Belonging
An Acrostic Poem31 total reviews
Comment from NickieT
I love this poem. Your message is strong and clear, the acrostic form is well executed without disrupting the rhythm in any fashion. I like your use of rhyme and I appreciate the chosen visual. Best of luck with this entry!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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I love this poem. Your message is strong and clear, the acrostic form is well executed without disrupting the rhythm in any fashion. I like your use of rhyme and I appreciate the chosen visual. Best of luck with this entry!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Wow! Thank you for your wonderful and inspiring review, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Rmocruz
This well penned rhymed verse presents a worthy message of belonging.
You have masterfully satisfied the acrostic poetry format.
Best wishes with this promising contest entry.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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This well penned rhymed verse presents a worthy message of belonging.
You have masterfully satisfied the acrostic poetry format.
Best wishes with this promising contest entry.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful review, much appreciated****kahpot
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You are welcome!~Rich
Comment from Patty Palmer
Yes, everyone has their own place in this world and we all want to be recognized. Friendship knows no color or friendship nor religion. You are you and I am I. Together a friendship, not to let go by.
Great poem! I like how you worded it all.
God bless!
Patty
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Yes, everyone has their own place in this world and we all want to be recognized. Friendship knows no color or friendship nor religion. You are you and I am I. Together a friendship, not to let go by.
Great poem! I like how you worded it all.
God bless!
Patty
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much, yes everybody has a place in our world and deserves to be recognized, many thanks for your wonderful comments, much appreciated****kahpot
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You're very welcome kahpot!
Patty
Comment from Lobber
Hello,
So beautifully expressed in an acrostically limited format ... you deserve to win with a multitude of stars . - Lobber
..... ..... ..... xox
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Hello,
So beautifully expressed in an acrostically limited format ... you deserve to win with a multitude of stars . - Lobber
..... ..... ..... xox
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Wow! Thank you very much for your wonderful comments and stars, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Belonging", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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"Belonging", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you for your excellent review and comments, very much appreciated****kahpot
****kahpot, as always you're very welcome.
God bless and take care,
the Duchess :)))
Comment from judester
This is a clever poem that flows easily for an acrostic. I like the line 'to pale my spender' because that's exactly what happens with prejudice.
Bravo, judester
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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This is a clever poem that flows easily for an acrostic. I like the line 'to pale my spender' because that's exactly what happens with prejudice.
Bravo, judester
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much for this wonderful review, and yes prejudice is a very damaging way of thinking, much appreciated****kahpot
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I think it touches on the underlying theme. We all just want to belong. Great writing. Cheers, judester
Comment from Jesse James Doty
The title; the image; and the message of this poem are exceptional. The fact that you used, the word 'belonging' as an acrostic about belonging, is fantastic. My favorite lines are the first four. I love what you say and how you say it. Rhyming 'gender' with 'splendor' is very creative. After those four lines, you roam into the possible negative prospect of when we choose to isolate others. It is still good...I just prefer the first four positive lines the best. The presentation, as a whole, is excellent. The author's notes underneath are a plea for us to get along. I wonder if we 'all' want the same. There are some who delight in isolating individuals or groups, for no better reason, then that they don't understand them. It is their loss. Thank you for sharing your talented acrostic poem.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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The title; the image; and the message of this poem are exceptional. The fact that you used, the word 'belonging' as an acrostic about belonging, is fantastic. My favorite lines are the first four. I love what you say and how you say it. Rhyming 'gender' with 'splendor' is very creative. After those four lines, you roam into the possible negative prospect of when we choose to isolate others. It is still good...I just prefer the first four positive lines the best. The presentation, as a whole, is excellent. The author's notes underneath are a plea for us to get along. I wonder if we 'all' want the same. There are some who delight in isolating individuals or groups, for no better reason, then that they don't understand them. It is their loss. Thank you for sharing your talented acrostic poem.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you Jesse, I like the way you broken the work in two, I went back and read it a few more times and yes it does read like you say, it sort of turns as if I may have got lazy or tried for a happier ending, this is a wonderful review and your comments will help me greatly, very much appreciated****kahpot
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Glad I was able to help. It was my pleasure to read and review your work. And, you're sincerely welcome.
Jesse
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I love the powerful message of this friend. It's a sea of people in this world, all different and uniquely beautiful. That's what makes us collectively all so special. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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I love the powerful message of this friend. It's a sea of people in this world, all different and uniquely beautiful. That's what makes us collectively all so special. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful review and comments, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Susan Larson
Your acrostic poem is very well done. I like that you used the Olympic rings, symbolizing all countries in the world, all people, all cultures. While the red print balances with the red ring, it does seem a little harsh for your message. What about if you used gold print and centered it keeping everything together in the middle?
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Your acrostic poem is very well done. I like that you used the Olympic rings, symbolizing all countries in the world, all people, all cultures. While the red print balances with the red ring, it does seem a little harsh for your message. What about if you used gold print and centered it keeping everything together in the middle?
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you Susan, I did try gold print but found it hard to read, and I was told in some of my earlier attempts at this for not to center the work as the "word" itself can be read straight down, as always much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your acrostic poem is skillfully-written and moving. You have conveyed a powerful message about prejudice and the desire to fit in. Suicide is the second major cause of death among young people--some as young as 10--usually due to bullying because they are perceived as being somehow different!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Your acrostic poem is skillfully-written and moving. You have conveyed a powerful message about prejudice and the desire to fit in. Suicide is the second major cause of death among young people--some as young as 10--usually due to bullying because they are perceived as being somehow different!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you, and yes bullying is a very sad thing, we seem to hear of it far to often, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
