Tanka (midnight skies)
Tanka16 total reviews
Comment from Apriori
Really lovely imagery and good flow. Correct me if I am wrong, but I think you are short one syllable in your last line. This is an easy enough fix to have a very good tanka.
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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Really lovely imagery and good flow. Correct me if I am wrong, but I think you are short one syllable in your last line. This is an easy enough fix to have a very good tanka.
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Comment Written 31-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Janetsue
This is a sky-theme tanka with a beautiful presentation. It offers an intriguing photograph? / painting? --I'm not sure which it is-- to accompany your message. Best wishes in the contest!
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This is a sky-theme tanka with a beautiful presentation. It offers an intriguing photograph? / painting? --I'm not sure which it is-- to accompany your message. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image.
-The syllable count is good.
-You have a good topic
and effective imagery.
-The first two lines are
very good with vivid imagery
and words like "shimmer" and
"dazzling," as well as alliteration.
-Very good pivot line.
-The imagery in the last
two lines is also good.
-A well written tanka.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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-Very nice image.
-The syllable count is good.
-You have a good topic
and effective imagery.
-The first two lines are
very good with vivid imagery
and words like "shimmer" and
"dazzling," as well as alliteration.
-Very good pivot line.
-The imagery in the last
two lines is also good.
-A well written tanka.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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Thank you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Ricky1024
Fish tank a contest entry was well-written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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Fish tank a contest entry was well-written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 31-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Bill Schott
This tanka, Midnight Skies, looks good and gives an awesome description of the star-blasted darkness of the deep blue universe.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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This tanka, Midnight Skies, looks good and gives an awesome description of the star-blasted darkness of the deep blue universe.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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Hi Bill. Thanks so much!!
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a lovely poem and a good example of a tanka. It is an excellent contest entry. The picture you selected is a wonderful complement to the words. Good luck in the voting.
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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This is a lovely poem and a good example of a tanka. It is an excellent contest entry. The picture you selected is a wonderful complement to the words. Good luck in the voting.
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Comment Written 31-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2019
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Hi Susan... thanks so much.
