Be Wee With Bea Part2
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "The Convoy"Continuation of Bea's Strollings
10 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing this fascinating chapter with us and adding the vivid picture. I appreciated your notes as well, since they make it clear that abused children you have worked with helped to inspire your storytelling. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thank you for sharing this fascinating chapter with us and adding the vivid picture. I appreciated your notes as well, since they make it clear that abused children you have worked with helped to inspire your storytelling. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thank you for your supportive review.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I can tell I need to go back and read the previous chapters, because I'm a bit confused. But I like the take on respecting the puppies' right to decide for themselves. The risk of making friends with someone others might consider dangerous (a bear!). The happy results. I can see how they would play as metaphors for children who've been abused. Thank you for your life work.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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I can tell I need to go back and read the previous chapters, because I'm a bit confused. But I like the take on respecting the puppies' right to decide for themselves. The risk of making friends with someone others might consider dangerous (a bear!). The happy results. I can see how they would play as metaphors for children who've been abused. Thank you for your life work.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Thank you for your supportive review. The fear of making new friends os from having been bullied. Bea is a representative of me and my adventures and lessons. Part 1 is a very accurate about me but Part 2 deviates a bit, but is loosely based on my life experiences. Bea invites you to peek at me of the some the previous chapters.
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Hopefully I will remember. So much to read, so little time! But Bea deserves a listener.
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Thank you for your thought
Comment from Gert sherwood
hello Liz' O'Neil
I read you story about making friends using a bear to tell a cute story is excellent and if there wrer any errors I could not find any.
Gert
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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hello Liz' O'Neil
I read you story about making friends using a bear to tell a cute story is excellent and if there wrer any errors I could not find any.
Gert
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Gert. Good to see you here. Thank you for your review. I hope you are well and staying warm.
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You are welcome Liz O'Neill
Gert
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
All have left, gone, you are still there fighting for survival, you wish and expect to meet your potential friends, thrill continues in true perspective; well said, well done.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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All have left, gone, you are still there fighting for survival, you wish and expect to meet your potential friends, thrill continues in true perspective; well said, well done.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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Thank for your encouragement. I think writing is one of the things that gives my life great meaning and joy now that I'm retired. They all wait for me at the Rainbow Bridge. I often say goodnight to them all, including Doolie aka Maureen and to my mother.
Comment from Sally Law
I'm sure this is a healing balm for all the wee ones that have come out of abuse. I love the pauses for happy dances and gratitude.
The description of Annie resembling Winston Churchill is for those much older, I think. I certainly remember him as a lover of WW2 history. Mr. Churchill will certainly stimulate conversation among the wee ones.
Paragraph 4 has some missing words. I think you meant, "Sweet puppy could not pass up an opportunity to make new friends."
Another fine chapter, Liz dear,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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I'm sure this is a healing balm for all the wee ones that have come out of abuse. I love the pauses for happy dances and gratitude.
The description of Annie resembling Winston Churchill is for those much older, I think. I certainly remember him as a lover of WW2 history. Mr. Churchill will certainly stimulate conversation among the wee ones.
Paragraph 4 has some missing words. I think you meant, "Sweet puppy could not pass up an opportunity to make new friends."
Another fine chapter, Liz dear,
Sally xo
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your supportive review. Annie always made me laugh with her Brussels Griffon-Winston Churchill pose. She had the same gruff manner as he too.
Comment from Ricky1024
"The Convoy"
Was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective Contents and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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"The Convoy"
Was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective Contents and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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Thank you for very supportive review. You & I write similar reviews. I appreciate your style.
Comment from bhogg
Such a neat little story! Below are just a couple of observations. Do a word search of things like 'had' and 'that'. They normally aren't needed . I'm sure your work is accompanied by illustrations. Really good!
making, caring beaver had said her.(said to her)
Timothy had reminded her (drop had)
go to be able to make new friends (to make new friends)
The plan was that they hurry (drop that)
hey had timed things perfectly (drop had). Won't mention this again, but you often use 'had' which is somewhat passive and not usually needed.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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Such a neat little story! Below are just a couple of observations. Do a word search of things like 'had' and 'that'. They normally aren't needed . I'm sure your work is accompanied by illustrations. Really good!
making, caring beaver had said her.(said to her)
Timothy had reminded her (drop had)
go to be able to make new friends (to make new friends)
The plan was that they hurry (drop that)
hey had timed things perfectly (drop had). Won't mention this again, but you often use 'had' which is somewhat passive and not usually needed.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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Thank you, I've been over this so many times and still missed some of these. I'm glad you enjoyed my story. Thank you for your supportive review.
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I can be a decent editor for other people, but my own writing...full of stuff!
Comment from lyenochka
Loved this sweet, first "fragile" meeting. It's true that people who may want to become acquainted but when both are shy, it requires overcoming a lot of anxiety first. Good that Bea learned to discuss it with the Maker first. And I love how she has to have a name for Doolie - as Doolie the Wise, so she would have a specific way to talk to the Maker about her. Charming post!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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Loved this sweet, first "fragile" meeting. It's true that people who may want to become acquainted but when both are shy, it requires overcoming a lot of anxiety first. Good that Bea learned to discuss it with the Maker first. And I love how she has to have a name for Doolie - as Doolie the Wise, so she would have a specific way to talk to the Maker about her. Charming post!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your delightful review. I am glad that you have such an appreciation for Bea
Comment from Mistydawn
That's a great picture for your story fits it well. I'm so glad that it worked out that Bea was able to make new friends. It sounds like it'll be a lasting friendship. Your story is well-written, very interesting, your characters really came to life. I'm sorry for all your losses. I do hope you find comfort in knowing that they are in a better place now.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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That's a great picture for your story fits it well. I'm so glad that it worked out that Bea was able to make new friends. It sounds like it'll be a lasting friendship. Your story is well-written, very interesting, your characters really came to life. I'm sorry for all your losses. I do hope you find comfort in knowing that they are in a better place now.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your compassionate message. I say goodnight to them most every night. Thank you for your supportive review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
How wonderful: new friends!! And, maybe, a confidant for Bea! ;) :) Another wonderful offering in the ever-expanding Bea-universe! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing, Liz! ;) Yvette
Puppy What a --> Puppy. What a
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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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How wonderful: new friends!! And, maybe, a confidant for Bea! ;) :) Another wonderful offering in the ever-expanding Bea-universe! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing, Liz! ;) Yvette
Puppy What a --> Puppy. What a
way do things but it --> way to do things, but it
And of course, ->> And, of course,
Comment Written 29-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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Yvette, I always look forward to your review. They ground and focus me. Thank you.
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Most welcome, my lady! ;)
