Telegram
my life in 150 words18 total reviews
Comment from Gail Denham
Read and burn? No, keep this in a journal into which you write the highlights of your life as you move along. Reading them later can bring back happy memories.
Good job on a hard contest.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Read and burn? No, keep this in a journal into which you write the highlights of your life as you move along. Reading them later can bring back happy memories.
Good job on a hard contest.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Thank you
Comment from lyenochka
Good job in writing your biography in the telegram's short, choppy phrases. I'm so glad that you got out of Romania and survived Ceausescu's dictatorship.
"Eight grade 1989" (Eighth)
"Ceausecu is dead!" (Ceausescu)
"Mom and dad " (Dad) Whenever you use Mom or Dad as if it's a name, then it should be capitalized. If you said 'My mom and dad' then it's not.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Good job in writing your biography in the telegram's short, choppy phrases. I'm so glad that you got out of Romania and survived Ceausescu's dictatorship.
"Eight grade 1989" (Eighth)
"Ceausecu is dead!" (Ceausescu)
"Mom and dad " (Dad) Whenever you use Mom or Dad as if it's a name, then it should be capitalized. If you said 'My mom and dad' then it's not.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Thank you
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Iza De Did I miss spell your name?
What a well detailed telegram about your life.
Why burn it? Nice to met you here on Fanstory.
Gert
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2019
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Hello Iza De Did I miss spell your name?
What a well detailed telegram about your life.
Why burn it? Nice to met you here on Fanstory.
Gert
Comment Written 17-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2019
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Hi Gert, thank you for taking a chance on this piece
Comment from LisaMay
Your story should win through it's originality of expression. I like the staccato phrases encompassing history, freedom, relocation, love, family. Your story is still brief - a telegram of excitement and drama - the book of your life will make interesting reading many more years down the track.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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Your story should win through it's originality of expression. I like the staccato phrases encompassing history, freedom, relocation, love, family. Your story is still brief - a telegram of excitement and drama - the book of your life will make interesting reading many more years down the track.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much Lisa May I am so happy that you understood my message:) The contest was an excellent pretext to come up with this text... winning it's another story, still far away from that reward:)
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:-)
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Thank you so much
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your story. I enjoyed reading it but I thought that it was not smooth. Grammar and punctuation could be improved upon.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your story. I enjoyed reading it but I thought that it was not smooth. Grammar and punctuation could be improved upon.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your review.
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from RodG
You appear to have had an interesting life, especially your early childhood and college years in eastern Europe. I am confused about your dual citizenship and how you got to America. Rod
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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You appear to have had an interesting life, especially your early childhood and college years in eastern Europe. I am confused about your dual citizenship and how you got to America. Rod
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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By plane:) joke aside in 150 words is hard to give so much details that can make a story, which doesn't have to look like a story.
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By plane:) joke aside in 150 words is hard to give so much details that can make a story, which doesn't have to look like a story.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written life story in 150 words in telegram format telling the reader in a few words about your whole life. It seems the internet is a popular way to find a husband in today's world.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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A very well-written life story in 150 words in telegram format telling the reader in a few words about your whole life. It seems the internet is a popular way to find a husband in today's world.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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I think it was:) nowadays are the dating sites:) Thanks for stopping by and reading.
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I think it was:) nowadays are the dating sites:) Thanks for stopping by and reading.
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I think it was:) nowadays are the dating sites:) Thanks for stopping by and reading.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is an interesting life story. The whole piece reads like a telegram, since you are trying to fit so much in a small space. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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This is an interesting life story. The whole piece reads like a telegram, since you are trying to fit so much in a small space. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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Susan thank you so much for your fast review:) and your good luck wishes.
