Within Elizabeth's Heart
Rhyming Quatrains23 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem is a good rhyming rendition of the story of the conception and birth of John the Baptist. I like the way the first line appears in each stanza. I think almost every mother feels the same at a childs birth.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019
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This poem is a good rhyming rendition of the story of the conception and birth of John the Baptist. I like the way the first line appears in each stanza. I think almost every mother feels the same at a childs birth.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019
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Thank you Joan. I had written it for our Advent Devotional at church and thought I would share it on FS. I appreciate your lovely review.
Melissa
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You're welcome, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from juliaSjames
A beautiful lyrical poem on a well known religious theme. I like that you honour Elizabeth and the miracle of John's birth. The last stanza is a pure celebration of maternal love.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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A beautiful lyrical poem on a well known religious theme. I like that you honour Elizabeth and the miracle of John's birth. The last stanza is a pure celebration of maternal love.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much, Julia. :)
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Hi Melissa, this is such a beautifully written poem, with great rhythm and imagery. I show the great joy of anticipation and finally giving birth to a most wanted boy. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Hi Melissa, this is such a beautifully written poem, with great rhythm and imagery. I show the great joy of anticipation and finally giving birth to a most wanted boy. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Thanks so much, Ulla!! I am delighted you like it.
Melissa
Comment from Susan Larson
What a beautifully written poem about the mother of John the Baptist and how she loved him just for being the baby she always wanted, " Aware there are others that whisper of greatness, yet savors the sweetness her newborn imparts." Very tender words of a mother's love.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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What a beautifully written poem about the mother of John the Baptist and how she loved him just for being the baby she always wanted, " Aware there are others that whisper of greatness, yet savors the sweetness her newborn imparts." Very tender words of a mother's love.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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This was written for an Advent Devotional for our church. I just thought I would share it on FS. Thanks so much, Susan!
Melissa
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Your beautifully gentle and steady rhythm whispers, at least to this reader, that we should always rejoice in the moments we have and not look beyond to what may come of them... for they would sour the joy He gives at the time. ;) ;) A moving composition for mothers, Melissa -- thank you. ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Your beautifully gentle and steady rhythm whispers, at least to this reader, that we should always rejoice in the moments we have and not look beyond to what may come of them... for they would sour the joy He gives at the time. ;) ;) A moving composition for mothers, Melissa -- thank you. ;) Yvette
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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This was written for an Advent Devotional for our church. I just thought I would share it on FS. Thanks so much, Yvette!
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
Such a great rhythm to this poem, Melissa. I'm not sure what kind of metre it is, but it's consistent and with a fine cadence. Your theme is an inspired choice.
An interesting placement of the repeating line too. I enjoyed reading very much.
Gloria
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019
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Such a great rhythm to this poem, Melissa. I'm not sure what kind of metre it is, but it's consistent and with a fine cadence. Your theme is an inspired choice.
An interesting placement of the repeating line too. I enjoyed reading very much.
Gloria
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much Gloria... Jim said it is a headless anapaestic poetic form... I went to your site and reread your verse, He Painted Still Lifes, and borrowed your meter. I have always been fascinated with that poem of yours and visit it for inspiration. :). This poem was written for the Advent Devotional that our church will hand out on Dec. 1. I appreciate your thoughts and review on it.
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
You format is beautifully presented. The repeating line suggests that Elizabeth feels that an honor has been bestowed. She has been favored by God to have this child that will play such an important role in the spread of Christianity. Despite the ideas of greatness have been rumored about the baby, she just wants to enjoy her newborn son. judi
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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You format is beautifully presented. The repeating line suggests that Elizabeth feels that an honor has been bestowed. She has been favored by God to have this child that will play such an important role in the spread of Christianity. Despite the ideas of greatness have been rumored about the baby, she just wants to enjoy her newborn son. judi
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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This was written for an Advent Devotional for our church. I just thought I would share it on FS. Thanks so much, Yvette!
Melissa
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the masterful art of A Y Young. I can see why it helped to inspire you to create these rhymed quatrains with a compelling repeat. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Thank you for sharing the masterful art of A Y Young. I can see why it helped to inspire you to create these rhymed quatrains with a compelling repeat. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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This was written for an Advent Devotional for our church. I just thought I would share it on FS. Thanks so much, Joan!
Melissa
Comment from Mistydawn
What a beautifully written poem about the miracle of life. Your great word choice draws the reader in your wonderful description lets them picture it so vividly in their minds. Your prayer after was just as lovely. Your artwork is breathtaking.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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What a beautifully written poem about the miracle of life. Your great word choice draws the reader in your wonderful description lets them picture it so vividly in their minds. Your prayer after was just as lovely. Your artwork is breathtaking.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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This was written for an Advent Devotional for our church. I just thought I would share it on FS. Thanks so much, Misty!
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
Rhyming quatrains, five quatrains with one line repeated in each? Melissa, I like your form (in writing poetry. :) I checked Shadow poetry but couldn't find anything about it. Anyway this is a good poem. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Rhyming quatrains, five quatrains with one line repeated in each? Melissa, I like your form (in writing poetry. :) I checked Shadow poetry but couldn't find anything about it. Anyway this is a good poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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This was written for an Advent Devotional for our church. I just thought I would share it on FS. Thanks so much, Jose!
Melissa
