Horehound Candy
Menthol and Root Beer comes to mind44 total reviews
Comment from brenda bickers
Now this sounds like the perfect kind of candy to me.
A candy that also has a medicinal purpose; whats not to like.
You did a great job on this 5-7-5 poem and not once but four times.
Well done you.
Brenda.x
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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Now this sounds like the perfect kind of candy to me.
A candy that also has a medicinal purpose; whats not to like.
You did a great job on this 5-7-5 poem and not once but four times.
Well done you.
Brenda.x
Comment Written 17-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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Brenda, thank you for reviewing and commenting.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a fun write in its premise, in full compliance with the prompt, despite its difficult requirements and a bit forced rhyme - my best wishes in the contest...
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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In my opinion, a fun write in its premise, in full compliance with the prompt, despite its difficult requirements and a bit forced rhyme - my best wishes in the contest...
Comment Written 17-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2019
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Eve, thanks for reading and commenting.
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You're very welcome...Eve
Comment from sunnilicious
Is that the candy popularized by the commerical, "Ri-coLA!!!"?
You really thought this through. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice visual imagery created. Clearly written. Nice work.
Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Is that the candy popularized by the commerical, "Ri-coLA!!!"?
You really thought this through. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice visual imagery created. Clearly written. Nice work.
Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 16-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Not the same flavor, but the same concept.
Comment from LisaMay
This is a cleverly executed sequence, with good rhymes - internal as well. You had found and around, then beat and sweet, then spiced and entice, so by the 4th stanza I was expecting an internal rhyme but there wasn't one. There is more of a gap between the last verse and the 3rd; is that on purpose?
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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This is a cleverly executed sequence, with good rhymes - internal as well. You had found and around, then beat and sweet, then spiced and entice, so by the 4th stanza I was expecting an internal rhyme but there wasn't one. There is more of a gap between the last verse and the 3rd; is that on purpose?
Comment Written 16-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Not that one slipped on me. I deleted the gap, thanks
Comment from kiwisteveh
You have coped well with the demands of this challenge. I especially liked the profuse rhyming which helped this fun piece bounce along sweetly.
I have to confess that despite your words, I have no idea what horehound candy is - I don't think I have ever seen it here.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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You have coped well with the demands of this challenge. I especially liked the profuse rhyming which helped this fun piece bounce along sweetly.
I have to confess that despite your words, I have no idea what horehound candy is - I don't think I have ever seen it here.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 16-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Steve, thank you. It is around, somewhat hard to find.
Comment from Eve Vasa
Hello, this is a nicely published work about something I have never heard before, horehound candy. It sounds very efficacious and probably a lot better for soothing a sore throat if it is natural.
I have no suggestions for improvement and thanks for sharing your nicely written and published poem, cheers, Eve.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Hello, this is a nicely published work about something I have never heard before, horehound candy. It sounds very efficacious and probably a lot better for soothing a sore throat if it is natural.
I have no suggestions for improvement and thanks for sharing your nicely written and published poem, cheers, Eve.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Eve, thank you for taking the time to review and comment.
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
I think you very cleverly matched all the requirements of this difficult contest. You chose a candy we don't often think about, but you are right the candy works great to soothe the throat. I think you have a good chance at winning the contest. Good luck. Thank you for sharing. ~Brenda
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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I think you very cleverly matched all the requirements of this difficult contest. You chose a candy we don't often think about, but you are right the candy works great to soothe the throat. I think you have a good chance at winning the contest. Good luck. Thank you for sharing. ~Brenda
Comment Written 16-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Brenda, Thank you for taking the time and care of writing your comments.
Comment from Hitcher
I don't think I have come across your dandy candy friend BUT your well crafted stack definitely made them sound very tasty indeed. Lozenge's are always appreciated when they actually taste nice : ))
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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I don't think I have come across your dandy candy friend BUT your well crafted stack definitely made them sound very tasty indeed. Lozenge's are always appreciated when they actually taste nice : ))
Comment Written 16-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Hitcher, thank you, my grandpa always had them in his jacket pocket, now I have them in my jacket pocket for my grandkids.
Comment from Patty Palmer
I remember that candy! My 5th grade teacher kept them in her desk all the time. She always smelled like menthol. I enjoyed reading your poem. You took me back to a childhood memory!
God bless!
Patty
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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I remember that candy! My 5th grade teacher kept them in her desk all the time. She always smelled like menthol. I enjoyed reading your poem. You took me back to a childhood memory!
God bless!
Patty
Comment Written 16-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Patty, my grandpa had them in his jacket pocket, now I have them in my jacket pocket for my grandkids
Comment from papa55mike
Well, this is the second candy poem I've read today, and I like this one. It's wonderfully written and I love the picture. This reminds me of have one of those candies when I was a child.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Well, this is the second candy poem I've read today, and I like this one. It's wonderfully written and I love the picture. This reminds me of have one of those candies when I was a child.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 16-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Mike, my grandpa had them in his jacket pocket, now I have them in my jacket pocket for my grandkids
