Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Melissa,

Oooohh... I really, really, REALLY like this one. Your wording is so unique and vivid. The idea of autumn in petticoats sashaying through the woodlands is lovely beyond measure.

The only thing is the word 'nippy'. In this really lovely poem, that word seems out of place. Is there something else you might consider? Just wondering...

Loved it! Thank you!

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019

Thanks Robyn... I will look at it again and see if I can replace it with a word that blends better. Thanks for the suggestion!!!

Melissa

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

A splendid piece of personification here in this short, five line piece. This is a good example of why not every five line, under 31 syllable, poems is a tanka. This is a simple and very appropriate statement on autumn without the surprises and incate regulations of the Japanese form.

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019

Thanks Jim... It is 46 degrees here and the first true day of autumn weather... it moved in last night... So, I am on the bandwagon to celebrate this change of seasons.

Melissa

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This poem concisely describes a perfect Autumn day. The artwork shows the color and the words provide the sounds and feelings of the day.
Congrats on being the recognized writer of the month.
Keep writing
Joan

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019

Hi Joan... thanks for the lovely comments about my unexpected surprise. ... I am glad you liked the Autumn Dances. Nippy air has finally arrived here and I celebrated through verse. :)

Melissa

reply by dragonpoet on 12-Oct-2019

Don't mention it, Melissa. It is more than nippy here. Snow is in the air. Just flurries though.
Joan

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

This is beautiful. The use of the words rustles and sashay are perfect to describe this weather.
Lovely picture.
Thanks for sharing.
P.S. I'm glad you've been chosen Writer of the Month. Congratulations.

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019

Hello Maria... thanks so much for your kind words. The award was a total surprise. I am glad you liked Autumn Dances.

Melissa

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

You brought the autumnal atmospherics to your poem here Melissa and I felt the nippy breeze, I saw the colourful scenes and heard the rustling petticoats, the rhythm of the season is immortalised in your words here, love Dolly x

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019

Thanks so much. Delighted you liked it :)

Melissa

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

Ain't Autumn Awesome, I love Autumn and the beauty it brings as your wonderful 5-line poem describes "petticoats" -"rustle" what excellent descriptive words, very well written with great artwork****kahpot

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019

Hello there, kah. Thanks for your lovely comments. I do think the leaves sound like petticoats... those stiff crinoline kind. Haha. :)

Melissa

Comment from Susan X Smith

Excellent

This poem well meets the contest requirements since it has the appropriate meter. Your words are well chosen and evoke the spirit of the season. The colorful picture is a good addition.

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019

Thanks so much Susan!!

Melissa

Comment from Alex Rosel

Excellent

Oh, I do like this. I think it's the "petticoats sashay to the
rhythm of nippy breezes" that captures my attention. It conjures up the visuals. I can see in my mind's eye the movement of the Autumn leaves {smiles}.

Thank you for the enjoyable read {thumbs up}.

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019

Hi Alex!! I am really glad that you like it. I do think that when the breeze blows through dry leaves they sound like petticoats. Just a whimsy of mine ;)

Melissa

Comment from damommy

Excellent

I really like the image of Autumn's petticoats sashaying. They really did that here today, and the breezes were nippy. Great presentation and imagery.

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019

Hi Yvonne. I am so glad you liked this autumn celebration. Much appreciated. Thank you.

Melissa

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

I love your picture, all the beautiful colors of fall. They're so warm, comforting. Your poem is well-written, descriptive. You make us feel like we are there. Congratulations on your recognized writer's award.

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019

Hi Misty . Thank you for your lovely regards to my ..oh so unexpected recognition... haha. Thanks for your wonderful comments.

Melissa