Overdose
lune contest20 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Warren
Addiction is such a dreadful thing. Young people know the stuff they're putting into their bodies is killing them, but they can't stop. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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Addiction is such a dreadful thing. Young people know the stuff they're putting into their bodies is killing them, but they can't stop. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the review
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A very somber Lune offering... you have the correct syllable count and your picture compliments your verse well... it is a very sad situation with a lot of people, young and old. Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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A very somber Lune offering... you have the correct syllable count and your picture compliments your verse well... it is a very sad situation with a lot of people, young and old. Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the review
Comment from amada
Needle, poison, vein, death....This short work bites to the soul because you use strong words that are like a bomb to the heart. This three short words produce a reaction in the reader. This was very well written, saying a lot in three short lines.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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Needle, poison, vein, death....This short work bites to the soul because you use strong words that are like a bomb to the heart. This three short words produce a reaction in the reader. This was very well written, saying a lot in three short lines.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2019
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Thank you, since the lune is so short I feel strong words are appropriate. Thank you for getting this little piece
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Val. Today we live in a society that is definitely faster paced, more disrespectful and people seem to take more chances than they did when I was a bit younger. Your thoughtful poem brought this to the front for me. Good luck. She's a beaut! xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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Hi Val. Today we live in a society that is definitely faster paced, more disrespectful and people seem to take more chances than they did when I was a bit younger. Your thoughtful poem brought this to the front for me. Good luck. She's a beaut! xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 29-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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Thank you for reviewing this one. It is close to my heart.
Comment from Brian Hill
You hit the syllables count and the sad truth at the same time. Nicely done and love your notes. I hope you don't have a personal relationship with the subject matter.
Good luck, again great message.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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You hit the syllables count and the sad truth at the same time. Nicely done and love your notes. I hope you don't have a personal relationship with the subject matter.
Good luck, again great message.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the review . Most of us have some "person" like this in our lives. Maybe you are fortunate not to have one.
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Oh, I do and that is why I was hoping you didn't. W
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You made excellent use of the few syllables allowed in a lune poem.
It is horrifying how people fall prey to addiction, knowing fully well they could die or damage their organs.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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You made excellent use of the few syllables allowed in a lune poem.
It is horrifying how people fall prey to addiction, knowing fully well they could die or damage their organs.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the review
Comment from Therese Caron
Hello Val - I also address this problem in a contest I just entered on thIs site. The name is The Wolf At The Door, which is a lengthy version of your brief but very moving poem. I like the clarity and pain both conveyed by you. Addiction is a curse in our country, and you have stated it clearly and concisely.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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Hello Val - I also address this problem in a contest I just entered on thIs site. The name is The Wolf At The Door, which is a lengthy version of your brief but very moving poem. I like the clarity and pain both conveyed by you. Addiction is a curse in our country, and you have stated it clearly and concisely.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your eloquent review, as they are far too little of them. Yes, I can't think of many families that haven't been touched by addiction in one way or the other. I will try to read your's Val
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Thank you Val; I hope you like it.
Comment from Patty Palmer
yes, there are so many young kids getting in on the bandwagon these days. They seem to get younger and younger all the time! It's bad enough for older people and they know what they are doing. How does a 9-year-old decide if he's taking too high of a dose and instead of getting high, they die!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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yes, there are so many young kids getting in on the bandwagon these days. They seem to get younger and younger all the time! It's bad enough for older people and they know what they are doing. How does a 9-year-old decide if he's taking too high of a dose and instead of getting high, they die!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Agree, it's a very sad sight. I just listened to Neil Young's version of the "The Needle and the Damage Done"
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Lune and a valuable point about addiction in any form becomes a worldwide problem and many young people lose their lives and the devil is smiling all the way.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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A very well-written Lune and a valuable point about addiction in any form becomes a worldwide problem and many young people lose their lives and the devil is smiling all the way.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Thank you for reviewing my little lune. Your right "the devil is smiling" Val
Comment from l.raven
Hi Val, so very true my sweet friend...and there
are so many people who are addicted to so many drugs...
they can't survive in this world...it is so sad sweet girl...
your poem is very well written ...and so very true...sigh....
Good luck in the contest...so good to see you...much love...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Hi Val, so very true my sweet friend...and there
are so many people who are addicted to so many drugs...
they can't survive in this world...it is so sad sweet girl...
your poem is very well written ...and so very true...sigh....
Good luck in the contest...so good to see you...much love...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much, Linda, for the lovely review. Yes, it is a sad world when 12 year olds are already addicted.
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yes it is...and it's getting worse...sigh...your so very welcome...love xxoo
