Outran
A 13 word horror story16 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Oh great poem, Christine. Best of luck in the contest with this scary composition. Well done. Image and presentation (set up) work well together. Marilyn
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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Oh great poem, Christine. Best of luck in the contest with this scary composition. Well done. Image and presentation (set up) work well together. Marilyn
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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Hi Marilyn Thanks for your review thought I would give this a try Stay indoors LOL Cherrs Chrisx
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A Very well-written thirteen word horror poem. It is very scary when we hear someone behind us in the dark and we cannot see them. We run as fast as we can and hope he cannot run faster.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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A Very well-written thirteen word horror poem. It is very scary when we hear someone behind us in the dark and we cannot see them. We run as fast as we can and hope he cannot run faster.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Sandra Thanks for reading my attempt At a 13 word horror late at night unable to sleep so this is what I do LOL Yes would hate to hear those footsteps behind me Cheers Chris
Comment from LisaMay
Your story, though brief as required, paints a vivid picture for us, especially women who can't run fast. The thought of being followed makes us feel very vulnerable and you have caught this well. The word-per-line format enhances the feeling.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Your story, though brief as required, paints a vivid picture for us, especially women who can't run fast. The thought of being followed makes us feel very vulnerable and you have caught this well. The word-per-line format enhances the feeling.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Lisa Thanks and well still back LOL despite my previous pen down I cant seem to resist a challenge just as well I suppose Ha Ha This is a late night unable to sleep effort ha ha Never know what my tired brain will come up with but think ai will stay indoors tonight Cheers Chrisx
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a structurally sound 13 Word Poem in the topic of horror. I thought your format clever as it adds to the sense of frantic escape with no way out. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a structurally sound 13 Word Poem in the topic of horror. I thought your format clever as it adds to the sense of frantic escape with no way out. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Monica Thanks for reading my late night unable to sleep writing LOL
I saw this and thought I will give this a go and thought this is what would happen to some out by themselves late at night and how I would feel hearing footsteps that mimicked mine Cheers Chrisx
Comment from Alan Clark
When I first saw the story description 'A 13 word horror story', I thought it could not possibly involve a complete story. I was wrong - it did. Kudos on a great visual. In my mind, I could see her attacker gaining ground as she ran as fast as she could.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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When I first saw the story description 'A 13 word horror story', I thought it could not possibly involve a complete story. I was wrong - it did. Kudos on a great visual. In my mind, I could see her attacker gaining ground as she ran as fast as she could.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Alan Thanks for reviewing my horror attempt but your words capture exactly what I hoped a reader would see in this somewhat short story many Cheers much appreciated Christine
Comment from NickieT
I enjoy this entry a lot. Your form makes it seem drawn out, heightening the tension. I also like how you have mirrored the woman and the man's actions/reactions. It feels complete despite being so few words. Best of luck!
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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I enjoy this entry a lot. Your form makes it seem drawn out, heightening the tension. I also like how you have mirrored the woman and the man's actions/reactions. It feels complete despite being so few words. Best of luck!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi NickieT Thanks so much for stopping by to have a look at my 13 word horror story and glad you like my attempt cant do to much with limited words but enjoyed trying Cheers Christine
Comment from Sharon Feldt
You certainly conveyed the action and the emotions in this short but very effective poem! the picture adds to the feeling of terror, and the format of your poem adds to the action! Happy Halloween dreams!
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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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You certainly conveyed the action and the emotions in this short but very effective poem! the picture adds to the feeling of terror, and the format of your poem adds to the action! Happy Halloween dreams!
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Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Sharon Thanks for your review and glad to have your comments and Enjoy your Halloween alsoMany Cheers Christine
Comment from Susan Larson
What a feat dreaming up this horror story and presenting it in a mere thirteen words! The picture adds a lot to your words, and the one word per line makes the reader feel the footsteps as the story moves along. Thank you for the well wishes for pleasant dreams!
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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What a feat dreaming up this horror story and presenting it in a mere thirteen words! The picture adds a lot to your words, and the one word per line makes the reader feel the footsteps as the story moves along. Thank you for the well wishes for pleasant dreams!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Susan Thanks for reading my horror effort a late night write to help me sleep LOL A bit of fun thinking up this Cheers Christine
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, this is great, Christine and the Psycho painting is just the thing to heighten the tension and feeling of impending doom.
Excellent entry and good luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Ha, this is great, Christine and the Psycho painting is just the thing to heighten the tension and feeling of impending doom.
Excellent entry and good luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Gloria Thanks for your review and yes back still LoL with this unable to sleep contest entry well what else can a girl do at 1 am Ha Ha stay inside Cheers Chris we will see
Comment from aryr
Good luck in the contest Christine. I had to chuckle when you added in your narrative note wishes for pleasant dreams. You definitely caught the essence of a brief nightmare tale in just thirteen words. Very well done and nice picture choice.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Good luck in the contest Christine. I had to chuckle when you added in your narrative note wishes for pleasant dreams. You definitely caught the essence of a brief nightmare tale in just thirteen words. Very well done and nice picture choice.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2019
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Hi Ary Thanks for reading my horror late night unable to sleep poem Thought 13 words was a challenge and enjoyed having a go but indoors tonight Ha Ha Cheers Chris
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You are most welcome Christine.
