harvest moon
a little poem.5 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Great rhyme scheme, with a bewitching scene here. The speaker seems to be more than just a human, as evidenced by the last two lines. I love these lines: chill winds come alive/with coyotes' cries. (I added the apostrophe since it would be proper there). The cat stanza is super, too! Super share.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Great rhyme scheme, with a bewitching scene here. The speaker seems to be more than just a human, as evidenced by the last two lines. I love these lines: chill winds come alive/with coyotes' cries. (I added the apostrophe since it would be proper there). The cat stanza is super, too! Super share.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the review and correction. i always wonder about that apostrophe, so thanks. it was a fun write, cheers.
Comment from Henry King
This is an excellent poem for Autumn and it's witchy holiday on All Hallows Eve. I can envision the scene with the moon, dark trees, a familiar and even a broom. I suggest a better rhyme for either "daze" or "way" be found. An easy one for me with five syllables is, "in search for her prey." Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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This is an excellent poem for Autumn and it's witchy holiday on All Hallows Eve. I can envision the scene with the moon, dark trees, a familiar and even a broom. I suggest a better rhyme for either "daze" or "way" be found. An easy one for me with five syllables is, "in search for her prey." Well done.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the review. I changed what you suggested, thanks, much better. Have a nice Sunday, cheers.
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You are very welcome. I am enjoying the weekend. Thank you for that.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a clever and entertaining little ditty of a personal Fall rarity. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a clever and entertaining little ditty of a personal Fall rarity. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the review, it was a fun write. Have a nice Sunday, cheers.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Now, this one suprised me. I didn't expect to see the narrator circle and fly away, presumably with the cat on the end of a broomstick. And a little unexpected in November. Maybe it's time for all good witches to fly away home or back to Hogwarts.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Now, this one suprised me. I didn't expect to see the narrator circle and fly away, presumably with the cat on the end of a broomstick. And a little unexpected in November. Maybe it's time for all good witches to fly away home or back to Hogwarts.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the insightful review. Oh yes, we...er, I mean them, are around all year. Have a wonderful Sunday, cheers.
Comment from Wils
I can picture the circling cat with the moon in the background. Love the image you chose, it drew me into the poem. Nicely written, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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I can picture the circling cat with the moon in the background. Love the image you chose, it drew me into the poem. Nicely written, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the review, it was fun to write. Have a wonderful weekend, cheers.
