Why God Why
A man lamenting his struggle with cancer33 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
Why? That is such a good question and no-one has the answer, well not a feasible one. A very well written and poignant poem. Good luck in the competition. Take care. Jen.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Why? That is such a good question and no-one has the answer, well not a feasible one. A very well written and poignant poem. Good luck in the competition. Take care. Jen.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Jun, thank you 🙏
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, JLR, with the contest prompt. The required words fit in naturally and the rhymes are an added bonus. Your story told is poignant and very believable. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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You did a great job, JLR, with the contest prompt. The required words fit in naturally and the rhymes are an added bonus. Your story told is poignant and very believable. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Jan, thank these words came up from mother well of my soul as I reflected on the high number of friends i have lost to cancer the past two years.
Comment from Therese Caron
I have known way too many people with cancer. This has caused me very great pain so I can only imagine how it must feel to be the person with the illness. I love the second line about the petals of the flower growing dry. This is a beautiful poem and yet very sad at the same time. I could almost feel his pain.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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I have known way too many people with cancer. This has caused me very great pain so I can only imagine how it must feel to be the person with the illness. I love the second line about the petals of the flower growing dry. This is a beautiful poem and yet very sad at the same time. I could almost feel his pain.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Therese, these words well from the spring of my soul, as I have lost too many friends to cancer this year, ugh.
Comment from estory
I think your poem articulates that feeling of frustration we all feel when life seems to treat us unfairly and we ask that unanswerable question: why, God? I liked how you worked in the pain we feel, the desire for escape from it, in that urge to smoke tobacco and float off in sweet ignorance. The fact that there is no answer really captures the reality of life and the loneliness we feel as a result. estory
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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I think your poem articulates that feeling of frustration we all feel when life seems to treat us unfairly and we ask that unanswerable question: why, God? I liked how you worked in the pain we feel, the desire for escape from it, in that urge to smoke tobacco and float off in sweet ignorance. The fact that there is no answer really captures the reality of life and the loneliness we feel as a result. estory
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Estory, thank you. I wrote this from the wellspring if my soul as I reflected on the high number of male friends who have succumbed to cancer the past two years.
Comment from Barbaraj1
You did a great job with the poem using 6 different words. Your rhyming is excellent. Your poem is sad and he will never know why.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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You did a great job with the poem using 6 different words. Your rhyming is excellent. Your poem is sad and he will never know why.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Barbara, thank you, these words just came up from the well within, I have lost a lot of male friends to cancer of late..
Comment from Patty Palmer
Well written following the prompt to use the words in the word list. You used them very well. Whatever goes on in our lives, there's always the question in the back of our minds, "Why me God?" Sometimes he gives an answer. Sometimes we may never know the reason, but it's all in his plan.
Great poem!!! Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Well written following the prompt to use the words in the word list. You used them very well. Whatever goes on in our lives, there's always the question in the back of our minds, "Why me God?" Sometimes he gives an answer. Sometimes we may never know the reason, but it's all in his plan.
Great poem!!! Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Patty, thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. This poem is well-written. It is difficult to understand how the subject to this poem feels every day as he got up from bed. I can't possibly know. I have known others that have made the transition and it has been difficult to see that happen. I cannot imagine what it would be like to feel it happening. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Hello mystery writer. This poem is well-written. It is difficult to understand how the subject to this poem feels every day as he got up from bed. I can't possibly know. I have known others that have made the transition and it has been difficult to see that happen. I cannot imagine what it would be like to feel it happening. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Robert thanks, I have been loosing a high number of male friends seemingly, to cancer, it?s our age I suppose.
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You are right I believe.
Comment from Lobber
Hello,
What a powerful use of blending some seemingly innocent words - innocent until turned over to a master-word architect. You're sharing of emotions and events is beyond a simple Thank You. Words fail me. - Lobber
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Hello,
What a powerful use of blending some seemingly innocent words - innocent until turned over to a master-word architect. You're sharing of emotions and events is beyond a simple Thank You. Words fail me. - Lobber
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Thank so much for the connection to my poem.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Write a poem using these words contest.
You tell the story your walk of life is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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I think this is a good entry for the Write a poem using these words contest.
You tell the story your walk of life is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Sharon, thank you.
Comment from Neonewman
This is a brilliant entry for this particular writing prompt. You used every word and created a full story within this short piece. Best of luck in the contest, this one should rise to the top.
God bless
Steve
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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This is a brilliant entry for this particular writing prompt. You used every word and created a full story within this short piece. Best of luck in the contest, this one should rise to the top.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Steve, thanks. I was motivated by the fact I seem to be loosing a large number of make friends to cancer of late.
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Yea, I understand that. So much of this in my family.
