film projector is nice.
Good luck in the contest - this should do well.
Steve
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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There's your rarity - a six-star review!
I enjoyed this - it is a confident write, not hung up on prerequisites of rhyme or meter or even a contrived tale. The autumn theme is well-conveyed throughout and the slightly downbeat ending is splendid.
Some lovely imagery, enhanced by frequent alliteration and nice personification in stanza 4, the breeze plucking harp-springs.
I was a little confused by the syntax in stanza 2, although the reference to the flickering film projector is nice.
Good luck in the contest - this should do well.
Steve
Comment Written 19-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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Super review - thanks Steve. I appreciate your taking the time to detail aspects of the poem. I especially enjoyed learning that I had written a film projector into the imagery! I like when readers see something else in the writing I didn't see myself.
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Ah, I wondered about that. It was the 'flickering motes of dust upon a tawdry past. ' that suggested it...
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... flecks of dust catching the light amidst stories of the old gold town's disreputable past. (There may well have been an old movie theatre in the town, so it is a possibility.)
Comment from JudyE
Your poem A Lakeside Meditation fits the contest title beautifully. It's hard to tell where the lake shore begins and ends. And, of course, the season couldn't be any other than autumn. The best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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Your poem A Lakeside Meditation fits the contest title beautifully. It's hard to tell where the lake shore begins and ends. And, of course, the season couldn't be any other than autumn. The best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2019
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Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These scenes are of value only to our eyes and you will never find material gold, but you tried, I enjoyed your musings here, these golden scenes are magical in the moment, love Dolly x
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These scenes are of value only to our eyes and you will never find material gold, but you tried, I enjoyed your musings here, these golden scenes are magical in the moment, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Nov-2019
