Search for Satisfaction
a poem54 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
We hope our deeds bring satisfaction to us and the others around us. Hoping to understand our minds and how work for the future with what we learned in the past.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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We hope our deeds bring satisfaction to us and the others around us. Hoping to understand our minds and how work for the future with what we learned in the past.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you for your unique perspective. I left the interpretation of this poem to each reader's own idea of how to find satisfaction. Thank you for your encouragement and excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
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You're welcome on all accounts, Jesse
Kpam
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You're welcome on all accounts, Jesse
Joan
Comment from estory
Interesting word play creates a great twisting and turning effect. You have us wondering whether this is in your head or out in reality, here, there or nowhere at all. A dream? That is the magic of language and its ability to take you on these journies. estory
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Interesting word play creates a great twisting and turning effect. You have us wondering whether this is in your head or out in reality, here, there or nowhere at all. A dream? That is the magic of language and its ability to take you on these journies. estory
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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I love your analysis of this poem. Your 'take' on it, is unusual but, very inviting to think of. I, too, believe in the magic of language.
Thank you for your interesting review and excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
A interesting poem. I like the last verse where you cleverly say life is like a theater production. The image worked well with this piece. The rhyme and rhythm were perfect. Thank you for sharing this piece with us. Blessings. ~Brenda
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A interesting poem. I like the last verse where you cleverly say life is like a theater production. The image worked well with this piece. The rhyme and rhythm were perfect. Thank you for sharing this piece with us. Blessings. ~Brenda
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Brenda, for choosing what parts you liked best. I thank you for your kind comments. I am happy you liked the rhyme and rhythm of this. I appreciate the excellent rating and review.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Jesse, this is a lovely, well written thoughtful poem. Mixed rhyme form that works well. I like your final stanza, it reminds me of Shakespeare's 'Al the worlds a stage, an all the men and women merely players' -
Life's a theater production
each of us members of the cast.
If everything goes as it should
after the final curtain falls
will we feel satisfied at last?....... Lovely stanza - regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Hello Jesse, this is a lovely, well written thoughtful poem. Mixed rhyme form that works well. I like your final stanza, it reminds me of Shakespeare's 'Al the worlds a stage, an all the men and women merely players' -
Life's a theater production
each of us members of the cast.
If everything goes as it should
after the final curtain falls
will we feel satisfied at last?....... Lovely stanza - regards Dorothy
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Hello Dorothy. Your wonderful comments are very appreciated. I humbly love how my last stanza reminds you of Shakespeare's famous words. I thank you for choosing the stanza you loved best. It helps to know what makes the biggest impression on a reader.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
During a lifetime there can be many moments of satisfaction. Yet we need to know that it is our own goals that may keep us from that. When we crave something that is outside of our realm we are conceding defeat. Your poem indicates well the ups and downs and ins and outs of our searches and your art is beautiful. However, where we look for satisfaction is key to whether we attain the same. Thanks for sharing your feelings.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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During a lifetime there can be many moments of satisfaction. Yet we need to know that it is our own goals that may keep us from that. When we crave something that is outside of our realm we are conceding defeat. Your poem indicates well the ups and downs and ins and outs of our searches and your art is beautiful. However, where we look for satisfaction is key to whether we attain the same. Thanks for sharing your feelings.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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I couldn't agree with you more. Your points are well taken. Thank you for your insightful review, with key elements of the poem, pointed out and given kind comments. It is where we seek satisfaction, which is the key to whether we can accomplish it or not.
Thank you for this lovely review and excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
You deliver a well penned and heartfelt piece. I guess it all depends on how we well we acted our part and serviced our assigned mission as to the measure of our satisfaction in the reward to follow. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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You deliver a well penned and heartfelt piece. I guess it all depends on how we well we acted our part and serviced our assigned mission as to the measure of our satisfaction in the reward to follow. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Your guess is right. Thank you for your kind words, and great opinion on what I wrote. I appreciate the excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about something that brings satisfaction and calmness to our minds but we search in vain while we dwell on earth. True satisfaction will only be found in heaven.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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A very well-written poem about something that brings satisfaction and calmness to our minds but we search in vain while we dwell on earth. True satisfaction will only be found in heaven.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Sandra, for your thoughtful review, and kind words of encouragement. Thank you for the excellent review and rating.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Brian Hill
I really like the first two 4 lines of cadence, the last one is a bit wordy to me. Think about something like...
Life is a theater
and we are the cast
If it goes as it should
Are we satisfied at last?
I have had reviewers make similar suggestions and it made a difference after I went back...
I really like it either way..
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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I really like the first two 4 lines of cadence, the last one is a bit wordy to me. Think about something like...
Life is a theater
and we are the cast
If it goes as it should
Are we satisfied at last?
I have had reviewers make similar suggestions and it made a difference after I went back...
I really like it either way..
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Brian, for your kind words, and valid suggestions on how to improve my poem. I appreciate your honesty and excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Susan Larson
This is very thought provoking and to me alludes to Shakespeare's line "All the world's a stage and all the men and women merely players" Your line "Trying my best to decipher what's real" seems to play into this drama of life.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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This is very thought provoking and to me alludes to Shakespeare's line "All the world's a stage and all the men and women merely players" Your line "Trying my best to decipher what's real" seems to play into this drama of life.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Susan, for your complimentary reference to Shakespeare's famous line. I appreciate you choosing your favorite line in this poem. It helps to know what makes an impression on a reader. Thank you for your kind words, and excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Your poem is very touching. It's how we feel that's important. You have touched many thoughts with your poem.
I'm looking outside today and see snow on the ground. Not sure if I'll drive on the roads today, but I'll definitely do some things that are worthy of this day.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Your poem is very touching. It's how we feel that's important. You have touched many thoughts with your poem.
I'm looking outside today and see snow on the ground. Not sure if I'll drive on the roads today, but I'll definitely do some things that are worthy of this day.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Rosemary, for letting me know what moved you to think in this poem.
Where I live it has been foggy all day. A perfect day for a nature walk, which I just returned from. To me, that is worthy of my day.
Thank you for your insightful review, and excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
