Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

I remember the scene pictures of my sons and it stays with me forever as I know this does for you. HARSH memories and tearful thoughts leading to others being allowed to live

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019

Mine is been going on 17 years this coming month of March time is healed when it's happened to a limited degree journaling takes care of any leftovers.
after losing a child whether to child a daughter or son father mother....
No one really enjoys going through that pain.
I hope it's easier now for you too.
Ricky

Comment from dovemarie

Excellent

Dear Ricky, A lot of things happened that were luck, at least the girls didn't get killed or hurt, and I didn't know the driver was on a drug, the two (2) of them did travel to another dimension, Jay is now in another dimension, and his organs are being put to good use by the people who received them. Dove

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019

Driver that was driving my son was known just like Jason that smoke an occasional doobie but other than that neither of them were drinking.
Thanks,
Ricky

Comment from papa55mike

Excellent

We all live in dimensions of our own choosing. This story is wonderfully written and I love the picture. Best of luck with your writing!

Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019

Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This is a well penned narrative of the events leading up to the results of that tragic night. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019

Thanks,
Ricky

Comment from the13thpoet

Excellent

Hello Ricky1024, a wonderful Wednesday to you. I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing such a personal and tragic story, sometimes reliving the past can be hard, so thanks again. Good work my friend!

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019

Thanks,
13thpoet.
Doctor Ricky 1024

Comment from Alex Rosel

Excellent

This is a particularly emotive piece {smiles}.

Here are a few points you might like to consider:

"The year was 2001 and the movie, "Fast and Furious." -- When you place a title in quotes inside dialogue, it will normally be punctuated like this:
""The year was 2001 and the movie, 'Fast and Furious.'"

Alternatively, you can italicize the title. Use the advanced editor on FanStory when entering your post.

Wr stayed less than two hours." -- Spag? Is this supposed to be:
"We stayed less than two hours."

"A Ford representative stated it could have been going 100 MPJ." -- Spag? I think you mean "MPH".

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019

I corrected yours and found a few more Grammar Issues.
Thanks,
Ricky

reply by Alex Rosel on 23-Oct-2019

Thumbs up

Comment from JLR

Excellent

A compelling read, based on the reality of too much car, too little experience and Hollywood infatuation with fast cars. A well developed story, authentic dialogue and level events,

Did you mean something other than..... L
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Wr stayed less than two hours."

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019

Thanks and I'll check the spaghetti.
Ricky