Enlightenment
can we attain it44 total reviews
Comment from estory
Another great effort with plenty of echoing rhyme effects and dramatic breaks in the language that create this sense of mystery in life. I loved the fragmented format that gives us an incomplete view of our experience, it's like a rubric cube with facets changing as we view it from different angles. Keep up the good work. estory
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
Another great effort with plenty of echoing rhyme effects and dramatic breaks in the language that create this sense of mystery in life. I loved the fragmented format that gives us an incomplete view of our experience, it's like a rubric cube with facets changing as we view it from different angles. Keep up the good work. estory
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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Smile. Thank you. It is ALWAYS good to hear from you. Period. Even if, (when?) lol, you don't care too much for the writing. But, I must say, you are a strong supporter, and writers can never have enough of them. Smiles. Doug
Comment from Wabigoon
Victor--
#1 I do not see some other poem you are supposedly referencing. Maybe it is here somehow but I don't see it.
It seems to me it would be down. That "enlightenment" is not up but down. But you do not have the balls to say this so I am left not knowing what the hell this is about except you are pulling your punches, Stop it!
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
Victor--
#1 I do not see some other poem you are supposedly referencing. Maybe it is here somehow but I don't see it.
It seems to me it would be down. That "enlightenment" is not up but down. But you do not have the balls to say this so I am left not knowing what the hell this is about except you are pulling your punches, Stop it!
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Yes, sir. The referenced poem is in my listings of poems. All are there from the beginning. "Now I Drink Her 'Round"
Comment from NickieT
I enjoy the way that this poem views enlightenment - not with some dramatic fanfare, but instead with a private moment of clarity and simple perspective.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
I enjoy the way that this poem views enlightenment - not with some dramatic fanfare, but instead with a private moment of clarity and simple perspective.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Uh huh. Thank you.
Comment from Susan Morritt
That is an interesting concept... plagiarizing your own material. I love this poem. The lines, "I can. I will. But, still I sit..." are powerful with their direct simplicity. Thank you for posting this.
Susan
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
That is an interesting concept... plagiarizing your own material. I love this poem. The lines, "I can. I will. But, still I sit..." are powerful with their direct simplicity. Thank you for posting this.
Susan
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Thank you for reading it, and forgetting to sew up your star sack. Smile. Doug
Comment from djeckert
very interesting people of introspection, outro spection, what we are, think we are, think we can be and what we can and cannot only speculate. Well done and quite intriguing . Blessings to you.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
very interesting people of introspection, outro spection, what we are, think we are, think we can be and what we can and cannot only speculate. Well done and quite intriguing . Blessings to you.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Thank you. I am deeply appreciative.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Victor,
I suspect most writers repeat themselves
knowingly or unknowingly
Just as I suspect it is difficult to write original work
among the billions of pages already penned.
I like your poem, particularly the last stanzas.
One small thing that I'd suggest is to avoid the use of "do"
as in: "do reflect." It always seems an awkward fit to me.
I'd try "oft" or other words of your choice.
Nicely done
Robert
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
Hello Victor,
I suspect most writers repeat themselves
knowingly or unknowingly
Just as I suspect it is difficult to write original work
among the billions of pages already penned.
I like your poem, particularly the last stanzas.
One small thing that I'd suggest is to avoid the use of "do"
as in: "do reflect." It always seems an awkward fit to me.
I'd try "oft" or other words of your choice.
Nicely done
Robert
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Robert. I do listen to advice. But that is about all. LOL
Comment from Pantygynt
The final stanza of this is particularly poignant, invoking the enlightenment that is the subject of the poem. That it is to be found somewhere in the bast ocean is most apposite.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
The final stanza of this is particularly poignant, invoking the enlightenment that is the subject of the poem. That it is to be found somewhere in the bast ocean is most apposite.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Thank you, dear sir. Doug
Comment from Nowhereman1
Very well written poem. I don't know what you mean by plagiarizing yourself but if you wrote it then doubt it matter. Ill have to check out the other poem though if it is on here. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
Very well written poem. I don't know what you mean by plagiarizing yourself but if you wrote it then doubt it matter. Ill have to check out the other poem though if it is on here. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Thank you. It is in my listings. But another reviewer said he could not find it. This I do not understand. Unless what I see on my webpage is different than what everyone else gets. But they all should be there. I even paid FS more money to "eternally" save them for me. If U cannot find it, please let me know so I can tell FS.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a good poem and a very well written one. I enjoyed reading it and liked the way it sounded and the way the words worked. Very enjoyable and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
This is a good poem and a very well written one. I enjoyed reading it and liked the way it sounded and the way the words worked. Very enjoyable and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Thank you for reading it.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I can.
I will.
But, still
I sit...
Sounds like me every morning, LOL. I'm not a morning person and it takes me forever to get going--then I can't stop and spend half the night up busy with what I didn't get done during the day.
A well written poem, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
I can.
I will.
But, still
I sit...
Sounds like me every morning, LOL. I'm not a morning person and it takes me forever to get going--then I can't stop and spend half the night up busy with what I didn't get done during the day.
A well written poem, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Thank you. I'm not a morning person either.