good night forest
Ottava rima poem4 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a lovely, melodic farewell 'til Spring... love that you've given the reader a glimpse into the 'vision' of the colors in such unique ways!! ;) :)
Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Such a lovely, melodic farewell 'til Spring... love that you've given the reader a glimpse into the 'vision' of the colors in such unique ways!! ;) :)
Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the insightful review. I do feel like the forest is ready for sleep under a blanket of leaves. I just have to make a few rabbit hutches with piled up boughs before it snows. Cheers.
Comment from Bill Pinder
I enjoyed reading this unique style of poem. I like the personification of the forest as being tucked in for the winter. Well chosen words for the couplet at the end.
Bill
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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I enjoyed reading this unique style of poem. I like the personification of the forest as being tucked in for the winter. Well chosen words for the couplet at the end.
Bill
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the encouraging review Bill. It was fun to write. Cheers.
Comment from Pantygynt
You have opted for a syllabic style of ten syllables a line rather than the metrical style of the example. This is compliant with the requirements laid down for this contest, but I feel that the most effective English language ottava rimas are written in iambic metre, alternating between the true pentameter, ten syllables and the feminine ending of eleven syllables.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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You have opted for a syllabic style of ten syllables a line rather than the metrical style of the example. This is compliant with the requirements laid down for this contest, but I feel that the most effective English language ottava rimas are written in iambic metre, alternating between the true pentameter, ten syllables and the feminine ending of eleven syllables.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the helpful review. Do you mean the last two lines should have 11 syllables? I just learned of tetrameter yesterday from another clever reviewer. Cheers.
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Not really. I think the final couplet is better with just ten syllables, pentameters. I suggest you google 'poetic metre'. You will find the who le thing explained there.
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Thanks for steering me in the right direction, cheers.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a technically sound Ottava Rima Poem with correct line and syllable count throughout. Your imagery is exquisite throughout as you describe the scene in vivid and picturesque wonder with just a hint of whimsy thrown in for good measure. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a technically sound Ottava Rima Poem with correct line and syllable count throughout. Your imagery is exquisite throughout as you describe the scene in vivid and picturesque wonder with just a hint of whimsy thrown in for good measure. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the encouraging review. Yup,the forest is tucked in with a blanket of leaves. I just have to make a few rabbit hutches out of boughs before the snow, cheers.
