Why God Why
A man lamenting his struggle with cancer33 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This is really a gorgeous poem. I like the idea of your poem; although cancer is a word that is very touching to many people; and it happens way too often. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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This is really a gorgeous poem. I like the idea of your poem; although cancer is a word that is very touching to many people; and it happens way too often. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Rosemary, thank you!
Comment from Sallyo
I can see you wanted twelve syllables, but that has led to an error in tense in an otherwise very good poem. If you look at this line you can see the slip.
I feel the aches and pains started to slowly grow,
You could make it "starting" as a fix.
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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I can see you wanted twelve syllables, but that has led to an error in tense in an otherwise very good poem. If you look at this line you can see the slip.
I feel the aches and pains started to slowly grow,
You could make it "starting" as a fix.
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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You are so correct, thanks Sally!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A very good adaptation of the required words in which you have successfully painted a vision for your reader as well as pulling them emotionally into your world... wonderful conclusion! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! :)
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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A very good adaptation of the required words in which you have successfully painted a vision for your reader as well as pulling them emotionally into your world... wonderful conclusion! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! :)
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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I am very pleased you captured the emotional pull.
