Pathways
Haibun24 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
I am learning this style and love it. I hope to post a long awaited attempt soon. In the meantime, I'll enjoy yours. This is superb and beautifully illustrated.
Enjoy your six,
Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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I am learning this style and love it. I hope to post a long awaited attempt soon. In the meantime, I'll enjoy yours. This is superb and beautifully illustrated.
Enjoy your six,
Sally xoxo
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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I enjoy writing haibuns, Sally. It adds a whole new approach to the verse and takes me a few minutes to adjust my thinking. I would love to read one of yours too :). Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from tempeste
Lots of kids of rich people or celebrities end up doing very little in their lives...their parents want to avoid them difficulties but in doing so they didn't give their children the opportunity to prove themselves..too much love can be negative.
Hardships are not always a negative thing...There is a saying " what doesn't kill you will make you stronger. "
It's also true that only a wise person will learn from his errors.
In one particular case,I still have not learnt .. my friendship with my boss...I let myself be used every time by her..one day I hope to find the courage to stand up, say enough and walk away.
Your poem is thought-provoking ..the weakest at times turn out to be the strongest ....determination is a very important factor because it enables us to persist and move forward in the face of difficulties or even a temporary failure.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Lots of kids of rich people or celebrities end up doing very little in their lives...their parents want to avoid them difficulties but in doing so they didn't give their children the opportunity to prove themselves..too much love can be negative.
Hardships are not always a negative thing...There is a saying " what doesn't kill you will make you stronger. "
It's also true that only a wise person will learn from his errors.
In one particular case,I still have not learnt .. my friendship with my boss...I let myself be used every time by her..one day I hope to find the courage to stand up, say enough and walk away.
Your poem is thought-provoking ..the weakest at times turn out to be the strongest ....determination is a very important factor because it enables us to persist and move forward in the face of difficulties or even a temporary failure.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful comments. I agree that sometimes the weakest turn out the strongest. I am glad you liked this one!!
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your haibun is very well-written, uplifting, and descriptive. I like the progression from general--how we should view hardships as experiences that strengthen us--to specific, speaking of a certain individual.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Your haibun is very well-written, uplifting, and descriptive. I like the progression from general--how we should view hardships as experiences that strengthen us--to specific, speaking of a certain individual.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much, Janice.
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
A very good motivational haibun. We don't have to be victims of our infirmities. I see that right here on Fanstory where writers are suffering all kinds of physical difficulties but are able to write and accomplish so much. Great message, Melissa!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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A very good motivational haibun. We don't have to be victims of our infirmities. I see that right here on Fanstory where writers are suffering all kinds of physical difficulties but are able to write and accomplish so much. Great message, Melissa!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Hi Helen. Thank you for your insightful comments. I also see those folks here on FS and am amazed they are still striving to contribute. Kudos to them!
Melissa
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for contrasting the rough "pathway" with the "yellow brick road" and pointing out the benefits of the former. I admired your 5-7-5-7-7 tanka and its pivot. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Thank you for contrasting the rough "pathway" with the "yellow brick road" and pointing out the benefits of the former. I admired your 5-7-5-7-7 tanka and its pivot. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Hello Joan. Thank you!!
Melissa
Comment from BeasPeas
I like this. It's a nicely composed Haibun. The prose is well written to explain the fortitude of those who have to contend with difficult circumstances. The tanka gives us an example. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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I like this. It's a nicely composed Haibun. The prose is well written to explain the fortitude of those who have to contend with difficult circumstances. The tanka gives us an example. Marilyn
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Hi Marilyn. I had been studying up on Haibuns and thought I would try it. They say the tanka or haiku should give a reflection of the paragraph. I still need practice.
Melissa
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Great job. I will have to try one again.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a beautiful and wonderfully-worded offering, Melissa -- haven't given one of these a try, but perhaps, when life slows a bit! ;) :) The message it has of perseverance is one that is so very necessary for today's youth! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Such a beautiful and wonderfully-worded offering, Melissa -- haven't given one of these a try, but perhaps, when life slows a bit! ;) :) The message it has of perseverance is one that is so very necessary for today's youth! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Hi Yvette. Thank you. I had been studying up on Haibuns and thought I would try it. They say the tanka or haiku should give a reflection of the paragraph. I still need practice.
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
Beautifully presented. The picture shows a very tricky trail! We can often do things beyond our imagination. Sometimes we can stretch ourselves if we take the path full of roots and other obstacles instead of following the easy "yellow brick road." Your tanka illustrates the story of a man who conquered the path despite handicaps because of his determination. Many veterans who've lost an arm or leg show their ability to conquer obstacles. They can engage in all sorts of activities. judi
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Beautifully presented. The picture shows a very tricky trail! We can often do things beyond our imagination. Sometimes we can stretch ourselves if we take the path full of roots and other obstacles instead of following the easy "yellow brick road." Your tanka illustrates the story of a man who conquered the path despite handicaps because of his determination. Many veterans who've lost an arm or leg show their ability to conquer obstacles. They can engage in all sorts of activities. judi
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Thank you Judi. I had been studying up on Haibuns and thought I would try it. They say the tanka or haiku should give a reflection of the paragraph. I still need practice.
Melissa
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You're welcome. You're great at trying these various forms of poetry. judi
Comment from Aussie
Amen to your lessons on wisdom. Whatever we can't do physically, there is another way always. One must never allow anger to get the upper hand, patience is the key to walking our paths. Well done friend.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Amen to your lessons on wisdom. Whatever we can't do physically, there is another way always. One must never allow anger to get the upper hand, patience is the key to walking our paths. Well done friend.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Good morning!! Thank you for your comments. . I had been studying up on Haibuns and thought I would try it. They say the tanka or haiku should give a reflection of the paragraph. I still need practice.
Melissa
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Practice makes perfect!
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Practice makes perfect!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Melissa, I liked you haibun. It's an interesting form and I haven't tried it for the longest time. The only thing, I would like to say is that the prose bit consists of short very concise sentences. Warm regards. Ulla :)))
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Hi Melissa, I liked you haibun. It's an interesting form and I haven't tried it for the longest time. The only thing, I would like to say is that the prose bit consists of short very concise sentences. Warm regards. Ulla :)))
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2019
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Hello Ulla. Thank you. I had been studying up on Haibuns and thought I would try it. They say the tanka or haiku should give a reflection of the paragraph. I still need practice. :)
Melissa
