Dew on Green Clover
Mother nature nurtures these46 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
Awww, I love the mental image of little fawn and doe munching on the dewy clover. You presented it very well and drew wonderful mental images for your reader. Well done, J.
Melissa
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019
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Awww, I love the mental image of little fawn and doe munching on the dewy clover. You presented it very well and drew wonderful mental images for your reader. Well done, J.
Melissa
Comment Written 21-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019
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Thank you, I feel I finally have delivered a solid haiku..
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Lovely. I read this as I sat on the front porch, looking out over the 32-acre park in the early dawn. You catapulted me deep into the silence, the soft scent of the damp clover, and the sparkle as the sun reaches out to touch the leaves. Thank you. - Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019
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Lovely. I read this as I sat on the front porch, looking out over the 32-acre park in the early dawn. You catapulted me deep into the silence, the soft scent of the damp clover, and the sparkle as the sun reaches out to touch the leaves. Thank you. - Wendy
Comment Written 21-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019
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Wendy, I am pleased that you had a "present moment" with nature and my poem, may your day continue to unfold amazing discoveries.
Comment from WryWriter
So much imagery enters the reader's mind from so few and well-done poetic words! The photograph perfect for the theme. I really loved the sunbeams dancing on dewdrops, then came the beauty of the doe and fawn, followed by the peaceful consumption of dark-green clover....
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019
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So much imagery enters the reader's mind from so few and well-done poetic words! The photograph perfect for the theme. I really loved the sunbeams dancing on dewdrops, then came the beauty of the doe and fawn, followed by the peaceful consumption of dark-green clover....
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019
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Thank,ypu
Comment from Ulla
Hi JLR. Its a lovely 5-7-5 poem which has a lovely imagery. The short forms are very difficult to write but I think you've done a great job. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Hi JLR. Its a lovely 5-7-5 poem which has a lovely imagery. The short forms are very difficult to write but I think you've done a great job. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:))
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Ulla, thank you, yes these have been elusive, However, I feel good about this one.
Comment from Janet Foor
A lovely poem with an equally lovely picture to compliment your work.
One can almost feel the mist on the clover and breath in the early morning air.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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A lovely poem with an equally lovely picture to compliment your work.
One can almost feel the mist on the clover and breath in the early morning air.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Janet, thank your reviewing and commenting on this poem
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a charming write, beautifully delivered in both lyrical verse and lovely image - fully compliant with the prompt, and best wishes in the contest
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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In my opinion, a charming write, beautifully delivered in both lyrical verse and lovely image - fully compliant with the prompt, and best wishes in the contest
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Eve, thank you!
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You are very welcome indeed...Eve
Comment from Mastery
Hi Jim. I think you have a sure winner here, my friend. Lots of imagination went into the lines of this 5-7-5. I especially like the clever satori. Good luck to you in the contest, my friend. : ) Bob
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Hi Jim. I think you have a sure winner here, my friend. Lots of imagination went into the lines of this 5-7-5. I especially like the clever satori. Good luck to you in the contest, my friend. : ) Bob
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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You honor me, my friend. I really felt good about this posting.
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: ) Bob
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: ) Bob
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's lovely. It's easy to imagine the deer that will be enjoying those fresh greens. In the title, you might want to capitalize green and clover. Important words normally have capitals in titles. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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That's lovely. It's easy to imagine the deer that will be enjoying those fresh greens. In the title, you might want to capitalize green and clover. Important words normally have capitals in titles. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Thanks, Cindy, I will consider this insight.
Comment from Willosa
Haiku is a challenge, at least I find it so. This is a lovely example of getting it right, very descriptive and great imagery. Hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Haiku is a challenge, at least I find it so. This is a lovely example of getting it right, very descriptive and great imagery. Hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
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Thank you,Willosa. Haiku is also elusive for me, I do feel good about this one.
Comment from rspoet
Hello JRL,
You've written and excellent 5-7-5 poem for the contest
with wonderful description and imagery.
If those are four-leaf clover, you won't need any more luck,
but my best wishes to you.
Great picture to match.
Robert
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
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Hello JRL,
You've written and excellent 5-7-5 poem for the contest
with wonderful description and imagery.
If those are four-leaf clover, you won't need any more luck,
but my best wishes to you.
Great picture to match.
Robert
Comment Written 19-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
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Robert, thank you, I really feel good about this haiku. They have been elusive poetic challenges.
