Almost A Halloween Disaster
A group entry.17 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Now that would be fun to see! Unfortunately, we never get any trick o-treaters anymore. I finally just got candy to share with the neighbors but left it while socially distancing. What was it like on Halloween when you were on the road? Or at a camp?
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Now that would be fun to see! Unfortunately, we never get any trick o-treaters anymore. I finally just got candy to share with the neighbors but left it while socially distancing. What was it like on Halloween when you were on the road? Or at a camp?
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for reviewing Helen. Well every year for the various holidays we hang colored lights. For Halloween we have a small skeleton which Jim has rigged with red lights in its eyes, we have a short sweep of lights that are purple and have spiders and my favorite that a friend made me many years ago-a broom which has a sign attached 'free flying lessons' and an attached witches hat. Every year where ever we are there are children in the camp grounds so we celebrate. At Christmas we have lights and two painted cones (like you put out at road damage etc-about 2 feet tall) and I do decorations inside. This will be the first year that we have been north for the winter, Jim is dreading snow lol, me well I am from Canada, enough said. Blessings.
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Thanks for sharing how you decorate and celebrate! Sounds like fun!
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My pleasure.
Comment from robyn corum
Alie,
Wow. That is one brave mom who agreed to be in charge of all those girls. Whoa. hahahaha
Imagine thirteen garden gnomes headed toward your house??? hahaha
Notes, if you don't mind:
1.) The wind blew violently, shaking the house and (sweeping) the rain in a horizontal
2.) We had decided to dress alike and except for our hair color, which was covered
--> delete the 'and':
--> We had decided to dress alike, except for our hair color, which was covered and our eyes, of course
This is a cute little story about the Halloween that almost wasn't. haha Thanks!!
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Alie,
Wow. That is one brave mom who agreed to be in charge of all those girls. Whoa. hahahaha
Imagine thirteen garden gnomes headed toward your house??? hahaha
Notes, if you don't mind:
1.) The wind blew violently, shaking the house and (sweeping) the rain in a horizontal
2.) We had decided to dress alike and except for our hair color, which was covered
--> delete the 'and':
--> We had decided to dress alike, except for our hair color, which was covered and our eyes, of course
This is a cute little story about the Halloween that almost wasn't. haha Thanks!!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much Robyn for your kind words and suggestions, which I will fix shortly.
Comment from Mastery
Hi Allie. Long time since I've heard from you. sorry if I missed a lot of your writing. I have been on a break for the summer and just getting back here. Good story here though.
Suggestions if i may: Change this sentence:"Today was Halloween and the weather sucked." Change it to this: "On Halloween day the weather sucked."
Also here: "My three older brothers had smiled at the idea of having thirteen young teenage girls under the same roof." Leave "had" out of this sentence and any others you used it in. You don't need them. : ) Bob
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Hi Allie. Long time since I've heard from you. sorry if I missed a lot of your writing. I have been on a break for the summer and just getting back here. Good story here though.
Suggestions if i may: Change this sentence:"Today was Halloween and the weather sucked." Change it to this: "On Halloween day the weather sucked."
Also here: "My three older brothers had smiled at the idea of having thirteen young teenage girls under the same roof." Leave "had" out of this sentence and any others you used it in. You don't need them. : ) Bob
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thanks Bob for reviewing and your kind comments and suggestions, I will make those changes shortly. Blessings.
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: ) Bob
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Hi Bob, did you see that they are honoring Dean & Michael for a week filled with horror contest. A week is better than nothing. (smile) Blessings.
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Hi, Alie. No...I did not see that. LOL They flat turned me down when I suggested we do something for them. Grrr, : ) Bob
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I remembered that but regardless they are honoring them both. Take care, blessings.
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: ) Glad. Bob
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Alie. What a fun story. I can imagine the attention a parade of 13 girls all dressed as gnomes would cause. Your writing is clear and interesting throughout. Marilyn
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Hi Alie. What a fun story. I can imagine the attention a parade of 13 girls all dressed as gnomes would cause. Your writing is clear and interesting throughout. Marilyn
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thank you Marilyn for your kind comments.
Comment from Mabaker
Another fun read Alie, we're not as trick 'n treat turned on down here but we're getting close, but yours sounds much better. Of course apart from the weather, there is the safety aspect. These days kids just don't go out on their own, trick 'n treat or any other great event at night alone. Loved it. Sincerely Anne
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Another fun read Alie, we're not as trick 'n treat turned on down here but we're getting close, but yours sounds much better. Of course apart from the weather, there is the safety aspect. These days kids just don't go out on their own, trick 'n treat or any other great event at night alone. Loved it. Sincerely Anne
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Awww thank you Anne for your wonderful words and the stars, it was a nice treat for me. You are so right, alone is not the way to be out there. Even I have the dog with me, well I do have to walk her just before bed time and sometimes early in the morning before the sun comes up, but she is big enough, everyone has second thoughts. She is really as gentle as a lamb but with a deep bark. Luv u Alie.
Comment from poetwatch
You said it Alie, it would have made a wonderful picture, one that would be a memory to cherish. :) To bad the guys were not allowed to scare the girls. It would have put everyone in the Halloween mood. Good story you got here woman. :) Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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You said it Alie, it would have made a wonderful picture, one that would be a memory to cherish. :) To bad the guys were not allowed to scare the girls. It would have put everyone in the Halloween mood. Good story you got here woman. :) Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thank you Jose for your kind words.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
That would be a sight, aryr! I would like to see it. I enjoyed your little story. Your lines read well. Readers can feel the sadness as the rain and wind continue. But, then . . it stops. I love the art choice, too. What a fun night these 13 girls would have. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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That would be a sight, aryr! I would like to see it. I enjoyed your little story. Your lines read well. Readers can feel the sadness as the rain and wind continue. But, then . . it stops. I love the art choice, too. What a fun night these 13 girls would have. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much Jan for your kind words.
Comment from Heather Knight
What I like most about your story is that is it quite believable. If you hadn't explained that it is a figment of your imagination I would have thought it really happened.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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What I like most about your story is that is it quite believable. If you hadn't explained that it is a figment of your imagination I would have thought it really happened.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thank you Maria for your kind words, you did specify it was to be fictional lol.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
LOL! I bet that would make for a really cute picture :). This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a well penned, complete and thoroughly engaging story. The content is spot on for the time of year. You expressed the despair of not being able to go out beautifully and took the reader right along with you on the downward spiral - BUT ended on a high and took us all back up there. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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LOL! I bet that would make for a really cute picture :). This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a well penned, complete and thoroughly engaging story. The content is spot on for the time of year. You expressed the despair of not being able to go out beautifully and took the reader right along with you on the downward spiral - BUT ended on a high and took us all back up there. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words.
Comment from Rikki66
Best wishes in the contest. That I would like to see thirteen little gnomes trick or treating.0101010101011101011111110101101111001110111011010
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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Best wishes in the contest. That I would like to see thirteen little gnomes trick or treating.0101010101011101011111110101101111001110111011010
rikki1
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your kind comments, thirteen gnomes would have been a site.
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You are most welcome.
rikki
