Be Wee With Bea Part2
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "A Terrible Humming and Buzzing"Continuation of Bea's Strollings
11 total reviews
Comment from Mark Howitt
... and so the chain saw approaches? The rising panic is palpable. But bears sleep at night, so why would the chain saws operate during her sleep - was she hibernating?
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2019
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... and so the chain saw approaches? The rising panic is palpable. But bears sleep at night, so why would the chain saws operate during her sleep - was she hibernating?
Comment Written 17-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2019
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the buzzing of the chain saw woke her out of her morning sleep
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Bee and Willow best friends. Is Bee going to save her friend from humming and buzzing? Are the human going to cut Willow? The answers next chapter. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Bee and Willow best friends. Is Bee going to save her friend from humming and buzzing? Are the human going to cut Willow? The answers next chapter. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your involved review. I hope we see you next chapter.
Comment from lyenochka
I'm glad you reminded us of how Bea Bear got her name. I also liked how she faced her fears and was able to avoid getting too upset finding out about the wind. I also liked how Bea is more concerned about some potential harm to her friend, Willow, more than herself.
"visiting. humming in" (a stray period here)
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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I'm glad you reminded us of how Bea Bear got her name. I also liked how she faced her fears and was able to avoid getting too upset finding out about the wind. I also liked how Bea is more concerned about some potential harm to her friend, Willow, more than herself.
"visiting. humming in" (a stray period here)
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
This is my first time reading your stories about 'Bea,' and I was very entertained. I enjoy your focus on the growth years ... exercising the brain, overcoming fears, caring for others, etc.
I love 'investigative exercise' and 'brain exercise.' So creative.
Your story is a great read for all children, young and old alike.
Gale
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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This is my first time reading your stories about 'Bea,' and I was very entertained. I enjoy your focus on the growth years ... exercising the brain, overcoming fears, caring for others, etc.
I love 'investigative exercise' and 'brain exercise.' So creative.
Your story is a great read for all children, young and old alike.
Gale
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you for such a delightful review. I hope you do an investigation exercise and read more about Bea.
Comment from Elaine Chiodi
You've created a wonderful and natural world for Bea and her friends. Bea teaches two very important lessons by encouraging children to think and investigate when something unfamiliar happens, and to be compassionate
when others may be in a difficult position. Very well done.
Just a few changes for consideration:
- Grasped = should be small "g"
- brain exercise, told = delete comma
- instantly as = add comma after "instantly"
- exercise that = add comma after "exercise"
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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You've created a wonderful and natural world for Bea and her friends. Bea teaches two very important lessons by encouraging children to think and investigate when something unfamiliar happens, and to be compassionate
when others may be in a difficult position. Very well done.
Just a few changes for consideration:
- Grasped = should be small "g"
- brain exercise, told = delete comma
- instantly as = add comma after "instantly"
- exercise that = add comma after "exercise"
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your supportive review. I appreciate it. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
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You're welcome... ...ec
Comment from Beck Fenton
Bea struggles with figuring things out just like we do. I like that about her!
I think the first line "Something awoke Bea" should be Something woke Bea. Or Bea was awakened by something...
Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Bea struggles with figuring things out just like we do. I like that about her!
I think the first line "Something awoke Bea" should be Something woke Bea. Or Bea was awakened by something...
Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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I( had that then grammarly said awoke. thank you I'm putting woke back. Thanks for your supportive review as always.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, no! Are they cutting Willow down? Oh, my, and what can Bea do...? So now I cannot wait for the next chapter to come out...! ;) Thanx so much for sharing and I look forward to seeing what Bea and company will do! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Oh, no! Are they cutting Willow down? Oh, my, and what can Bea do...? So now I cannot wait for the next chapter to come out...! ;) Thanx so much for sharing and I look forward to seeing what Bea and company will do! :) Yvette
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Yvette I am so pleased with your enthusiastic review. Thank you
Comment from Mistydawn
Poor Bea is so scared, not sure what she should do. I love how you explained how she got her name. That was very sweet, realistic. The chapter is well-written very interesting start to finish and I love your hook at the end. Nice job.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Poor Bea is so scared, not sure what she should do. I love how you explained how she got her name. That was very sweet, realistic. The chapter is well-written very interesting start to finish and I love your hook at the end. Nice job.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your supportive review. Bea is glad you have discovered her.
Comment from Sally Law
A sweet drop of golden honey on the 'r' was the cause of her name change!
A sweet installment and continuing story of my favorite little bear. This one had a good lesson on kindness which is what Bea is, and never cruel. Sounds like the author. ;]
My bear growing up was 'Beary.' He was white (but stained) from being touched so much.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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A sweet drop of golden honey on the 'r' was the cause of her name change!
A sweet installment and continuing story of my favorite little bear. This one had a good lesson on kindness which is what Bea is, and never cruel. Sounds like the author. ;]
My bear growing up was 'Beary.' He was white (but stained) from being touched so much.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
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Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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I am pleased you have become endeared to Bea. I don't know if I've told you, she is me and some of the adventures I've had or how I "handle" life. The other animals featured in this book are all at the Rainbow Bridge or as Bea refers to it, the Bridge of Rainbows. Book 1 is very accurate, this one begins to stretch away from my own adventures.
Comment from Alex Rosel
This excerpt maintains your authorial style. It sits well with your other posts {smiles}.
Here are a couple of points you might like to consider:
Was her cave home full of her friends who had the same sound to their name as Bea. -- This appears to be a question, so I'd terminate it with a question mark.
both Sweet Puppy and Scruffles quickly curled curiously close to her -- This is an efficient use of the narrative. It indicates to the reader something is amiss, and it also helps characterize Sweet Puppy and Scruffles {smiles}.
Everyone was able to finally get back to sleep only to be awakened again, this time by a terrible buzzing. -- The "this time" confused me. I thought the buzzing woke them before as well???
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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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This excerpt maintains your authorial style. It sits well with your other posts {smiles}.
Here are a couple of points you might like to consider:
Was her cave home full of her friends who had the same sound to their name as Bea. -- This appears to be a question, so I'd terminate it with a question mark.
both Sweet Puppy and Scruffles quickly curled curiously close to her -- This is an efficient use of the narrative. It indicates to the reader something is amiss, and it also helps characterize Sweet Puppy and Scruffles {smiles}.
Everyone was able to finally get back to sleep only to be awakened again, this time by a terrible buzzing. -- The "this time" confused me. I thought the buzzing woke them before as well???
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Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Humming of the storm woke them before. This is a new sound threatening Willow, buzzing. Thank you for your supportive review.
