Almost A Halloween Disaster
A group entry.17 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like a fun night dressing up as gnomes and braving the winds just to trick or treat, this is a good club entry write, much enjoyed and happy halloween, love Dolly x
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This sounds like a fun night dressing up as gnomes and braving the winds just to trick or treat, this is a good club entry write, much enjoyed and happy halloween, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thank you Dolly for your kind words and halloween wishes.
Comment from Miranda Langston
save for punctuation, this was a really good story :) it's a good read, it sets the scene early, and I can actually see what's going on in my head. that's the mark of a great writer. what I mean by punctuation though is: The wind blew violently(,) shaking the house and swept the rain in a horizontal pattern across the ground.
a few commas here and there would make this into a six-star probably
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save for punctuation, this was a really good story :) it's a good read, it sets the scene early, and I can actually see what's going on in my head. that's the mark of a great writer. what I mean by punctuation though is: The wind blew violently(,) shaking the house and swept the rain in a horizontal pattern across the ground.
a few commas here and there would make this into a six-star probably
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Wow, thank you Miranda for your kind words and great suggestion.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Sounds like a stormy night rescued just in time. The costumes would have been huge hits. Too bad this is only fiction. It would definitely be a night to remember. :)
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Sounds like a stormy night rescued just in time. The costumes would have been huge hits. Too bad this is only fiction. It would definitely be a night to remember. :)
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you Phyllis for your kind words, lol, many many years ago I dressed as a gnome and low and behold during my trick or treating I found another girl as a gnome, different coloring etc but a gnome.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Thanks for sharing this creative writing about a slumber party where all the girls were dressed like garden gnomes. Maybe someday you'll be able to dress up like a gnome??
Bill
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Thanks for sharing this creative writing about a slumber party where all the girls were dressed like garden gnomes. Maybe someday you'll be able to dress up like a gnome??
Bill
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your kind words and thoughts. Many many years ago I dressed as a gnome and low and behold during my trick or treating I found another girl as a gnome, different coloring etc but a gnome.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A Halloween fun-time write.... and I'm the opposite of the brothers: given a group of thirteen teenage girls in my house, I would run as far away as I could get - I teach those kiddos, it would be a crazifest!! LOL! ;) A fun offering, Alie -- thanx so much for sharing your imagination!! ;) Yvette
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A Halloween fun-time write.... and I'm the opposite of the brothers: given a group of thirteen teenage girls in my house, I would run as far away as I could get - I teach those kiddos, it would be a crazifest!! LOL! ;) A fun offering, Alie -- thanx so much for sharing your imagination!! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you Yvette for your kind words and thoughts, I like the idea of the boys running away lol.
Comment from JanetRussek
What a great story. Your writing is wonderfully descriptive and the flow is excellent. I'm so glad I didn't let this piece pass. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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What a great story. Your writing is wonderfully descriptive and the flow is excellent. I'm so glad I didn't let this piece pass. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you Janet for your review and kind words.
Comment from Pantygynt
Actually yes I have seen many folk dressed alike, when the Royal Marines were on parade! But they were not trick or treating.
'survive the gale like winds' -- should be hyphenated as gale-like.
a neat little piece.
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Actually yes I have seen many folk dressed alike, when the Royal Marines were on parade! But they were not trick or treating.
'survive the gale like winds' -- should be hyphenated as gale-like.
a neat little piece.
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words J. Will fix that in a moment.
