A Crush on the Teacher
swiping Fall apples8 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
CONGRATS ON THIRD PLACE!! A beautiful offering for the Even-the-Odds contest, Lady Katharine -- and what a cheeky un-Halloween offering for the month! :) :) Thanx for joining in the October fun! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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CONGRATS ON THIRD PLACE!! A beautiful offering for the Even-the-Odds contest, Lady Katharine -- and what a cheeky un-Halloween offering for the month! :) :) Thanx for joining in the October fun! :) Yvette
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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and thank YOU, MADAME VERY SMART LADY, for creating it.
It was fun.
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Thanks, Yvette. me and 100 others. :) kidding
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
sure like your image and poem. Brings back memories when apples were a fruit you ate whenever, any time of the day. An apple orchard is so greatly respected these days. Happy eating.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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sure like your image and poem. Brings back memories when apples were a fruit you ate whenever, any time of the day. An apple orchard is so greatly respected these days. Happy eating.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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thanks so much. I don't mean to be rude, but why can't you eat an apple whenever you feel like it? Just curious over your comment.
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I don't have little grandchildren who will eat apples anymore. They are all grown. They are my kind of fruit.
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my one grandchild is now twenty, so i know the feeling. :)
Comment from juliaSjames
You've done very well indeed following the rules and creating a humourous, saucy poem on the subject of apples for the teacher. Even tossed in optional rhyme.
Picture is a perfect match.
Plain to see you had fun with the prompt. I wish you good luck.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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You've done very well indeed following the rules and creating a humourous, saucy poem on the subject of apples for the teacher. Even tossed in optional rhyme.
Picture is a perfect match.
Plain to see you had fun with the prompt. I wish you good luck.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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thanks, Julia,
Your comments are much appreciated!
Comment from Richard Van Kirk
Well done, you have followed the rules for this project and wrote a whimsical story that sings of lightness and promise. Your use of words: "Juicy apples,/Just begging to be picked;" is mouth watering. When I read poetry I want to hear its melody and taste what it offers. Good job, thank you.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Well done, you have followed the rules for this project and wrote a whimsical story that sings of lightness and promise. Your use of words: "Juicy apples,/Just begging to be picked;" is mouth watering. When I read poetry I want to hear its melody and taste what it offers. Good job, thank you.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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That is a lovely review, much appreciated.
thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written even-the-odds poem certainly meets the prompt requirements, conveying a message about "apple for the teacher." That teacher had better watch her step! :-)
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Your well-written even-the-odds poem certainly meets the prompt requirements, conveying a message about "apple for the teacher." That teacher had better watch her step! :-)
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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thanks for the amusing review.
Comment from Pantygynt
I rather liked this little poem that has shape and where first and last lines are synonymous. What bewildered me was why it came with an adult content warning. Am I being naive?
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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I rather liked this little poem that has shape and where first and last lines are synonymous. What bewildered me was why it came with an adult content warning. Am I being naive?
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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heavens - didn't know it did. will change that pronto.
thanks!!
Comment from Alex Rosel
Ha, ha! This is a fun Even-the-Odds Poem for this contest. I always consider October to be the best month to pick apples from the tree in my back garden {smiles}.
A couple of the lines seem a little "forced" to hit the required syllable count:
"A boy has apple in his mouth"
"Apple for the teach?"
But it's none the worse for that.
I particularly like your use of "Si" instead of "Yes"; it adds to the depth of Juan 's persona {thumbs up}.
Best of luck with this when the voting booth opens {smiles}.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Ha, ha! This is a fun Even-the-Odds Poem for this contest. I always consider October to be the best month to pick apples from the tree in my back garden {smiles}.
A couple of the lines seem a little "forced" to hit the required syllable count:
"A boy has apple in his mouth"
"Apple for the teach?"
But it's none the worse for that.
I particularly like your use of "Si" instead of "Yes"; it adds to the depth of Juan 's persona {thumbs up}.
Best of luck with this when the voting booth opens {smiles}.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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thanks. will double check syllable count once again.
did you happen to see "adult warning" anywhere on my post? one reader said he couldn't understand why it was there. I can't fine it.
thank you again.
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No, I can't see any "adult warning".
When I say some lines seem a little "forced" to hit the required syllable count, I don't mean the syllable count is wrong. I mean the line seems "forced" (by omitting a natural flow) to meet the count.
For example:
"A boy has apple in his mouth" is poor grammar. It would normally be, "A boy has an apple in his mouth". I'm assuming you omitted the "an" in order to force the correct syllable count for the line.
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thanks for checking for me. I asked Tom and he told me where to look to change it, so I fixed it. Many thanks!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fun evens/odds story of Juan picking an apple for his teacher and eating one for himself, from an English 'yes' to a spanish 'si' in any language apples are truly delicious, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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This is a fun evens/odds story of Juan picking an apple for his teacher and eating one for himself, from an English 'yes' to a spanish 'si' in any language apples are truly delicious, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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thanks, Dolly. Glad you liked it.
