Obsessive Tendencies
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
True observation and experience of life promoted in this chapter through right and interesting taletelling about obsessive tendencies how fantasy has been a part of our living in reality; well said, well done.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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True observation and experience of life promoted in this chapter through right and interesting taletelling about obsessive tendencies how fantasy has been a part of our living in reality; well said, well done.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Thank you so very much for your review!! Always so good to have such wonderful support! ;)
Comment from beizanten
Interesting choice of title and very beautiful picture of fairies. a pretty good plotline. Interesting characters and the emotion of the main character flow well
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Interesting choice of title and very beautiful picture of fairies. a pretty good plotline. Interesting characters and the emotion of the main character flow well
Comment Written 15-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your review on this chapter -- so very much appreciate your time and your comments! ;)
Comment from Debbie Pope
You have the most complicated plots, Yvette. Although it has little similarity to the Twilight series, the tortured sexual relationship between Celeste and Gregor reminds me of that series. That relationship creates the most interesting aspect of your plot to me. I am sure the family dynamics will be adding to that in the next chapters.
I never have any suggestions for improvement for you. I just enjoy.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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You have the most complicated plots, Yvette. Although it has little similarity to the Twilight series, the tortured sexual relationship between Celeste and Gregor reminds me of that series. That relationship creates the most interesting aspect of your plot to me. I am sure the family dynamics will be adding to that in the next chapters.
I never have any suggestions for improvement for you. I just enjoy.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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You are too wonderful, MQ -- I'm really trying to get my pen back into the groove....don't know what's draggin' me down lately! But I do so appreciate your words and I'm glad you're liking this one.... gonna try to 'shorten' this one from my original vision, I think, but I'll kinda play it by ear since I've got a month between chapters! ;) :) LOL! Thank you again for your support... still got you close in thought/prayers! ;) Yvette
Comment from lyenochka
Well, you really merged them well because I was still in the fantasy world and the magical speech when I was fully brought back to the human world with the refrigerator and taking swigs out of bottles. So my mind did a double-take from envisioning magical lost wolves to human figures. Maybe you wanted that.
" ess les cadeaux from Luna." (ess? maybe 'sont' if you want plural or if English, 'are?')
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Well, you really merged them well because I was still in the fantasy world and the magical speech when I was fully brought back to the human world with the refrigerator and taking swigs out of bottles. So my mind did a double-take from envisioning magical lost wolves to human figures. Maybe you wanted that.
" ess les cadeaux from Luna." (ess? maybe 'sont' if you want plural or if English, 'are?')
Comment Written 15-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Changed it to 'eez' .... just her trying with the word 'is'.... :) :) Thanx for your review, Helen -- always love for you to keep me on my toes, ma'am!! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
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Okay, that works!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I deliberately chose to jump in at chapter 3, and go back to the other two afterwards. To me it's the best way to find out if I like the style of writing. I'm still slightly undecided here, although there are some wonderful images, such as
"The question whispered across his mind"
This I will treasure having read.
basically, I am a little puzzled by phrases such as:
"the only one in the group that would miss his non-reappearance" which is complex for me with so many negatives
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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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I deliberately chose to jump in at chapter 3, and go back to the other two afterwards. To me it's the best way to find out if I like the style of writing. I'm still slightly undecided here, although there are some wonderful images, such as
"The question whispered across his mind"
This I will treasure having read.
basically, I am a little puzzled by phrases such as:
"the only one in the group that would miss his non-reappearance" which is complex for me with so many negatives
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Ricky1024
"His Obsessive Reality"
Was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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"His Obsessive Reality"
Was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
...
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
...
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Thank you for stopping in for the review on this Chapter, Doc -- much appreciated! ;) Yvette
