The Convict Train
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "The Superintendent's Report"Levi escorts a train full of dangerous convicts
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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Casper gave a slight nod of apprreciation (appreciation)
the convicts starred at the massive stone (stared)
As the guards took the Convicts to the living units,, four other guards (omit a comma here)
An interesting story with good detail regarding the checking in process at the prison. Nice work, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Casper gave a slight nod of apprreciation (appreciation)
the convicts starred at the massive stone (stared)
As the guards took the Convicts to the living units,, four other guards (omit a comma here)
An interesting story with good detail regarding the checking in process at the prison. Nice work, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Debbie, thank you for your kind review. I will go back and look at this chapter again to make corrections. I just posted chapter 25. This story is almost finished now.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
First you need to use spell check on the chapter because I found many typo's using double letters in the spelling of some words. Saying that, I felt the tension as the convicts dismounted the train and played with the nerves of the young soldiers who were guarding them. The thought's as they approached the prison were very expressive. What they went through as they are documented was very interesting. Well done. Now I assume we will follow the posse and find out if Badger gets his revenge against Bo Meadows. Well done, Larry. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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First you need to use spell check on the chapter because I found many typo's using double letters in the spelling of some words. Saying that, I felt the tension as the convicts dismounted the train and played with the nerves of the young soldiers who were guarding them. The thought's as they approached the prison were very expressive. What they went through as they are documented was very interesting. Well done. Now I assume we will follow the posse and find out if Badger gets his revenge against Bo Meadows. Well done, Larry. Nancy:)
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thank you Nancy. Spell check on Fanstory does not see to work for me very well (very slow, or not at all) I am trying to remember to download the chapter to my desktop so I can use a different sell check before posting.
Comment from Bill Pinder
I enjoyed reading this western story about transporting outlaws to a prison. You did a good job making the story seem believable with the interactions between the convicts and the guards. Thanks for sharing!
Bill
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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I enjoyed reading this western story about transporting outlaws to a prison. You did a good job making the story seem believable with the interactions between the convicts and the guards. Thanks for sharing!
Bill
Comment Written 19-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Thank you very much for your review. There is one (maybe two) more chapters left to write before this story is finished. Then I will send it off to my editor. I hope to publish this early next year.
Comment from Michael McCottry Bell Jr
Watch out for typos solder/soldier. I like this so far very interesting and I love the character names you came up with(they seem very original). I like the dialogue too and the imagery. You can see it right in your face which is definitely a great thing. Just watch your Puncs/typos.
Hope to read more
Michael
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Watch out for typos solder/soldier. I like this so far very interesting and I love the character names you came up with(they seem very original). I like the dialogue too and the imagery. You can see it right in your face which is definitely a great thing. Just watch your Puncs/typos.
Hope to read more
Michael
Comment Written 19-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind review. I have gone back and read the chapter again looking for typo's. There is one (maybe two) more chapters to write before this story is finished. I hope to hear from you again.
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you're so welcome
