Impaired Perception
A '5-7-5' Contest Offering12 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
My window is filled with hopefulness. It is blocking out the exterior view, thankfully. I walk by faith and not by sight. A fine entry and it looks like the winner to me.
Sending you my best today and best wishes for the upcoming contest, Yvette,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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My window is filled with hopefulness. It is blocking out the exterior view, thankfully. I walk by faith and not by sight. A fine entry and it looks like the winner to me.
Sending you my best today and best wishes for the upcoming contest, Yvette,
Sal xo
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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Naaah.... but thanx for the wonderful review, my lady!! ;) :) Hope the weekend's going well -- take care! :) Yvette
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a beautiful presentation, YM. Your syllable count is good per line, the image is super, and your message is loud. The colored fonts add to the enjoyment, too. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully with Love, Jan
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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This is a beautiful presentation, YM. Your syllable count is good per line, the image is super, and your message is loud. The colored fonts add to the enjoyment, too. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully with Love, Jan
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your review on this one, Jan -- always good to hear from you! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The long cold winter with its icy grip can dash all hope at times, but not in your world as hope is very much alive through this window, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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The long cold winter with its icy grip can dash all hope at times, but not in your world as hope is very much alive through this window, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thanx so very much for the review on this one, Dolly! ;) Yvette
Comment from royowen
The human mind is a fantastic piece of equipment, it is like a computer with incumbent wiring so incredibly and intricately designed to figure out problems and store away swathes of information. Well done, an excellent entry in this contest, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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The human mind is a fantastic piece of equipment, it is like a computer with incumbent wiring so incredibly and intricately designed to figure out problems and store away swathes of information. Well done, an excellent entry in this contest, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thanks much for your review on this one!!
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Most welcome
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Welcome
Comment from Mia Twysted
Interesting. I had to read it a few times before I got a sense of meaning, but I think that was just me. Suddenly I thought of "lasting etchings" as maybe cuts or scraps that have been made making it hard to see out through that "hopeful window" that I believe to be the heart.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Interesting. I had to read it a few times before I got a sense of meaning, but I think that was just me. Suddenly I thought of "lasting etchings" as maybe cuts or scraps that have been made making it hard to see out through that "hopeful window" that I believe to be the heart.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your honest review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line and syllable count. The content is image filled and paints a vivid picture. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line and syllable count. The content is image filled and paints a vivid picture. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the things we see daily which everyone has their own perspective and perception of what and how they see the object.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the things we see daily which everyone has their own perspective and perception of what and how they see the object.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thanks so much for your review, Sandra!
Comment from Bill Pinder
That is the truth. Especially when we need to totally come up with some new memories that are good to overcome all the terrible memories from the past. Thanks for sharing this message in a creative way with an excellent combination of color in your writing and the picture.
Bill
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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That is the truth. Especially when we need to totally come up with some new memories that are good to overcome all the terrible memories from the past. Thanks for sharing this message in a creative way with an excellent combination of color in your writing and the picture.
Bill
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thanks much for your review on this one, Bill!!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork
and presentation.
-The syllable count is good.
-Effective imagery and
use of one continuous thought,
as well as alliteration.
-"Etchings" is a good description
for memories.
-A good concluding line, as well,
that points out they can leave
scars if we let them.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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-Very nice artwork
and presentation.
-The syllable count is good.
-Effective imagery and
use of one continuous thought,
as well as alliteration.
-"Etchings" is a good description
for memories.
-A good concluding line, as well,
that points out they can leave
scars if we let them.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for such a wonderfully detailed review, Pam!!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Alex Rosel
This is a particularly evocative 5-7-5 poem. I'm sure most will be able to relate to the heart finger-drawn on the misty window. You've used the duality of meaning of the "hopeful window" to create something that will challenge the more observant reader {thumbs up}.
Best of luck with this when the voting booth opens {smiles}.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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This is a particularly evocative 5-7-5 poem. I'm sure most will be able to relate to the heart finger-drawn on the misty window. You've used the duality of meaning of the "hopeful window" to create something that will challenge the more observant reader {thumbs up}.
Best of luck with this when the voting booth opens {smiles}.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thanks so much for your awesome review, Alex!!
