haiku (bright medallion)
a 'sunset haiku' contest offering8 total reviews
Comment from Janetsue
This is a beautifully presented haiku with striking colors for each line matching the colors in the sunset. I think it is a strong entry in the Sunset Haiku contest and should do very well.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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This is a beautifully presented haiku with striking colors for each line matching the colors in the sunset. I think it is a strong entry in the Sunset Haiku contest and should do very well.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Thanks for such an encouraging review.
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You're very welcome!
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, well, and that's all. (LOL) I am fresh out of language to describe my admiration for your talent. Oh alright, if you insist! GORGEOUS HAIKU. Two concrete images grammatically connected? Check. Kire works beautifully? Check. Satori is an 'aha' moment? Oh, yeah. Lovely presentation? As always. Imagery? I did not even need the fabulous picture you chose.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Well, well, and that's all. (LOL) I am fresh out of language to describe my admiration for your talent. Oh alright, if you insist! GORGEOUS HAIKU. Two concrete images grammatically connected? Check. Kire works beautifully? Check. Satori is an 'aha' moment? Oh, yeah. Lovely presentation? As always. Imagery? I did not even need the fabulous picture you chose.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Thank you so very much, Beautiful Lady Dawn -- I'm just wrapping up getting all of my 1st quarter grades out this afternoon and you have put a huge smile on my face!! ;) :) You and Miss Priss have a wonderful evening up there! ;) Yvette
Comment from Richard Van Kirk
A wonderful haiku. You use words that paint a few pictures in my mind, yet they tell a profound story. "Horizon" becomes a creature that is punctured. I love "daylight drains away." A great line!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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A wonderful haiku. You use words that paint a few pictures in my mind, yet they tell a profound story. "Horizon" becomes a creature that is punctured. I love "daylight drains away." A great line!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Oh my goodness -- what a lovely surprise for the evening!! Thank you for these wonderful comments and bright, shiny stars, Richard! Here's sending wishes for some beautiful sunsets in your corner of the world this week!
Comment from kahpot
Wonderful your words are so descriptive-"punctures horizon' molten shelf" an excellent Haiku for this prompt, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Wonderful your words are so descriptive-"punctures horizon' molten shelf" an excellent Haiku for this prompt, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thanks much for your review -- here's sending wishes for some wonderful sunsets in your corner of the world this week!
Comment from Susan Larson
How clever and insightful to have the color of your words drain away along with daylight. Bright daylight, punctures, molten shelf, what strong, vivid words.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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How clever and insightful to have the color of your words drain away along with daylight. Bright daylight, punctures, molten shelf, what strong, vivid words.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thanks much for your review, Susan -- here's sending wishes for some wonderful sunsets in your corner of the world this week!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this lovely haiku describing a sunset. I don't write good haiku, but I recognize them
This one is good. :-)
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this lovely haiku describing a sunset. I don't write good haiku, but I recognize them
This one is good. :-)
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thanks much for your review, Janice -- here's sending wishes for some wonderful sunsets in your corner of the world this week!
Comment from poeandhungry
Molten shelf really sets this poem apart. Great choice of words. I like that imagery and a shelf is something I never considered the horizon to be. Same with medallion. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Molten shelf really sets this poem apart. Great choice of words. I like that imagery and a shelf is something I never considered the horizon to be. Same with medallion. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thanks much for your review -- here's sending wishes for some wonderful sunsets in your corner of the world this week!
Comment from NickieT
This poem is dripping with rich visuals. I love how the colors subtly shift down the page. Sometimes, I think that getting too fancy with the colors can detract from a haiku - but you have done a nice job balancing the embellishment without going too far.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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This poem is dripping with rich visuals. I love how the colors subtly shift down the page. Sometimes, I think that getting too fancy with the colors can detract from a haiku - but you have done a nice job balancing the embellishment without going too far.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thanks much for your review, Nickie -- here's sending wishes for some wonderful sunsets in your corner of the world this week!
