The Convict Train
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "The Journey Ends"Levi escorts a train full of dangerous convicts
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Comment from nancy_e_davis
Elizabeth smiled, "Well we[']re glad you stopped by this afternoon. Come on in."
That is the only spag I saw in this well written chapter. The only remark I have to offer is to have a list of characters some where in the book. I forgot who Casper was, probably because it is so long between books and chapters and I am getting old and forgetful. Job well done for J.B. and Levi. Looking forward to another fine western from you, Larry. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2019
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Elizabeth smiled, "Well we[']re glad you stopped by this afternoon. Come on in."
That is the only spag I saw in this well written chapter. The only remark I have to offer is to have a list of characters some where in the book. I forgot who Casper was, probably because it is so long between books and chapters and I am getting old and forgetful. Job well done for J.B. and Levi. Looking forward to another fine western from you, Larry. Nancy:)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2019
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Thank you, I debated for a while about how to end this story. Then I thought the whole book was based on the convict train and finding Matt Cory, the escaped convict. The story ended when Cory was returned to prison. This ending also allowed Levi's journey to go full circle. He began with a ranch and a family, and his journey ended with him returning to that life. (I made the correction, thank you. I wish you all the best. Larry
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It was well structured with the full circle and I enjoyed it. You never told me about Casper. Best wishes. Nancy:)
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Casper Hayes came into the story in chapter 1 of this last book. He rode with Badger for a long time and he was with Badger when they found Spring Rain and her son. Casper started looking for Bo Meadows with Badger but when the trail went cold they went different ways, until they met up again in this story. Now they will finish the hunt.
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Oh, Okay, I remember now. Thanks for clearing that up.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
I followed this episode just fine. You resolved one situation and introduced another, (with a bit of suspense added. ) I am not sure if I give a hoot what Levi and Elizabeth do, maybe I've missed too many chapters.
The best thing you have done, is create characters with many dimensions in their personalities and contradictions that have the potential to affect what happens next!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2019
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I followed this episode just fine. You resolved one situation and introduced another, (with a bit of suspense added. ) I am not sure if I give a hoot what Levi and Elizabeth do, maybe I've missed too many chapters.
The best thing you have done, is create characters with many dimensions in their personalities and contradictions that have the potential to affect what happens next!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2019
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Hi Suzanna, thank you very much for your review. A little background. This is the last book in a trilogy regarding Levi Sawyer coming into the valley. He began as a rancher in Montana. His wife was murdered and outlaws took off with several of his horses. He followed them into the valley and started working at the Marley Ranch. Found the men who killed his wife and Joined a posse to bring them in. Met Badger in the process. Fell in love with Mr. Marley's daughter and became Sheriff. Levi going back to ranching was an opportunity for him to go full circle. This book was needed to complete the story. The other two books are on Amazon.
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Dear Mr Green, a thank you for filling me in. I had missed a whole lot of this story hadn?t I. ( I joined FanStory in October, so this was your first post since then I suspect,)
Pleased to make your acquaintance ! I will keep a lookout for your final chapters.
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Dear Mr Green, a thank you for filling me in. I had missed a whole lot of this story hadn?t I. ( I joined FanStory in October, so this was your first post since then I suspect,)
Pleased to make your acquaintance ! I will keep a lookout for your final chapters.
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Dear Mr. Green, Thank you for filling me in. I had missed a whole lot of your story, hadn?t I! ( I joined FanStory in
October, so I suspect this was your first posting since )
Glad to make your acquaintance! I will keep my eye out for the final chapters of this saga. Sincerely, Suzanna Ray
Comment from poetwatch
Mister Green it has been a write up the river and the train. You are a very good western story teller. I'll be waiting for your next story about Badger and Casper. Thank you for letting me see through your eyes the West.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2019
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Mister Green it has been a write up the river and the train. You are a very good western story teller. I'll be waiting for your next story about Badger and Casper. Thank you for letting me see through your eyes the West.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2019
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Thank you. Your reviews have been important to me. This book ends a trilogy. The other two books are on Amazon.
Comment from Klengling
Enjoyed reading this chapter. Makes me want to learn more about all of the characters and find out what happens to Badger and how Jacob grows up. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2019
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Enjoyed reading this chapter. Makes me want to learn more about all of the characters and find out what happens to Badger and how Jacob grows up. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2019
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Thank you for your kind review. This is the last book in a trilogy about Levi coming into the Walla Walla Valley. This book was needed to complete the story. The other two books, "Shadow of a Dead man", and "Dancing with the Devil", are on Amazon;
