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rain sketches circles

new patterns each time

17 total reviews 
Comment from PoemsOfDD
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This is a good composition. A very effective 5-7-5 piece that paints a vivid picture of splashing raindrops landing on a surface that ensures no raindrop will fall in the same pattern. A most enjoyable read that has a calming effect at the thought of the rain falling. Great job! ~DD

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
    DD,

    So pleased by your comments about my post. Possibly, you may have 'skipped' stones over a stream or pond, which create different ripples in the water.

    Mark
Comment from patcelaw
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It is fun to watch drops of rain creating circles on the placid surface of a pond. I often remember watching a scene such as thins in my childhood. Many blessings for a good week.
Patricia

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
    Patricia,

    Did you also 'skip' stones over a lake or pond as a child? Maybe you did as an adult too. LOL

    THANKS again for your support of this post and others you have generously commented on.

    Boosting this verse with funny moneys apparently earned me many positive reviews and for the first time I earned six stars from two different reviewers. For that, I am super proud (-:

    Mark
Comment from Ogden
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This is an insightful observation about the surface of a pond. No lily pads or frogs, only the circles caused by the rain. An excellent idea, Mark!

Don

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
    Thanks Don for your insight. Maybe you or I will compose one about frogs sitting on a lily pad, which is not a Budweiser commercial. LOL

    My post is typical of my 5-7-5 style.

    Mark
reply by Ogden on 07-Oct-2019
    You're very welcome.
    Let's flip for it, Mark. You can call it.
    Don
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Very cool!! :) Love the imagery of the 'sketching rain' .... what an awesome way to view those circle 'rolling through' one another... like a Spirograph from when we were kids! I'll never look at the rain on the lake the same again -- thanx for that, Mark!! ;) :) Yvette ;)

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
    Yvette,

    So super pleased for this review and your comments. Likely you too tried 'skipping' stones on a lake or pond. And yes, that Spirograph and Etch and Sketch were things we enjoyed to play. Apparently, concentric circles you are aware of of. LOL

    I will reply to your six in another note!

    Mark
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem about the circles on the water caused by the raindrops. An amazing sight to see and experience to seek.

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
    Sandra,

    Possibly you 'skipped' stones on a lake or pond, which caused different ripples in the water.

    Thanks again for your support of my short verses.

    Mark
Comment from Janetsue
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This is an excellent 5-7-5 posting (which is different from haiku which isn't supposed to use poetic elements like alliteration). You have set up a soothing mood which I like very much. I love walking in the rain and could spend hours sitting by a pond...especially koi ponds. I'm so glad you shared this with FanStory readers! :-)

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Trust me, I am willing to stretch my Haiku writing to include alliteration. Not being familiar with the Japanese language or the sounds of their words, I am unsure if alliteration was an issue when this form(at) first began.

    Pleased you liked my soothing mood. I don't really like walking in the rain, but I do enjoy that feeling sitting in my car during a rainstorm (-:
reply by Janetsue on 06-Oct-2019
    Although I am in no way an intense student of haiku, I do know that people spend years studying it. From my understanding, however, poetic elements are not used since haiku represents an 'in the moment' observation and metaphors, similes, alliteration, etc. detract from sharing the concrete expression of that visual. (Tanka differs because poetic elements are okay.) I once had a white noise machine that had a recording of pattering rain that I listened to at night in bed. It was very relaxing. Big Smiles, Janet
reply by Anonymous Member on 06-Oct-2019
    Although I am in no way an intense student of haiku, I do know that people spend years studying it. From my understanding, however, poetic elements are not used since haiku represents an 'in the moment' observation and metaphors, similes, alliteration, etc. detract from sharing the concrete expression of that visual. (Tanka differs because poetic elements are okay.) I once had a white noise machine that had a recording of pattering rain that I listened to at night in bed. It was very relaxing. Big Smiles, Janet
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I enjoyed your haiku, Mark. Good job with its style. Your words create a great picture for readers even without a real picture. there is good flow, nice alliteration of the letter 'p', and nice color scheme. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Jan,

    I am always so pleased with your comments and reviews for my short verses, whether they are truly Haiku or just 5-7-5s. (-;

    Mark
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this well-written, thought-provoking piece. The water motif, to me, implies a powerful message about life too. Deserving of a 6!

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
    Janice,

    Wowee a six! The first one for this post and my first for this month. Thanks for your support for all those verses you have generously commented on. I guess those ripples affected you. LOL

    Mark
Comment from Joan E.
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I relished your vivid "sketches circles" that was so well reinforced by the artwork you selected. Adding abundant alliteration intensified the 5-7-5. Big cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
    Joan,

    So pleased you liked my 'sketching' in my post today. And yes, I do slide in alliterations whenever I can. Did you ever 'skip' rocks over the lake or pond to creates different ripples in the water?

    Cheers back to you too!

    Mark
reply by Joan E. on 05-Oct-2019
    Yes, I did skip rocks and I assume that experience helped to inspire your wonderful poem. Here's to happy memories- Joan
Comment from NickieT
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I love what you have done with your minimal syllables here. The rain is a wonderful artist if you know where to look. Great imagery with your words to compliment the perfect picture.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
    Thanks Nickie for your compliments on my short verse.

    Mark

    P.S. When 'I' give you a compliment, there is the 'i.' When something is a "complement" to something else (in this case to 'complete' the imagery), we use the 'e.'
reply by NickieT on 05-Oct-2019
    Haha whoops, that what I get for not reviewing my reviews =p
reply by NickieT on 05-Oct-2019
    Haha whoops, that what I get for not reviewing my reviews =p