Passing
Nonet24 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a powerful poem, even in its tranquility. It describes perfectly what we can imagine as "passing." The fatigue of living wears us out to the point of welcoming our time to "go." Worthy of a sixer if I had one. An excellent entry for the contest. Looks like a winner to me. Marilyn
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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This is a powerful poem, even in its tranquility. It describes perfectly what we can imagine as "passing." The fatigue of living wears us out to the point of welcoming our time to "go." Worthy of a sixer if I had one. An excellent entry for the contest. Looks like a winner to me. Marilyn
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much, Marilyn. I was remembering being by by mom?s bedside last year. :)
Melissa
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I've been there, too. Blessings, Marilyn
Comment from Gail Denham
That sad picture sometimes comes to mind these days as I creak so much getting out of the chair at times - or sense the body slowing down. A good description of what it is to slow down and wait.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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That sad picture sometimes comes to mind these days as I creak so much getting out of the chair at times - or sense the body slowing down. A good description of what it is to slow down and wait.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much Gail!!
Melissa
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Nonet when we are in our last days everything seems to slowdown within and around us and within until the last breathe is taken.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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A very well-written Nonet when we are in our last days everything seems to slowdown within and around us and within until the last breathe is taken.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thank you Sandra!! Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Melissa. the title prepared me for the text. Your descriptive narrative of the decline in status of health is well thought out and well written. Your final three lines are the logical conclusion to the first six lines. Good luck in the contest. Robert
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Hello Melissa. the title prepared me for the text. Your descriptive narrative of the decline in status of health is well thought out and well written. Your final three lines are the logical conclusion to the first six lines. Good luck in the contest. Robert
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much, Robert, for your great comments.
Melissa
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you're welcome
Comment from juliaSjames
Beautiful nonet Melissa. It's very sad, in fact it radiates sadness. But it isn't sentimental. Very powerful write. In fact the first three lines are almost painful to read.
The artwork presents an intense metaphor for the wasting of old age.
I think this will be a strong contender in the contest.
Good luck.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Beautiful nonet Melissa. It's very sad, in fact it radiates sadness. But it isn't sentimental. Very powerful write. In fact the first three lines are almost painful to read.
The artwork presents an intense metaphor for the wasting of old age.
I think this will be a strong contender in the contest.
Good luck.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Julia. I really appreciate your comments.
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
So many things in nature have such short lives. You describe the signs that death Is approaching--the shrunken form, the short, shallow gasps. Creatures have a way of knowing when death is approaching. Some will simply wander off. Your nonet format is all it should be, and best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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So many things in nature have such short lives. You describe the signs that death Is approaching--the shrunken form, the short, shallow gasps. Creatures have a way of knowing when death is approaching. Some will simply wander off. Your nonet format is all it should be, and best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much, Judi!!.. Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
So powerfully said and expressed and yet so very sad. I see the picture and thought of the passing of a plant. But everything you mention from the gasping, makes me see a person passing to "freeing death."
Best wishes in the contest!!
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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So powerfully said and expressed and yet so very sad. I see the picture and thought of the passing of a plant. But everything you mention from the gasping, makes me see a person passing to "freeing death."
Best wishes in the contest!!
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Hi Helen. Yes, I was remembering being at mother?s bedside last year as she passed. The skeletal remains of the plant reminded me of the wasting away that occurs after a long term illness. I appreciate your comments.
Melissa
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I'm so sorry. Only last year? You must still be adjusting and grieving. No wonder the words powerful. ♥
Comment from Ulla
Wow, that is a poignant poem, Melissa. I liked it a lot albeit it was so sad and dark in its way. It's a great entry for the contest. I wish you the best of luck. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Wow, that is a poignant poem, Melissa. I liked it a lot albeit it was so sad and dark in its way. It's a great entry for the contest. I wish you the best of luck. Ulla xx
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much Ulla. I was writing about human passing, but chose a faded flower as art. I am wondering if that was a good choice... hmmm, I am still thinking about it. LOL. I appreciate your great review.
Melissa
Comment from royowen
I was wondering what the creature is in the artwork Melissa, is it a butterfly perhaps? They have a gloriously short life. A wonderful nonet, a credit to you, we manicured with a marvellous shape, which is no mean feat. Well done my friend, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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I was wondering what the creature is in the artwork Melissa, is it a butterfly perhaps? They have a gloriously short life. A wonderful nonet, a credit to you, we manicured with a marvellous shape, which is no mean feat. Well done my friend, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Hello Roy. I chose a flower that has been skeltonized by decay for the artwork. The Nonet was written as I was remembering my mom who passed away last year. No matter if it is humans or anything else, there comes a point where all is exhausted and tired as it declines. Thank you.
Melissa
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Yes I?m sorry about the mistake, and your lost, I know the sadness of loss.
Comment from Joan E.
I wonder what inspired you to write about pending death. Regardless, you captured the sensibility and added to the intensity of the mood with alliteration. Best wishes in the Nonet Contest- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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I wonder what inspired you to write about pending death. Regardless, you captured the sensibility and added to the intensity of the mood with alliteration. Best wishes in the Nonet Contest- Joan
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Hi Joan. I wrote this verse as I was remembering being at mothers side as she left us last year. Thank you for your lovely comments.
Melissa
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Thank you for sharing the very personal context. Warm regards- Joan
