Comment from rosehill (Wendy)

Excellent

Horror indeed. It would be my worst nightmare, being buried alive ( I think stroke victims who lose their ability to communicate and some Alzhimers sufferers must feel very like Susan. Powerfully scary in few syllables. - Wendy

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019

Thanks very much, Wendy. Yes, I imagine it would be unbearable. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Craigitar

Excellent

Well, that took an unexpected turn! Good job putting so much story into so few words, all done sticking to the 5-7-5 format! Great contest entry! Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019

Thanks for the kind words and the good wishes. Most grateful, Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written horror 5-7-5 poem. Most of us fear to be buried alive by mistake or even worse on purpose who like to get us out of the way and six feet under.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019

Definitely a case for cremation. Although that would be equally unpleasant, it would at least be quicker. Thanks, Sandra.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Yesiree, that's about as horrible as it gets! Unless we think about embalming... (lol -- sick minds think alike?) Or maybe the thing that is done before cause of death is determined... An autopsy? W-H-Y-Yyy...

Did you have to go there, Craig? Did ya? Huh? (LOL!!!)

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019

Why, yes I did, Dawn... yes I did ;-) Never mind, tomorrow there'll be a new plot har har har.

reply by Dawn Munro on 01-Nov-2019

HAHAHA!!! That's alright. You inspired MY horror entry for the "horror story" contest. *grin*

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

Hi Craig,

Everyone's worst nightmare ... to be buried alive ... yikes! Best wishes for the contest with this creepy entry. Syllable count for each line is spot on, and presentation is striking. Well done!

Cheers,
Connie

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019

Thanks very much for the great comments and the good wishes, Connie. Much appreciated and good to hear from you :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from royowen

Excellent

So much said in so few words Craig. One can imagine what it's like to be still alive and not able to escape, one can imagine rolling towards the furnace in a crematorium. Well done, a truly dread entry in this contest, good luck, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019

Thanks so much Roy. I don't imagine the cremation option would be much more pleasant, but at least it would be over sooner. Cheers, Craig

reply by royowen on 01-Nov-2019

That?s true, heh heh

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

"Grave Concerns is a 5-7-5 Horror Contest Entry"
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly and good luck with this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019

Thanks for the much appreciated comments and the good wishes. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

This one grips my heart, Craig. Doesn't everyone fear that they won't really be dead when they are buried? In a similar vein, I worried once that I would not really be anesthetized when the surgeon operated on me. Both thoughts are terrorizing.
Glad to see you writing again. Either you like this genre or you are just honoring Michael. At any rate, I am glad.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019

Yes, I've had that same concern... and I've never had an operation. But the thought of it is most disturbing. There's an idea for another story...

I don't mind a bit of horror, but my other half (who is the sweetest person you'll ever meet) devours the stuff like candy. The more ghastly and blood-drenched the better. It's OK though, I've learned to sleep with one eye open! Thanks, Debbie :-)

reply by Debbie Pope on 01-Nov-2019

That is so funny about your wife. She is stronger than me.

Comment from beizanten

Excellent

Is susan still alive when they burried her, if so so dark. A rather sad and well written piece of poetry, the emotion flow well despite the poetry shortness. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019

Yes, and she is not happy about it. Many thanks for the kind comments. Craig

Comment from Apriori

Excellent

Your poem creates tension and delivers a surprise twist. I like that you provided a proper name. The image reinforced your themeð???ð??½. Nice jobð???ð??½ I would enjoy using this as a writing prompt.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2019

Thanks for the kind remarks, they're much appreciated. Craig