Overdose
lune contest20 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Bill perfect poem for this contest the reminder that using drugs are the cause of death for any age.
by using drugs can cause addition for any age.
Gert
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Hello Bill perfect poem for this contest the reminder that using drugs are the cause of death for any age.
by using drugs can cause addition for any age.
Gert
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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"HelloBill?" None the less, thank you for the review??
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You are welcome Val Cisson
Gert
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a strong cautionary tale. It is a necessary topic to address. I worked in a psych hospital for substance abuse and psych patients. I was so sad to hear the opiate addicts tell of how that is all they thought of. Chasing the high occupied their thoughts the minute they tried heroin, in particular. It was very sad when we heard that some of our favorite repeaters who really kept trying, OD'd shortly after the time they left. Some did not make it. We actually gave each patient discharging, some Narcan in case they needed it for friends or needed it themselves for friends to administer to them. Thank you for broaching this topic.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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This is a strong cautionary tale. It is a necessary topic to address. I worked in a psych hospital for substance abuse and psych patients. I was so sad to hear the opiate addicts tell of how that is all they thought of. Chasing the high occupied their thoughts the minute they tried heroin, in particular. It was very sad when we heard that some of our favorite repeaters who really kept trying, OD'd shortly after the time they left. Some did not make it. We actually gave each patient discharging, some Narcan in case they needed it for friends or needed it themselves for friends to administer to them. Thank you for broaching this topic.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Thank you for this amazing review. I worked as a CASA in Washington St., where Meth was the big problem. I never saw a Meth addict recover, and it was heart breaking because most of them started at 12. I, also, have a recovering addict in my family, and I know everyday is a choice.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a serious entry for the Lune Poetry contest.
Your short verse tells a sad and true story.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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This is a serious entry for the Lune Poetry contest.
Your short verse tells a sad and true story.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Thank you
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a very good use of the lune. You chose words which, though few, say all there needs to be said. Using strong words like "poison" and the phrase, "Addiction meets Death" give due emphasis to the tragedy of many young people using, abusing, and overdosing from poisonous drugs. The title is powerful, as is the lune. The photo shows us a young woman with a needle in her hand, ready to inject an illegal drug. Very effective photo to go along with the well-written poem. Thank you for addressing this problem.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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This is a very good use of the lune. You chose words which, though few, say all there needs to be said. Using strong words like "poison" and the phrase, "Addiction meets Death" give due emphasis to the tragedy of many young people using, abusing, and overdosing from poisonous drugs. The title is powerful, as is the lune. The photo shows us a young woman with a needle in her hand, ready to inject an illegal drug. Very effective photo to go along with the well-written poem. Thank you for addressing this problem.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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No, thank you for this fabulous review. I am so glad you "got" my lune. So many reviews on this sight are without soul.
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You're sincerely welcome.
Yes, I understood the importance of the message, and you did a great job with the lune.
Jesse
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a horrific problem in the area I live in. We are close to I 35, the route most drug smugglers use to bring them from Mexico. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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This is a horrific problem in the area I live in. We are close to I 35, the route most drug smugglers use to bring them from Mexico. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Debbie where is I 35? I am curious as I live by the Mexican border in Coronado CA.
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I 35 is in the middle of the country. It runs from Texas through Minnesota. Right through Iowa where I live. I live seven miles from it. You think of drugs as being a problem in big cities, but it is also a problem in small farming communities of 6,000~Debbie
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I agree, as I have dealt with Meth addicts in Washington St. Where the are open areas that are no where near big cities. They can cook it without being caught.
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Farmland is a great place to do it unnoticed. After I divorced my ex, I found out he was a meth addict and dealer as well. No wonder we had nothing worthwhile in our relationship. He went to prison twice after the divorce. I also found out he had sold to an undercover officer 10 times~Debbie
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I feel for you and all the deception and lies you must have lived through. I hope your life is better now
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Thank you. It is. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Janetsue
It is a tragic situation compounded by so many youthful suicides because they have given up hope for things to improve. I'm glad you posted this because awareness of the matter cannot be give to much attention.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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It is a tragic situation compounded by so many youthful suicides because they have given up hope for things to improve. I'm glad you posted this because awareness of the matter cannot be give to much attention.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Thank for this positive review.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a technically sound Lune Poem with correct line and syllable count throughout. The content is moving, timely, and relevant and should resonate with many readers. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a technically sound Lune Poem with correct line and syllable count throughout. The content is moving, timely, and relevant and should resonate with many readers. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Thank you for this insightful review, as they very rare on this site. Val
Comment from royowen
You are so right Val, I missed the drug age, heroine to me was something administered to a terminally ill patient, although I embraced booze with both hands, don't drink a drop these days, but I still understand addiction and it's more lethal with these more sophisticated drugs. A great entry in this lune 5/3/5 poetry contest, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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You are so right Val, I missed the drug age, heroine to me was something administered to a terminally ill patient, although I embraced booze with both hands, don't drink a drop these days, but I still understand addiction and it's more lethal with these more sophisticated drugs. A great entry in this lune 5/3/5 poetry contest, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Thank you for this fabulous review, as they are very rare on this site. I felt you really "got" what I was trying to say. I appreciate you.
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Well done
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written and very sad Lune poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words that are so very true. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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This is a very well written and very sad Lune poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words that are so very true. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Teri.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This poem addressed a sombre topic. I am not familiar with the lune format. You addressed the topic as intended in a succinct manner and the message came across clearly. The picture was fitting.
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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This poem addressed a sombre topic. I am not familiar with the lune format. You addressed the topic as intended in a succinct manner and the message came across clearly. The picture was fitting.
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to review.
