White Dove
romantic poem.8 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Great personalization of couple's devotion... :) :) A wonderful offering for this limited format contest -- thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Great personalization of couple's devotion... :) :) A wonderful offering for this limited format contest -- thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the encouragement! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem! Thanks again!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Love Poem contest.
Your well rhymed verse tells a clear story.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Love Poem contest.
Your well rhymed verse tells a clear story.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Thank you! I'm happy you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Mark D. R.
Phil and Jen, per your verse, are matched perfectly. The same applies to your text and artwork. Your last line is superb for your entry.
The following has nothing to do with my review or stars. IMHO your overall presentation to FS reviewers would be enhanced if you raised the font size and made the text bold. Methinks that will make for a snappier contrast.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Phil and Jen, per your verse, are matched perfectly. The same applies to your text and artwork. Your last line is superb for your entry.
The following has nothing to do with my review or stars. IMHO your overall presentation to FS reviewers would be enhanced if you raised the font size and made the text bold. Methinks that will make for a snappier contrast.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Pantygynt
We are not told the precise nature of that miracle. there wasn't room in the form precribed for this contest. I often wonder why we reviers are forced to write 150 characters in reviewing these brief but pithy entries.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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We are not told the precise nature of that miracle. there wasn't room in the form precribed for this contest. I often wonder why we reviers are forced to write 150 characters in reviewing these brief but pithy entries.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from the13thpoet
A marvelous Monday to you fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed the 5-7-5 form of poem quite well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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A marvelous Monday to you fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed the 5-7-5 form of poem quite well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Michael McCottry Bell Jr
Very sweet small piece. I'm assuming the white dove is for innocence? I like the sentiment and the image is very beautiful of the young woman, I just would like to see more vivid detail within the words. Although I love the metaphor Good luck in the contest.
Michael
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Very sweet small piece. I'm assuming the white dove is for innocence? I like the sentiment and the image is very beautiful of the young woman, I just would like to see more vivid detail within the words. Although I love the metaphor Good luck in the contest.
Michael
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Eve Vasa
Hi Writer, you manage to tell quite a compelling little narrative in a few words, we sort of know that for some reason, Jen is lucky to have Phil and this becomes the chalice. Why?? He's her 'white dove'. So, she obviously feels he is too good for her, white being very symbolic colour.
Your story engaged me in spite of its brevity, hard to do.
Best of luck with your writing, Eve.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Hi Writer, you manage to tell quite a compelling little narrative in a few words, we sort of know that for some reason, Jen is lucky to have Phil and this becomes the chalice. Why?? He's her 'white dove'. So, she obviously feels he is too good for her, white being very symbolic colour.
Your story engaged me in spite of its brevity, hard to do.
Best of luck with your writing, Eve.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2019
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Thank you! I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from lauralumummu
A beautiful poem was well written in the haiku format. So romantic so your piece is following all the guidelines. Good luck in the contest. All the best Laura.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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A beautiful poem was well written in the haiku format. So romantic so your piece is following all the guidelines. Good luck in the contest. All the best Laura.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Thank you! I'm happy that you enjoyed my poem!
