FanStory University
The wellspring that flows into a writer paradise.32 total reviews
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, well done and certainly a verse depicting the warm regard of a happy FanStorian - expressed in smooth nonet movement and cordial invitational advice - in full compliance with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest...
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In my opinion, well done and certainly a verse depicting the warm regard of a happy FanStorian - expressed in smooth nonet movement and cordial invitational advice - in full compliance with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest...
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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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thank you very much, the words were from the heart.
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I thought as much - you are very welcome...Eve
Comment from Gail Denham
Well done - I like that you chose an interesting form to present your poem. And certainly we are all learning from each other - a good thing. Plus what I like are the prompts which MAKE me write quickly.
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Well done - I like that you chose an interesting form to present your poem. And certainly we are all learning from each other - a good thing. Plus what I like are the prompts which MAKE me write quickly.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
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Gail you and me both....
Comment from royowen
It's unusual to see a suite of nonets, I think it's the first I've seen. Oh yes indeed, certainly fanstory is not perfect, but the members by enlarge are helpful, critical in a good way, and indeed a humble lot. Most that stick with it, improve exponentially, it has nurtured my own growth enormously, well done, good work, good luck, blessings, Roy
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It's unusual to see a suite of nonets, I think it's the first I've seen. Oh yes indeed, certainly fanstory is not perfect, but the members by enlarge are helpful, critical in a good way, and indeed a humble lot. Most that stick with it, improve exponentially, it has nurtured my own growth enormously, well done, good work, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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My greatest appreciation is to members, such as yourself, thank you!
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Bless you
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
I understand how you feel about FanStory. I'm a huge fan, myself. I've been a member since 2010, I think, and can only say good things about what the site has added to my writing craft. *smile* As well as the friendships I've made.
I enjoyed your post, though I do have a few comments and recommendations for you - which you are welcome to use or ignore, as you please.
1.) Such joy at my first glance,
with such talented
members that share
that which is
--> you've used 'such' twice, and when you speak of humans, it's more appropriate to use 'who' than 'that' or something else. Suggest:
--> (Much) joy at my first glance,
with such talented members (who) share...
2.) Such people, from around
the globe, with coaching,
direct critic,
most honest
kindly,
said.
--> (Nice) people, from around
the globe, with (kind reviews),
direct (critique),
most honest
(coaching)
(help).
--> just to help with flow, etc. (Also to avoid using 'such' again AND to spell 'critique' as I think you mean it here.)
3.) The capstone of FanStory to date,,
--> just one comma
4.) and those are friends
you will sure
to keep
most.
--> and those are friends
you will be
sure to
keep.
--> also for better flow
That's it. I hopeyou may find something helpful in these suggestions. Good luck!
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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Dear Mystery Writer,
I understand how you feel about FanStory. I'm a huge fan, myself. I've been a member since 2010, I think, and can only say good things about what the site has added to my writing craft. *smile* As well as the friendships I've made.
I enjoyed your post, though I do have a few comments and recommendations for you - which you are welcome to use or ignore, as you please.
1.) Such joy at my first glance,
with such talented
members that share
that which is
--> you've used 'such' twice, and when you speak of humans, it's more appropriate to use 'who' than 'that' or something else. Suggest:
--> (Much) joy at my first glance,
with such talented members (who) share...
2.) Such people, from around
the globe, with coaching,
direct critic,
most honest
kindly,
said.
--> (Nice) people, from around
the globe, with (kind reviews),
direct (critique),
most honest
(coaching)
(help).
--> just to help with flow, etc. (Also to avoid using 'such' again AND to spell 'critique' as I think you mean it here.)
3.) The capstone of FanStory to date,,
--> just one comma
4.) and those are friends
you will sure
to keep
most.
--> and those are friends
you will be
sure to
keep.
--> also for better flow
That's it. I hopeyou may find something helpful in these suggestions. Good luck!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Robyn, your thorough comments are indeed most welcomed, I can't thank you enough, I am sure you have more important things on your plate. I have effected some changes. I need to look at the syllable count on a couple of others to make sure I don't drop the nonette structure.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear author, you have wonderfully written the sentiments that I could not have expressed! You have inspired me to try this form of poetry too! For that alone I am glad to give you six stars
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Dear author, you have wonderfully written the sentiments that I could not have expressed! You have inspired me to try this form of poetry too! For that alone I am glad to give you six stars
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Nice to end the day with these smiles you generated.
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Dear Mr. or Ms. Blind Contest Entry, I wish you had a name.
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Catch it in the voting booth
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. It's creative to use multiple nonets to construct this poem about fanstory. Being on FS he subjected me do lots of different poetry styles but I just can't forced myself to change my voice here. Good luck in the contest.
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Hello mystery writer. It's creative to use multiple nonets to construct this poem about fanstory. Being on FS he subjected me do lots of different poetry styles but I just can't forced myself to change my voice here. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Robert, since I am so new, to writing in general. I consider being an eager, early adopter to any challenge, but my preference is free verse.
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I I've come to the conclusion that every writer has their "voice" and we all sound different. The more you write the more comfortable you become expressing your "voice."
Comment from RodG
I enjoyed your nonette because of its ENTHUSIASTIC ENDORSEMENT of FanStory as a site where one can find friends, get criticism, and learn how to write better. Indeed, you summarize this site's virtues very well. Rod
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I enjoyed your nonette because of its ENTHUSIASTIC ENDORSEMENT of FanStory as a site where one can find friends, get criticism, and learn how to write better. Indeed, you summarize this site's virtues very well. Rod
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
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I am humbled that my message carries the weight I intended.
Comment from Melonie Kirchoff
Great nonette you've written here and a perfect entry for the contest! I'm new to FanStory but I'm already loving it as well. I don't know much about poetry but this was a really well-structured poem that flowed and told a message. Great work!
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Great nonette you've written here and a perfect entry for the contest! I'm new to FanStory but I'm already loving it as well. I don't know much about poetry but this was a really well-structured poem that flowed and told a message. Great work!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Smiling back, welcome and I hope you wear out the links to all that is offered
I will watch for your work....
Comment from Nowhereman1
Very well written poem about what we are all trying to do on this site. The poem flowed really well and the story was entertaining. Thank you for sharing.
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Very well written poem about what we are all trying to do on this site. The poem flowed really well and the story was entertaining. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
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Thanks I am so honored to be I such company to learn, to grow, to emote with the great support from so many near and far.
Comment from trailblazer101
I liked it a lot. Kind of mirrors the same thoughts I had when I joined in 2006. Looking back After publishing 9 novels and two instructional volumes on fly fishing I think I owe my readers on fanstory a lot. Correct me they did! Usually kindly. Wish I could have expressed it as well as you did. You have skill indeed!
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I liked it a lot. Kind of mirrors the same thoughts I had when I joined in 2006. Looking back After publishing 9 novels and two instructional volumes on fly fishing I think I owe my readers on fanstory a lot. Correct me they did! Usually kindly. Wish I could have expressed it as well as you did. You have skill indeed!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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My friend trailblazer. Your comments hooked with the published fly fishing instructional volumes, aim would be shocked if they are not on my shelf! No better passion than a good hatch, the right fly, catch the release.
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LOL
They are both available on Amazon.
Bob Sheedy's Lake Fly Fishing Strategies
Bob Sheedy's Top Fifty Stillwater Fly Patterns.
Yes I'm into Catch and Release and tying. Started at age 7. I'm 73. Even a guy like me can learn and share. ;>)
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Thanks Bob, I will be certain to take look, I?m 69:retired a year and hankering for a good weekend in waders.
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Ah retirement. LOL. I work harder now than ever. Dragging boats, kicking fins. Freezing my ____ off. Do quite a bit of guiding but mpostly stillwater now. Fish are bigger and I don;t ahve to slip on rocks and lean against the current as much. Still love a day on a stream though and like to read water like we learned when I was a kid and fished creeks. Had one right behind the barn. 7 inch brook trout and i held the Hudson Creek record. 13 and a half inches! Makes me smile now. There was a spring lake over the hill a bit that fed the creek so when I got a bicycle it came into focus. Trout were bigger. When I came to Manitoba there were a mere smattering of trout laes so we pressured the government and communities until we built the Parkland fishery. Now we have plentiful trout lakes (and plenty of visiting American fishers). The Parkland grows huge trout quickly in these pothole lakes left over from when the ice departed eons ago. Lousy with scuds and such so the growth rates are phenomenal. So I decided to hand my hat here. I write fish and do a lot of nature photography. Used to be on FanArtReview but got away from it. Haven;t been active on Fanstory much either but maybe this winter I'll go back to writing my third series of novels and do some of the development on FS. Hope to see more of your stuff too.
