Comment from Diana L Crawford

Excellent

Finally, I have caught up to this chapter! Fascinating! I'm so in love with this story. The dragoyles are hilarious little minions! I love they are twins and how you described their attempt to get up the tree! You describe each so vividly with such intense personalities. I'm glad to see Black is recovering well. One more chapter and I'll be caught up! xoxo

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019

Thanks! I'm so glad you're catching up and enjoying the chapters.

Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux

Excellent

I'm enjoying reading this little saga. I don't know that I've caught every one of them, but, the ones that I've read, I'm enjoying. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Keep them coming! Well done!

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019

Thanks. Glad you're enjoying my story. The next chapter has been posted.

Comment from damommy

Exceptional

This is a great chapter! Lots of action. The best part to me was their fishing trip. I love the different personalities of the little dragons. Mountain came to the rescue when Aaron needed help. I can see all of them being a force these intruders won't want to fight.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019

Thanks for the six! Yes, they're going to be a force to be reckoned with when they're not fishing.

Comment from lauralumummu

Excellent

Well written story with great descriptions. What an imagination you have.
This is not the type of book, I would read usually but you are great at this kind of writing. All the best, Laura

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019

Thanks. This is something new for me, too. I thought I'd try something different. Glad you're enjoying it.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your chapter, Cindy. There is a lot of action from many facets. It is good too see the dragons helping. It seems that there will be non-stop action from outside forces now. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019

Thanks. Yes, I have lots of action planned for the next few chapters.

Comment from brenda bickers

Excellent

Oh Cindy,
This is getting more interesting with each new chapter. I just love those little dragons. Introducing some new characters will open up your possibilities and I cannot wait to hear about them.
Keep em' coming.
Brenda.x

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019

Thanks. There's plenty of action coming. Glad I'm keeping you in suspense.

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

It was a good thing the boy and Mountain helped him the way they did. That was pretty suspenseful. I thought Aaron was a goner for sure. It's well-written, very interesting. Your characters, actions, and dialogue seem realistic.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019

Thanks. Glad it was suspenseful and not obvious I wasn't going to kill Aaron.

Comment from juliaSjames

Exceptional

Character development of people and dragons in this chapter. I wonder how old the dragons would be compared to human children. Nice to see Mountain's spontaneous gesture of help for his human father.

Seems like Dylan and Aaron will be allies when the attack comes.

I'm enjoying this book.

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019

Thanks for the six! The dragons are intelligent, and learning about the world much as a human child would, but they are dragons, and see things differently. Glad you're enjoying the book.

Comment from Sallyo

Excellent

Those dragons are getting into the team work! Now to see how long Aaron can keep his secret from Dylan and co... I'm not sure the leader of the scouts would be talking normally with an arrow in his shoulder. OUCH.

and announced "We're going fishing."
and announced, "We're going fishing."

Red and Green flew over top, refusing
Red and Green flew over the top, refusing

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019

Thanks. I'll fix that comma right away. Yeah, 'that arrow would hurt a lot, but a soldier wouldn't let it stop him.

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

This kept me engrossed from the beginning.

I picked up a few points but ignore any you don't agree with.

Red and Green flew over top - did you mean to write 'over the top'?

Dragons disappeared into the bush, along with Duane, carrying Black - should it be 'the dragon's'? You might have meant it as it is so I'm just drawing it to your attention.

Aaron, who had his bow drawn, let an arrow fly - maybe 'who had drawn his bow'

They raised swords and shields and rode toward Aaron - To avoid using two 'ands', I might have said 'They raised swords and shields, riding toward Aaron'

"Okay. If you trust this helper what don't exist, that's good enough for me," said Dylan. - is this how Dylan talks? Otherwise, it should be 'who doesn't exist'

Cheers
Judy

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019

Thanks. You're right about 'over the top.' I meant 'dragons' as plural. An apostrophe would make it possessive. Dylan's speech makes him unique. I wanted him to be his own character.

reply by JudyE on 03-Nov-2019

I don't know where my apostrophe came from. I didn't mean to put it there. Sorry. What I actually meant was, was it supposed to be 'the dragons'.