Ode to Angels
A modified Lauranelle to celebrate my guiding Angels36 total reviews
Comment from Bill Pinder
This was an excellent poem written in a complex rhyme scheme. You did a great job of presenting your message in this style. Thanks for sharing your creativity.
Bill
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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This was an excellent poem written in a complex rhyme scheme. You did a great job of presenting your message in this style. Thanks for sharing your creativity.
Bill
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Bill, thank you.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I had 3 favorite lines in this ode to guardian angels/or guiding muse angels:
Sheer fogs hide the oceans of November
and also:
Pleasing Angels, you inspire me to write
Loving, longing, seeing your smile bright.
I thought the wing imagery was interesting, since birds are inspirational to me, and from my religious background, I think wings are symbolic for angels and not literal.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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I had 3 favorite lines in this ode to guardian angels/or guiding muse angels:
Sheer fogs hide the oceans of November
and also:
Pleasing Angels, you inspire me to write
Loving, longing, seeing your smile bright.
I thought the wing imagery was interesting, since birds are inspirational to me, and from my religious background, I think wings are symbolic for angels and not literal.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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I am humbled by your generous review and comments!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your Potlatch Club offering, JKR.
Good job on its modified form. Your lines read smoothly with great imagery and rhymes. Your lines progress nicely from start to finish. It seems you are calling on your guardian angel to help then proceeding to write. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
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I enjoyed your Potlatch Club offering, JKR.
Good job on its modified form. Your lines read smoothly with great imagery and rhymes. Your lines progress nicely from start to finish. It seems you are calling on your guardian angel to help then proceeding to write. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Jan, thank you for your comments but more completely for your very helpful eyes and recommendations
Comment from Pantygynt
This form seems to be of very mixed parentage indeed, but it would work better had it been written in iambic pentameter. The mistake you are making here is to equate metre with syllable count and, regrettably they are not the same. Not every line of ten syllables is an iambic pentameter I'm afraid and many here though conforming to syllabic count do not follow the iambic metre.
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This form seems to be of very mixed parentage indeed, but it would work better had it been written in iambic pentameter. The mistake you are making here is to equate metre with syllable count and, regrettably they are not the same. Not every line of ten syllables is an iambic pentameter I'm afraid and many here though conforming to syllabic count do not follow the iambic metre.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thank you for your wise observation, your assessment is very accurate. For the first time , with your exacting comments here, finally my light bulb just clicked....Metre and syllabic count are not the same....takes someone like me a few tries to finally get it ---thanks for you patient honesty!
Comment from dmt1967
This is another great poem and I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I liked the uplifting tone it had and the prayer at the end was a nice touch. Thank you for sharing.
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This is another great poem and I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I liked the uplifting tone it had and the prayer at the end was a nice touch. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
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Thank you
Comment from lyenochka
I like your tribute to angels who give you the motivation to write and you want to please them, thankful for their helpful presence.
I feel that at times, the meter wasn't iambic pentameter.
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I like your tribute to angels who give you the motivation to write and you want to please them, thankful for their helpful presence.
I feel that at times, the meter wasn't iambic pentameter.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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I noted that I did a modified presentation because I simply wasn?t pleased with the difficulty of the lauranelle, I have something to work on to get this one right. Thank you.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
This has such a graceful way about it. It feels good to read and let wash over you after the second or third time. Format is cool and I love the sound of your "ing" words throughout. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
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This has such a graceful way about it. It feels good to read and let wash over you after the second or third time. Format is cool and I love the sound of your "ing" words throughout. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
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Thank you
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Ode to Angels", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet has with craft and well-honed skill, told it as it is. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"Ode to Angels", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet has with craft and well-honed skill, told it as it is. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thank you
You're welcome.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Beautiful poem that keeps the rhythm of inspiration flowing :"Loving, longing, seeing your smile bright." When you fell the inspiration touch the only thing that you can do is write from your heart.
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Beautiful poem that keeps the rhythm of inspiration flowing :"Loving, longing, seeing your smile bright." When you fell the inspiration touch the only thing that you can do is write from your heart.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
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Thank you
Comment from dragonpoet
This is about how muses help us write. We take inspiration from what is around us. It reminds us that the ability to write at all is a gift from God.
Good entry for the potlatch club.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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This is about how muses help us write. We take inspiration from what is around us. It reminds us that the ability to write at all is a gift from God.
Good entry for the potlatch club.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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Joan thank you...this has been the most difficult one to tackle so far. I hope I have not taking away from the incredible work of the many professional poets in the mix.
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You're wlcome. I have not tried yet. But I may soon. It does seem hard.
Joan
